Welcome both of you and congratulations on your submissions!
@Gojipoint
You actually have some solid lining foundations here, I'm eager to see it develop further in future comics. My one small ask is to check on grammar/spelling going forward
@JT
This is an interesting and surreal seeming encounter befitting of the Leviathan's origins. I think in a scenario like this where there are no human voiceboxes, you may benefit from some narration, similar to what was done in the Dairyu and Varaki comics, to help fill in the gaps for readers
I'm intrigued by this creature and her lore 👀 I'm a bit confused about what happened at the end, but reading her bio makes it clear that she has some reality warping powers so I assume the confusion is intentional. I'm left wondering whether she teleported somehow or whether she was never actually there in the first place. Very interested and I hope we get to see more!
Damn I'm sad this comic ended up unfinished! Those first two pages were excellent, and the sketches for page 3 look like they were going to be a great finished page as well. I hope we get more from you, maybe with a longer draw time so you can make sure you get everything done you want to do! Looking forward to more from you!
Posted on Gusano de la Murete featurecomic by gojipoint
Goji, I was really digging your vibes. you have a very literal, down to earth and straightforward drawing technique. I think it was honorable of you to save finishing the art of your own character for last. I think you could have saved the story by dressing up the final panel like we were going in for a cliff-hanger, but that's up to you. I love Big Worm though, such a rare drop from the kaiju gotcha. hope to see you (hear you because we're underground) around!
Posted on Gusano de la Murete featurecomic by gojipoint
JT, you made Big Worm so cute, I kind of forgot its your opponent! I think Leviathan is the spookiest wyrm in the whole tournament, so ANYONE looks cute next to it. I think I need an establishing shot at the beginning. Am I imagining that one day, Big Worm was minding its own business, foraging for Human Face Scallops, when the faces turned out to be attached to a kaiju? if so, that's pretty rad, please draw it next time! I think you're trying to get too experimental with panel layouts too soon. maybe stick to squares and rectangles of similar sizes for a while till you get the knack for it and read some other comics to study at the library. also, the part were Big Worm gets its head bit off: why not show it's body hanging out of the Leviathan's mouth?
anyway, the paintings are cool and the acting and expressions are nice to see! this was a pretty decent intro comic!
Some parts are confusing since I don't know what the label is depicting, but I think that's something that can easily be fixed by making more comics. I do find your style interesting and I'm curious about the characters and story you made and would love to know how you'd want to continue it! Nice work!
The artstyle of this comic is great; the roughness of the lines really lends itself to an action scene, and the scattered bits of color add a lot of pop while cutting down on time. That being said, we've been thrown right into the middle of their battle, which does make it difficult to understand what's happening; even a brief setup would've helped a lot. Seconding that Leviathan suddenly disappearing was a little confusing. Regardless, it was a very fun read, and the overall action flowed well for me.
The way you drew the waves is beautiful, straight out of an ukiyo-e piece. The portal setup also works fantastic for bringing these two opponents together. Unfortunately, the lack of resolution left this feeling incomplete; I would've loved to see more of a story progression, even if you have to sacrifice art quality to get there. Regardless, you did justice to both opponents; the detail makes them look very aggressive and ready to fight. Great effort!
Posted on Gusano de la Murete featurecomic by gojipoint
My reaction to this one is similar to your opponents, it works well on a technical level, but leviathan just disappears at the end and there's no real indication why. This doesn't really feel like a resolution which leaves the reader unsatisfied. This kind of ending can work but the reader needs some form of indication that there's going to be a continuation or a point where it's gonna pick back up, which jisy isn't there
This is a very nice looking comic for the most part! My only issue, besides the unfinished page, is that I'm a.bit unclear what exactly happens between pages 2 and 4. Making sure the reader can follow your plot is one of the key components you shod be focusing on when making a comic
Posted on Gusano de la Murete featurecomic by gojipoint
In all the details you put in this comic I can see what you tried to put, and it's really cool, you just needed more time, or better time manage to complete your vision, what you got here has potential, you just need to manage your time to get there.
Posted on Gusano de la Murete featurecomic by gojipoint
I like how Gusano's panels are colored and Leviatan's are monocromed, that's a nice artistic to comunicate their differences as Kaijus.
However the pace of the comic was a bit chaotic, it was a bit hard to follow the action, specially the panel on page 1 and 5 take extra care on how you arrange your panels.
It felt like you were trying to comunicate a lot of stuff in a short period of time, it kinda got a bit out of hand, I suggest, focusing on less pages, so you can add the detail you need and can do.
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Gojipoint: Absolutely love your line work here! It's clean and crisp, pairing nicely with the colors.
JT: The roughness of your lines here are super interesting - it lends well to a more fluid action scene!
Welcome both of you and congratulations on your submissions!
@Gojipoint
You actually have some solid lining foundations here, I'm eager to see it develop further in future comics. My one small ask is to check on grammar/spelling going forward
@JT
This is an interesting and surreal seeming encounter befitting of the Leviathan's origins. I think in a scenario like this where there are no human voiceboxes, you may benefit from some narration, similar to what was done in the Dairyu and Varaki comics, to help fill in the gaps for readers
I'm intrigued by this creature and her lore 👀 I'm a bit confused about what happened at the end, but reading her bio makes it clear that she has some reality warping powers so I assume the confusion is intentional. I'm left wondering whether she teleported somehow or whether she was never actually there in the first place. Very interested and I hope we get to see more!
Damn I'm sad this comic ended up unfinished! Those first two pages were excellent, and the sketches for page 3 look like they were going to be a great finished page as well. I hope we get more from you, maybe with a longer draw time so you can make sure you get everything done you want to do! Looking forward to more from you!
This one was interesting, kinda hard to understand what is going on, but fun nonetheless.
I really like your art man, something about it give me nostalgia.
Goji, I was really digging your vibes. you have a very literal, down to earth and straightforward drawing technique. I think it was honorable of you to save finishing the art of your own character for last. I think you could have saved the story by dressing up the final panel like we were going in for a cliff-hanger, but that's up to you. I love Big Worm though, such a rare drop from the kaiju gotcha. hope to see you (hear you because we're underground) around!
JT, you made Big Worm so cute, I kind of forgot its your opponent! I think Leviathan is the spookiest wyrm in the whole tournament, so ANYONE looks cute next to it. I think I need an establishing shot at the beginning. Am I imagining that one day, Big Worm was minding its own business, foraging for Human Face Scallops, when the faces turned out to be attached to a kaiju? if so, that's pretty rad, please draw it next time! I think you're trying to get too experimental with panel layouts too soon. maybe stick to squares and rectangles of similar sizes for a while till you get the knack for it and read some other comics to study at the library. also, the part were Big Worm gets its head bit off: why not show it's body hanging out of the Leviathan's mouth?
anyway, the paintings are cool and the acting and expressions are nice to see! this was a pretty decent intro comic!
I agreed if I’m able to move on to the next round I wouldn’t let you all down and try to drop at least 10 pages!!!
Some parts are confusing since I don't know what the label is depicting, but I think that's something that can easily be fixed by making more comics. I do find your style interesting and I'm curious about the characters and story you made and would love to know how you'd want to continue it! Nice work!
You have a really fun style and I wish you'd been able to finish more of your comic! What you've got is great though, nice work.
The artstyle of this comic is great; the roughness of the lines really lends itself to an action scene, and the scattered bits of color add a lot of pop while cutting down on time. That being said, we've been thrown right into the middle of their battle, which does make it difficult to understand what's happening; even a brief setup would've helped a lot. Seconding that Leviathan suddenly disappearing was a little confusing. Regardless, it was a very fun read, and the overall action flowed well for me.
The way you drew the waves is beautiful, straight out of an ukiyo-e piece. The portal setup also works fantastic for bringing these two opponents together. Unfortunately, the lack of resolution left this feeling incomplete; I would've loved to see more of a story progression, even if you have to sacrifice art quality to get there. Regardless, you did justice to both opponents; the detail makes them look very aggressive and ready to fight. Great effort!
The battle of the serpents! This is one I was looking forward to.
My reaction to this one is similar to your opponents, it works well on a technical level, but leviathan just disappears at the end and there's no real indication why. This doesn't really feel like a resolution which leaves the reader unsatisfied. This kind of ending can work but the reader needs some form of indication that there's going to be a continuation or a point where it's gonna pick back up, which jisy isn't there
Very good looking comic, short and sweet! You crushed it!
I really love the style, so scratchy and colored as though it was done with physical art supplies!
This is a very nice looking comic for the most part! My only issue, besides the unfinished page, is that I'm a.bit unclear what exactly happens between pages 2 and 4. Making sure the reader can follow your plot is one of the key components you shod be focusing on when making a comic
Thank you Cyber :3
In all the details you put in this comic I can see what you tried to put, and it's really cool, you just needed more time, or better time manage to complete your vision, what you got here has potential, you just need to manage your time to get there.
I like how Gusano's panels are colored and Leviatan's are monocromed, that's a nice artistic to comunicate their differences as Kaijus.
However the pace of the comic was a bit chaotic, it was a bit hard to follow the action, specially the panel on page 1 and 5 take extra care on how you arrange your panels.
It felt like you were trying to comunicate a lot of stuff in a short period of time, it kinda got a bit out of hand, I suggest, focusing on less pages, so you can add the detail you need and can do.
kai U ready?
Yo JT dm for a chat for you Kaiju