Cybermanon: Great work! The harsh blacks and textured greyscale makes for a very visually striking comic.
Gojipoint: Love your pencil work and action! I'm not too sure what kind of phone or camera you have, but at least on an iPhone, the Files app has a built-in scan feature (just press on the three dots at the top of the page in the app. It can even let you move around where the edges of the scan is supposed to be if it initially came out skewed). It saves them as PDFs so you have to do some extra finagiling to get them into PNGs or JPEGS, but it's what I normally use to photograph my traditional art!
Like Pyrestitan noted, the tension of two predators stalking each other was palpable, but for me, the highlight was the comic’s direction!
Cyber managed to make a silent fight feel incredibly loud through the art alone. The choice of grayscale really helped sell the dark, oppressive environment, I dare even say the close tight space is claustrophobic and it adds more to the tension where Tremora was forcefully been put at disadvantage in terms of battlefield, but her cunningness is incredible how she figured it out the fight around. While some higher contrast in the line weight might have helped the characters pop even more against the backgrounds the overall impact was massive.
Again! The decision to keep it a silent comic made it bold, and the direction closely feels like we were right there in the middle of a Kaiju battle. The storytelling through the eyes of the creatures (in a way) was top-tier.
As for gojipoint, I really appreciated the effort in the solid pencil work! While I think the impact would have been even stronger if it were digitalized like your previous entries, I completely understand, it’s still a commendable effort!
I kinda ran out of steam for leaving in-depth comments/critiques, but I wanted to at least say that you both have very fun art styles and are doing really cool stuff with these characters and I look forward to more!
Awesome stuff here, great action and drawing detail, however in some panels the characters sorta blended with the bg, other than that it is pro level stuff.
As others have said, a lot of the photos are out-of-focus which makes it hard to tell what's happening. and some of the text is near-unreadable. It's unfortunate, because aside from that, the art quality is very high; those environments in particular really come alive with the detail and scale. I could feel the weight of all of the fight choreography.
Posted on Gusano de la Murete featurecomic by gojipoint
The art quality is insane. The use of value and the grainy texture genuinely look professional. That being said, each panel has so much detail that it's hard to tell what's happening, especially during the actual fight. The strong blacks definitely helped, and I think that contrast could've been pushed further.
One of the best silent comics on the site in a while
The tension of two ambush predators trying to get the drop on each other was so real with this, the grainy shading choice making it feel like we are watching from grainy cameras illuminating the dark. The ending is a little abrupt with the background feeling rushed, but it is forgivable with everything else in. While I was able to keep up with it, I can see where some line width and selective shading would be helpful with getting Coloso and Tremora to stand out more from the backgrounds, it's easy for them to get lost in some panels.
@gojipoint
The pencils are pretty strong here, photo quality aside, this would have looked really nice with some touching up. I'm very curious about the humans that keep appearing in these comics, I didn't find anything in the bio (maybe I missed it?) Hope your future comics are about to avoid this photo-fuzzy fate!
The Art style for this is, so, so, great. My only weird issue is the colors, sometimes it's a bit *too* hard to see the difference in the grey scaling but that very much could be just me! If wanted, maybe you could do a slight airbrush on the edges where you shade in the character underneath the lineart to help bring out some of the characters? Or a slight lighter outline, something like that could help if wanted, other than that very fun fight!
Thank you for the feedback and thanks for the tips I do wanna do more traditional I was going to use an ink pen as well I’ll try that more next time and the advice you gave me thank you!! SirJelly
Posted on Gusano de la Murete featurecomic by gojipoint
By and large this is a decent encounter. Decent combat, well drawn, very well polished, but it desperately needs more contrast between objects. Most objects are shaded in a very similar value of gray, and that makes things hard to distinguish guise, despite how clean your l8nework and spot blacks are. You really have to push the lighter and darker tones to makes the different elements of your scenes clearly distinguishable, and that will make it easier for the reader to parse what is happening, and will serve your inks and spot blacks much better, because they really are excellent
As someone who has regularly photographed my own pencil art, I know it can be hard to do without a scanner, but if you have the time I implore you to make sure that the entire page is in focus as much as possible when photographing. Especially when the text is hand written as well. There's several places where the text begins to blur out a bit and when some of the oencil drawing starts to blend together due to the unfocused camera, and that can lose you a lot when you're working in pencils. And this is a very solidly drawn comic and I'd hate for it to score lower than it should for a technical issue rather than any actual issue with the artwork
Posted on Gusano de la Murete featurecomic by gojipoint
I really love how you did Gusano in your style Cyber 🤩🤩 it’s crazy I didn’t know you were going to do an underground cave as well! Great minds think alike!! I hope you enjoy my part as well!! I’ll still ink it and all but it was fun facing against tremora love drawing her!!!
I liked the expressions, the movement conveyed - Was a little hard to follow due to the lighting on the pages, and some of the dialog is hard to make out. But this was a fun read! Wasn't expecting the human to play such a huge role in the fight!
Posted on Gusano de la Murete featurecomic by gojipoint
This art is so unbelievably polished, I wish I knew your secret! The speed paint was a nice glimpse into the process. Tremora is awesome as always and I loved how you put them on equal footing for most of the fight with it being in Gusano's domain underground. At times it was difficult to follow where everyone was but none-the-less I loved EVERY second of the fight c:
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Cybermanon: Great work! The harsh blacks and textured greyscale makes for a very visually striking comic.
Gojipoint: Love your pencil work and action! I'm not too sure what kind of phone or camera you have, but at least on an iPhone, the Files app has a built-in scan feature (just press on the three dots at the top of the page in the app. It can even let you move around where the edges of the scan is supposed to be if it initially came out skewed). It saves them as PDFs so you have to do some extra finagiling to get them into PNGs or JPEGS, but it's what I normally use to photograph my traditional art!
Like Pyrestitan noted, the tension of two predators stalking each other was palpable, but for me, the highlight was the comic’s direction!
Cyber managed to make a silent fight feel incredibly loud through the art alone. The choice of grayscale really helped sell the dark, oppressive environment, I dare even say the close tight space is claustrophobic and it adds more to the tension where Tremora was forcefully been put at disadvantage in terms of battlefield, but her cunningness is incredible how she figured it out the fight around. While some higher contrast in the line weight might have helped the characters pop even more against the backgrounds the overall impact was massive.
Again! The decision to keep it a silent comic made it bold, and the direction closely feels like we were right there in the middle of a Kaiju battle. The storytelling through the eyes of the creatures (in a way) was top-tier.
As for gojipoint, I really appreciated the effort in the solid pencil work! While I think the impact would have been even stronger if it were digitalized like your previous entries, I completely understand, it’s still a commendable effort!
I kinda ran out of steam for leaving in-depth comments/critiques, but I wanted to at least say that you both have very fun art styles and are doing really cool stuff with these characters and I look forward to more!
Awesome stuff here, great action and drawing detail, however in some panels the characters sorta blended with the bg, other than that it is pro level stuff.
Pretty good style and action!
As others have said, a lot of the photos are out-of-focus which makes it hard to tell what's happening. and some of the text is near-unreadable. It's unfortunate, because aside from that, the art quality is very high; those environments in particular really come alive with the detail and scale. I could feel the weight of all of the fight choreography.
The art quality is insane. The use of value and the grainy texture genuinely look professional. That being said, each panel has so much detail that it's hard to tell what's happening, especially during the actual fight. The strong blacks definitely helped, and I think that contrast could've been pushed further.
@Cybermananon
One of the best silent comics on the site in a while
The tension of two ambush predators trying to get the drop on each other was so real with this, the grainy shading choice making it feel like we are watching from grainy cameras illuminating the dark. The ending is a little abrupt with the background feeling rushed, but it is forgivable with everything else in. While I was able to keep up with it, I can see where some line width and selective shading would be helpful with getting Coloso and Tremora to stand out more from the backgrounds, it's easy for them to get lost in some panels.
@gojipoint
The pencils are pretty strong here, photo quality aside, this would have looked really nice with some touching up. I'm very curious about the humans that keep appearing in these comics, I didn't find anything in the bio (maybe I missed it?) Hope your future comics are about to avoid this photo-fuzzy fate!
The Art style is really fun, and for a comic on paper I think you did great with all the paneling and structures!
The Art style for this is, so, so, great. My only weird issue is the colors, sometimes it's a bit *too* hard to see the difference in the grey scaling but that very much could be just me! If wanted, maybe you could do a slight airbrush on the edges where you shade in the character underneath the lineart to help bring out some of the characters? Or a slight lighter outline, something like that could help if wanted, other than that very fun fight!
very hard to pick a winner here, for both comics i felt the art was very well drawn, but had some trouble following the flow of the action.
You did well with the illustration. There's some level of weight I can feel with the lineart, especially the background. Nice choreo as well!
Great job you two!
Thank you for the feedback and thanks for the tips I do wanna do more traditional I was going to use an ink pen as well I’ll try that more next time and the advice you gave me thank you!! SirJelly
By and large this is a decent encounter. Decent combat, well drawn, very well polished, but it desperately needs more contrast between objects. Most objects are shaded in a very similar value of gray, and that makes things hard to distinguish guise, despite how clean your l8nework and spot blacks are. You really have to push the lighter and darker tones to makes the different elements of your scenes clearly distinguishable, and that will make it easier for the reader to parse what is happening, and will serve your inks and spot blacks much better, because they really are excellent
As someone who has regularly photographed my own pencil art, I know it can be hard to do without a scanner, but if you have the time I implore you to make sure that the entire page is in focus as much as possible when photographing. Especially when the text is hand written as well. There's several places where the text begins to blur out a bit and when some of the oencil drawing starts to blend together due to the unfocused camera, and that can lose you a lot when you're working in pencils. And this is a very solidly drawn comic and I'd hate for it to score lower than it should for a technical issue rather than any actual issue with the artwork
Forgot to mention Gusano can burrow through any terrain this includes magma(lava)
I really love how you did Gusano in your style Cyber 🤩🤩 it’s crazy I didn’t know you were going to do an underground cave as well! Great minds think alike!! I hope you enjoy my part as well!! I’ll still ink it and all but it was fun facing against tremora love drawing her!!!
I liked the expressions, the movement conveyed - Was a little hard to follow due to the lighting on the pages, and some of the dialog is hard to make out. But this was a fun read! Wasn't expecting the human to play such a huge role in the fight!
This art is so unbelievably polished, I wish I knew your secret! The speed paint was a nice glimpse into the process. Tremora is awesome as always and I loved how you put them on equal footing for most of the fight with it being in Gusano's domain underground. At times it was difficult to follow where everyone was but none-the-less I loved EVERY second of the fight c:
Marcelo 😭😭😭
Tremora: SOPA DE GUSANO, UMA DELICIA!
BUG BATTLE BUG BATTLE BUG BATTLE 👏👏👏