Cinnamon: Love the suspenseful buildup here! The little gag at the end was a nice little bow on top, lol.
Mixiemon: Your jokes here have me in absolute hysterics, lmao. "Don't hate us because we're an intergalactic war criminal - hate us because we're an immigrant" <-- What I'll tell people the next time I introduce myself.
Welcome and congratulations on your first strip! Although simple, the end gag of this really just works, and this little comic is a testament of how you can get a lot out of a little with some good timing
@ Mixiemon
I've been getting fed episodes of Ru Paul over the past few months by friends and I'm seeing that energy and humor brand here, I'm glad to see you continuing to find clever ways to illustrate action scenes
Very fun read! The dialogue was witty, and the America's Next Top Biochemical Weapon thing was a fun hook that added flair to this story. The texture of the mist also looks very cool and makes it stand out.
I'm sympathetic to your position; it's tough to make comics, especially on such a short deadline, and I can imagine it was miserable to have to continue working on a project you didn't like. I hope this doesn't discourage you; I do genuinely like what you ended up with, and I'm sure you'll be able to make something you're proud of later on.
Alright, that ending twist was hilarious. Loved all that buildup and foreboding narration for the Vile only to reveal its tiny size by comparison. Very fun story, and I'm sure a breeze for Oxymandius.
Thanks to everyone who commented! I will take everything into account and apply it to my later comics, if possible. Thank you to all, I hope to read more of everyone's comics.
Cinnamon, this was a cute ending! I see what you were going for with the slow build up and mystery around The Vile. I think you could have sold it better by showing more details about your creatureness, like teeth and poison ducts, or acted out how it moves in the environment. It's kind of a challenge drawing dark scenes in comics I know. Try to read more comics for not just pleasure, but as reference. Usually while I'm writing and working on my layouts, I open rice-boy.com, or look at the comics of void account Kubo, or look up pages from the comic Bone for layout and pacing reference. Kill 6 billion demons uses a ton of straight black as part of its color pallet and I'm on the fence if it works or not. But you're free to read it, study it and draw your own conclusions! I also was studying Johnny the homicidal maniac because the black and white is so full of intent in every mark and spot black, if you want to give black and white a shot
Anyway, Hope you had fun and we'll see you around!
I like green. Its fun how the universe keeps pairing up creatures with the same color way so we can play with monotone and limited color pallets and yours was fun, Mixie. Oxy is nice and sassy and I'm curious to see how that sassiness works against other opponents, because this tournament has quite a few big personalities to play off of. This is another comic im surprised to hear was a slog for its Creator because it just looks like you were indulging your own sense of play and having fun! Chose that happiness, sis!
I did ask for no criticism on this comic and just comments, i hated every step i made in this comic and knew it was a constant fuck up. I don’t want paragraphs of whats wrong in a piece that I think is shambles of mistakes.
A lot of what jelly said I fully agree with, so I won't focus on them too long. Especially with webscroll format, it's important to do establishing shots before doing a lot of close ups so that the reader has some idea of where characters are. I also think that the font choice is too large and takes up too much space, but may have been intentional to kind of fill up the emptiness.
I think curb stomps can work, if there is some other motif going on in the comic that is happening or if there is conflict that is better suited outside of combat. I'm guessing there was a problem with time, which is understandable, and may have fixed the issues with that.
I do like some of the angles you chose and wish there was some more detailing, because they could have been really fun! Oxymandius is a fun character and has a lot of potential, so I hope you are able to explore more comics and themes with them in the future.
In all honesty, this one didn't land for me. Part of it is that the tone isn't quite what zi was expecting, and that's a me problem and not a criticism, but to actually critique the content, Vile is just kind of there for most of the comic, and feels like he could have been replaced with most of the other kaiju in this tournament without affecting the overall comic too much. Part of that is just the reality of being in a giant monster tournament, where there are a number of very similar entrants, but Vile and his poison cloud had a lot of potential for a unique encounter that was not capitalized on beyond a throwaway line about neurotoxins. And then the fight is my other main issue, mostly because it's the textbook definition of a curb stomp. Vile doesn't even notably fight back, Oxy just beats the shit out of him with no resistance. It maybe be a personal problem, but curb stomps typically leave a bad taste in my mouth. It feels like the author is more concerned with "winning" than they are with creating an interesting encounter. Even if that's the power differential between the two characters, and Oxy really is that much stronger than Vile, Part of your job as the author is to make that encounter interesting. Like perhaps Viles poison cloud has formed into a thick fog that makes him hard to see, which gives him more of a fighting chance. This also creates an encounter more unique to Vile, which would address my first point as well.
The last thing I want to mention isn't a criticism so much as it is a suggestion, but I notice that in the webtoon scroll format you use, you have a tendency to draw things really big. Most of the panels require me to scroll down to see the whole thing, and that does have an effect on how I read them and how long I spend on each panel and that ultimately affects the way I experience the pacing. It makes it feel more dragged out than I think you intended. I would encourage you to try drawing some of your panels a bit smaller and experiment with panel arrangements .
A short and sweet entry, for sure. Reusing the same panel 4 tines is a bold choice, but I do think it works here. Simple setup with a simple punchline, fun little read
I think you did fantastic, especially this being one if the first, or if not, the first comic I've seen you do in this structure. Keep up the great work, id hope to see more like this in the future
Hahaha, what a great entry. You have a very nice sense of humor and I very much enjoyed reading what you cooked up. You did an amazing job, with a great length too!
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Cinnamon: Love the suspenseful buildup here! The little gag at the end was a nice little bow on top, lol.
Mixiemon: Your jokes here have me in absolute hysterics, lmao. "Don't hate us because we're an intergalactic war criminal - hate us because we're an immigrant" <-- What I'll tell people the next time I introduce myself.
@ Cinnamon
Welcome and congratulations on your first strip! Although simple, the end gag of this really just works, and this little comic is a testament of how you can get a lot out of a little with some good timing
@ Mixiemon
I've been getting fed episodes of Ru Paul over the past few months by friends and I'm seeing that energy and humor brand here, I'm glad to see you continuing to find clever ways to illustrate action scenes
Pretty interesting paneling, I liked the part where the panels looked like a funnel.
This one got me good hahahhaha
Very fun read! The dialogue was witty, and the America's Next Top Biochemical Weapon thing was a fun hook that added flair to this story. The texture of the mist also looks very cool and makes it stand out.
I'm sympathetic to your position; it's tough to make comics, especially on such a short deadline, and I can imagine it was miserable to have to continue working on a project you didn't like. I hope this doesn't discourage you; I do genuinely like what you ended up with, and I'm sure you'll be able to make something you're proud of later on.
Alright, that ending twist was hilarious. Loved all that buildup and foreboding narration for the Vile only to reveal its tiny size by comparison. Very fun story, and I'm sure a breeze for Oxymandius.
I like how sassy Oxy is! I hope we get to see more of this character when you've got the time to make a comic you're really proud of 🩷
The twist ending made me giggle 🤭 I wasn't expecting the tone shift and it caught me by surprise! I'm looking forward to more from you!
Thanks to everyone who commented! I will take everything into account and apply it to my later comics, if possible. Thank you to all, I hope to read more of everyone's comics.
Cinnamon, this was a cute ending! I see what you were going for with the slow build up and mystery around The Vile. I think you could have sold it better by showing more details about your creatureness, like teeth and poison ducts, or acted out how it moves in the environment. It's kind of a challenge drawing dark scenes in comics I know. Try to read more comics for not just pleasure, but as reference. Usually while I'm writing and working on my layouts, I open rice-boy.com, or look at the comics of void account Kubo, or look up pages from the comic Bone for layout and pacing reference. Kill 6 billion demons uses a ton of straight black as part of its color pallet and I'm on the fence if it works or not. But you're free to read it, study it and draw your own conclusions! I also was studying Johnny the homicidal maniac because the black and white is so full of intent in every mark and spot black, if you want to give black and white a shot
Anyway, Hope you had fun and we'll see you around!
I like green. Its fun how the universe keeps pairing up creatures with the same color way so we can play with monotone and limited color pallets and yours was fun, Mixie. Oxy is nice and sassy and I'm curious to see how that sassiness works against other opponents, because this tournament has quite a few big personalities to play off of. This is another comic im surprised to hear was a slog for its Creator because it just looks like you were indulging your own sense of play and having fun! Chose that happiness, sis!
I did ask for no criticism on this comic and just comments, i hated every step i made in this comic and knew it was a constant fuck up. I don’t want paragraphs of whats wrong in a piece that I think is shambles of mistakes.
A lot of what jelly said I fully agree with, so I won't focus on them too long. Especially with webscroll format, it's important to do establishing shots before doing a lot of close ups so that the reader has some idea of where characters are. I also think that the font choice is too large and takes up too much space, but may have been intentional to kind of fill up the emptiness.
I think curb stomps can work, if there is some other motif going on in the comic that is happening or if there is conflict that is better suited outside of combat. I'm guessing there was a problem with time, which is understandable, and may have fixed the issues with that.
I do like some of the angles you chose and wish there was some more detailing, because they could have been really fun! Oxymandius is a fun character and has a lot of potential, so I hope you are able to explore more comics and themes with them in the future.
Cute comic! I think some areas could have used more detailing, but this was a fun one!
I like how much action made it into the latter half of the comic! Oxy is devious and I loved his personality!
I love this dark style, the deep shadows really do it for me!
In all honesty, this one didn't land for me. Part of it is that the tone isn't quite what zi was expecting, and that's a me problem and not a criticism, but to actually critique the content, Vile is just kind of there for most of the comic, and feels like he could have been replaced with most of the other kaiju in this tournament without affecting the overall comic too much. Part of that is just the reality of being in a giant monster tournament, where there are a number of very similar entrants, but Vile and his poison cloud had a lot of potential for a unique encounter that was not capitalized on beyond a throwaway line about neurotoxins. And then the fight is my other main issue, mostly because it's the textbook definition of a curb stomp. Vile doesn't even notably fight back, Oxy just beats the shit out of him with no resistance. It maybe be a personal problem, but curb stomps typically leave a bad taste in my mouth. It feels like the author is more concerned with "winning" than they are with creating an interesting encounter. Even if that's the power differential between the two characters, and Oxy really is that much stronger than Vile, Part of your job as the author is to make that encounter interesting. Like perhaps Viles poison cloud has formed into a thick fog that makes him hard to see, which gives him more of a fighting chance. This also creates an encounter more unique to Vile, which would address my first point as well.
The last thing I want to mention isn't a criticism so much as it is a suggestion, but I notice that in the webtoon scroll format you use, you have a tendency to draw things really big. Most of the panels require me to scroll down to see the whole thing, and that does have an effect on how I read them and how long I spend on each panel and that ultimately affects the way I experience the pacing. It makes it feel more dragged out than I think you intended. I would encourage you to try drawing some of your panels a bit smaller and experiment with panel arrangements .
A short and sweet entry, for sure. Reusing the same panel 4 tines is a bold choice, but I do think it works here. Simple setup with a simple punchline, fun little read
That was an awesome encounter!
I think you did fantastic, especially this being one if the first, or if not, the first comic I've seen you do in this structure. Keep up the great work, id hope to see more like this in the future
Omg the tee hee and smile is so cute. I enjoy the black and white and how you use negative space
Hahaha, what a great entry. You have a very nice sense of humor and I very much enjoyed reading what you cooked up. You did an amazing job, with a great length too!
hype!