I think this is your best work so far. Between gorgeous visuals, suspenseful storytelling, and delightfully brutal climax, you really delivered on all fronts. I feel like I say this every time but seeing your consistent improvement with every comic is just so inspiring haha. Please, please just keep on cooking! Side note i found it really funny that Minjun gets impaled through the chest and is more concerned about looking uncool to his partner than being eaten alive lmao
Nooo!! Not Anton, last name "Firstdead," disappearing in the People Disappear Here woods!
In full seriousness though, loved this entry! The lineless style and colors you went with is very lovely :]
I really enjoyed the conversation between the two of them as well - the clash in ideals despite all of their parallels was interesting to see. My main critique here is that it could've been a bit more than the characters standing and talking - I tend to add in lots of longer conversations into my comics as well, but something I've found really helpful for keeping them interesting is by adding a secondary point of interest in the visuals! Like having the characters physically do something while they chatter, or having the panels show something that punctuates their point (or maybe contrasts/juxtaposes it).
The first thing that came to my mind for this comment in particular is that maybe Lizzie could've been moving around, embracing her role as both child and cryptid by doing stuff like crawling around on the trees or hiding and suddenly reappearing to spook Minjun to mess with him as she makes her points. The tables could be turned and she could become more still or Minjun starts moving around as he makes his own points.
I'm definitely not an expert on it or anything, though (not to mention that it would've been wayyy harder to put it all into the comic within the deadline).
Overall though, I really enjoyed this entry! I'm definitely looking forward to seeing more of Lizzie in the future :] (Also the copy-paste panel on page 7 genuinely made me cackle, lmaooo)
Posted on Babes in the Woodscomic by marrionberrypi
Ended up being too late to vote, but I still wanted to comment on both entires!
Fuu, I absolutely loved your entry! The different gradient maps you switched between depending on the setting or mood really helped sell the atmosphere. It's genuinely really gutwrenching to see Minjun project Eunyoo so hard onto Lizzie.
The only critique that comes to mind is that some of the pages switch back and forth between somewhat blurry and incredibly crisp (made more noticeable with the scroll format), but I'm assuming that's just an uploading issue that you weren't able to fix on time.
All in all, lovely work! Loved reading through Minjun and Lizzie's dynamic throughout all of this :]
THIS IS SUCH A FUN CONCEPT!!! Ooooh I love the idea of two former humans turned monsters, one who leaned into it and another who is trying to retain his humanity, both of whom think they know the better way. Makes me really wonder what would happen to Minjun if we saw him thousands of years in the future. Will he eventually give up his humanity, or will he still be fighting? Could Lizzie ever regain hers? This is a perfect matchup and I love what you've created out of it!
Posted on Babes in the Woodscomic by marrionberrypi
FUU THIS IS A FUCKING MASTERPIECE I AM SLAMMING MY DESK THAT WAS SO GOOD!!! I LOVE your use of colors in this comic! Perfect in every single panel. The mental breakdown, the feral transformation, the way Minjun tried SO HARD to be nice to the little girl even after she ate him, the way his past haunts him so VISCERALLY. It's all so so good and I'm in love with this comic! I honestly think it's your best work yet, and I'm so hyped for whatever comes next!!!
I’ve already expressed my most of my thoughts in DMs so overall, I enjoyed reading your side, marrionberrypi!
I believe this is my first time seeing you use digital art for comics so it was a nice surprise! Though it’s a bit rough around there edges, I dig the lineless look you had going on. Makes the art have a painterly vibe. I think if I were to have any major critiques aside from trying to refining the style to make it more easily readable, it’s to work on the character’s proportions, particularly Lizzie’s. While Minjun and his colleague appear fine to me, there’s times where Lizzie comes off as more cartoonish than monstrous. I’m not sure if that was the intent and it may as well just be a nitpick but it can be a bit jarring at times.
As for the writing, I felt it was pretty solid for the most apart aside from some minor gripes I’ve already expressed to you in DMs. If I had another thing to mention, I do notice you seem to do a lot of “telling, not showing” not only in this comic but your past ones as well. While comics definitely rely on reading the text for the story, it wouldn’t hurt to play around more with the visual aspect to make scenes hit more in the emotions. The conversation reads like a conflict of beliefs (which is exciting in concept) but the scene has them acting out like they’re just having a simple conversation. I think this would’ve make the scene where Lizzie’s calling out Minjun’s bullshit and the scene afterwards hit all the more harder.
Aside from all that, this was a fun battle and Lizzie was a fun character to work with! Hopefully if these two ever meet up again, it’ll be under better circumstances 🙏 thanks for the battle!
Posted on Babes in the Woodscomic by marrionberrypi
I loved the lineless art style, super fun design choice! If I were to give criticism, I do think that you should try and smooth out the lineart juuuust a bit? In some places it seems just a bit too, it dont want to say messy but some spots looked too rounded, you can see this with some of the shading on the eyes. Other than that please keep experimenting with the lineless look, its great! :]
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Fuu! Insane!!
I think this is your best work so far. Between gorgeous visuals, suspenseful storytelling, and delightfully brutal climax, you really delivered on all fronts. I feel like I say this every time but seeing your consistent improvement with every comic is just so inspiring haha. Please, please just keep on cooking! Side note i found it really funny that Minjun gets impaled through the chest and is more concerned about looking uncool to his partner than being eaten alive lmao
Nooo!! Not Anton, last name "Firstdead," disappearing in the People Disappear Here woods!
In full seriousness though, loved this entry! The lineless style and colors you went with is very lovely :]
I really enjoyed the conversation between the two of them as well - the clash in ideals despite all of their parallels was interesting to see. My main critique here is that it could've been a bit more than the characters standing and talking - I tend to add in lots of longer conversations into my comics as well, but something I've found really helpful for keeping them interesting is by adding a secondary point of interest in the visuals! Like having the characters physically do something while they chatter, or having the panels show something that punctuates their point (or maybe contrasts/juxtaposes it).
The first thing that came to my mind for this comment in particular is that maybe Lizzie could've been moving around, embracing her role as both child and cryptid by doing stuff like crawling around on the trees or hiding and suddenly reappearing to spook Minjun to mess with him as she makes her points. The tables could be turned and she could become more still or Minjun starts moving around as he makes his own points.
I'm definitely not an expert on it or anything, though (not to mention that it would've been wayyy harder to put it all into the comic within the deadline).
Overall though, I really enjoyed this entry! I'm definitely looking forward to seeing more of Lizzie in the future :] (Also the copy-paste panel on page 7 genuinely made me cackle, lmaooo)
Ended up being too late to vote, but I still wanted to comment on both entires!
Fuu, I absolutely loved your entry! The different gradient maps you switched between depending on the setting or mood really helped sell the atmosphere. It's genuinely really gutwrenching to see Minjun project Eunyoo so hard onto Lizzie.
The only critique that comes to mind is that some of the pages switch back and forth between somewhat blurry and incredibly crisp (made more noticeable with the scroll format), but I'm assuming that's just an uploading issue that you weren't able to fix on time.
All in all, lovely work! Loved reading through Minjun and Lizzie's dynamic throughout all of this :]
I love the spookiness~~
THIS IS SUCH A FUN CONCEPT!!! Ooooh I love the idea of two former humans turned monsters, one who leaned into it and another who is trying to retain his humanity, both of whom think they know the better way. Makes me really wonder what would happen to Minjun if we saw him thousands of years in the future. Will he eventually give up his humanity, or will he still be fighting? Could Lizzie ever regain hers? This is a perfect matchup and I love what you've created out of it!
FUU THIS IS A FUCKING MASTERPIECE I AM SLAMMING MY DESK THAT WAS SO GOOD!!! I LOVE your use of colors in this comic! Perfect in every single panel. The mental breakdown, the feral transformation, the way Minjun tried SO HARD to be nice to the little girl even after she ate him, the way his past haunts him so VISCERALLY. It's all so so good and I'm in love with this comic! I honestly think it's your best work yet, and I'm so hyped for whatever comes next!!!
I’ve already expressed my most of my thoughts in DMs so overall, I enjoyed reading your side, marrionberrypi!
I believe this is my first time seeing you use digital art for comics so it was a nice surprise! Though it’s a bit rough around there edges, I dig the lineless look you had going on. Makes the art have a painterly vibe. I think if I were to have any major critiques aside from trying to refining the style to make it more easily readable, it’s to work on the character’s proportions, particularly Lizzie’s. While Minjun and his colleague appear fine to me, there’s times where Lizzie comes off as more cartoonish than monstrous. I’m not sure if that was the intent and it may as well just be a nitpick but it can be a bit jarring at times.
As for the writing, I felt it was pretty solid for the most apart aside from some minor gripes I’ve already expressed to you in DMs. If I had another thing to mention, I do notice you seem to do a lot of “telling, not showing” not only in this comic but your past ones as well. While comics definitely rely on reading the text for the story, it wouldn’t hurt to play around more with the visual aspect to make scenes hit more in the emotions. The conversation reads like a conflict of beliefs (which is exciting in concept) but the scene has them acting out like they’re just having a simple conversation. I think this would’ve make the scene where Lizzie’s calling out Minjun’s bullshit and the scene afterwards hit all the more harder.
Aside from all that, this was a fun battle and Lizzie was a fun character to work with! Hopefully if these two ever meet up again, it’ll be under better circumstances 🙏 thanks for the battle!
The way you write both characters thinking about how they need to help each other is very compelling. This was a fun read
Your lineless art style is really cute and i like the colors and mood of the forrest in this.
I loved the lineless art style, super fun design choice! If I were to give criticism, I do think that you should try and smooth out the lineart juuuust a bit? In some places it seems just a bit too, it dont want to say messy but some spots looked too rounded, you can see this with some of the shading on the eyes. Other than that please keep experimenting with the lineless look, its great! :]
This was a wonderful read, colors and visuals are amazing as always. Really loved the story
These were both really nice and spooky! Good reads and wonderful job you two!
It's incredible to see a showcase of the feral state.
It looks like all the built-up frustration gets unbottled at once. How magnificently done
This was a very strong comic too, arguably even without the broader EV context it would still be rather coherent!
Your best one yet visually and narratively.
OOOUUUUGGHHHHH. I've said so much elsewhere already, but you got Lizzie down PAT.
oh shit! Looking forward to this one!