Dekkard: I'll be honest, I didn't look at Takame's profile before reading this so I honestly just assumed that your character was an abnormally large but ultimately normal woman at first, lol. Enjoyed the variety of angles and her characterization throughout this!
Cybermananon: I loved the textured look you gave throughout all of you pages! The fight scene between the two was stellar as well - you used Tremora's webbing creatively and all the action flowed together very nicely :]
I like the variety of shots you’ve got going here, including some lower angles that are quintessential for kaiju cinema to give the sense of scale of monsters, and points for getting a full color comic out. The most glaring issue to me that you can easily fix in your next battle is your resolution: start drawing in larger canvases with higher resolution, and when you export those pages they will come out looking sharper
Keep it up!
@ Cybermananon
Welcome back, and what a great comeback comic this is! Action readability is among the best of Round 1, and when I saw how much effort and intricacy you put in Tremora’s design I was excited to see that go into play in combat and I wasn’t disappointed. I have to also applaud you for having so much building background work throughout the comic, that is not easy to accomplish and it’s generally one of the things that hold many artists back from urban environment kaiju battles. While I would have liked to see more life on the ground floors that the monsters battled (cars, signs, trashcans, etc.) I still give you points for trying to go the distance all the same. It really helped liven the fight even more and cemented that these were giant monsters whose every movement affects the world around them. Excited to see more Tremora in the future
As a fan of arachnids and insects this one hit the spot for me! Loved your entry man! The art was great and the action kept me on the edge of my seat! Hope to see more of Tremora!
Masterfully done fight! The action would be right at home in a manga. You made the most of both opponents' abilities, and the destruction of the environment made this story feel so much more grounded. The fact that you did this in two weeks is remarkable, and I fear for your wrists.
Takame's characterization was super fun and kept me engaged for the entire comic. The action was very fluid as well, and you did great showing off Takame's speed and Tremora's webs. The story does feel incomplete, as it ends on this big cliffhanger which I assume would be a finisher. That aside, this was a fun fight!
Oh this was one of my favorites from this round! A classic Kaiju fight, with a great balance of showing off each fighter's unique strengths and weaknesses! I'm impressed at how long it is, and without skimping on backgrounds! The premise that Takame showed up after the city was already being evacuated because of Tremora is a fun detail that feels like exactly the kind of thing that would happen in this tournament! I'm really looking forward to more!
I agree with others here that you're improving with each comic and it's great to see! I want to give you a couple of things that I think could be useful to work on, depending on where you want to focus your work right now. I think practicing quick gesture drawings and drawing from life, focusing on the broad strokes and general shape and structure of both humans and background elements could really help up your drawing, while focusing more on varying up angles and camera distance could really improve your composition. If I might suggest a bit of a challenge, I'd like to see you play around with different comic formats, perhaps using a standard page instead of infinite scroll? I would personally wait on that until you're out of the tournament, but I think those things would really help you moving forward! I liked the flow of the battle in this comic, the way you showed how outmatched your character was at first, and then showed her powering up so she could keep fighting. You've got some good bones in your comic making and I hope you keep working on those skills that add up to give those bones plenty of meat!
I'll echo the sentiment that you are improving and also to keep working on studies and practice. The chain of events was easy to follow but the ending lacks any sort of resolution. We get the wind uo to what seems to be a powerful attack, but we.neber get to see the final.blpw pr any sort of victory of one combatant over the other. You're not the only one in this event that had this problem, but it's something I noticed in your progress posts on the discord as well. I assumed when the final was posted it would have a proper ending but that doesn't seem to be the case.
This is a bery impressive entry, given the time limit and the consistent quality of the work. I think others have already covered the good qualities of your work pretty well, so I'll just say I'm looking forward to what you have in store next
Dekard, it's so nice to see you out here strutting your stuff. the stuff is Takame. It's a really unusual monster design and nice to see some classic monster rep. I was enjoying reading your story, but it seems like maybe a page was missing at the end? I hope not. the rest of the art seems so finished. this was a great matchup and it was great to see you having fun!
cyberman anon, WHO ARE YOU? why are you so powerful!?
You made Takame look so cool. the anatomy of her muscles and ass with the shadow marks is so beautiful. and using a talking kaiju to help introduce us to Tremora was such a great writing choice! I love the way Takame is written in contrast to Tremora. The line about not wrecking too many homes was great. The fight choreography was very easy to follow and engaging while subtly showing off Tremora's weaknesses and powers. you went so hard on this! I'd love to fight you and would be pleased to see Tremora take the whole tournament. more spider love!
I really like the style of your art, and the action was phenomenal! I do think the text itself could be a bit smaller, it feels too big for the comic. I'm really interested in how the story would continue, very nice work on this!
I really implore that you look into doing studies of anatomy when designing characters, the feet were very distracting on this. The action shots were fun, some of the ones you picked are very difficult to convey properly. I'm a little confused on why Takame's clothes disappeared so suddenly, but it was also a little funny. Nice job!
I think you’ve got a great sense of action and pacing, I think this is one of your best so far. I’d really like to see you slow down a bit and put some more care into the details, there were a couple places where the lines were kinda rushed looking and the coloring went a little out of the lines. Just taking some time at the end of the comic to clean it up can make a huge difference. I know you mentioned the backgrounds need work but I think it was a good start on your background mastery journey. Keep it up!
I think out of the ones I've read so far, this is probably my favorite one, the ending is so interesting. Loved how both characters had a hand in beating eachother up, the texturing in the background, the story, I think this is visually great!
I think the colors you did were great, and seeing how long the comic is as a single image (the wip shots) I've seen are, honestly impressive, and seeing it colored now is nice. Good job!
You should try varying up the compositions and do bigger establishing shots as well as smaller close up ones. For example it would be nice to see a close up of what she was eating because I wasn’t sure at first. Congrats on completing the comic.
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Dekkard: I'll be honest, I didn't look at Takame's profile before reading this so I honestly just assumed that your character was an abnormally large but ultimately normal woman at first, lol. Enjoyed the variety of angles and her characterization throughout this!
Cybermananon: I loved the textured look you gave throughout all of you pages! The fight scene between the two was stellar as well - you used Tremora's webbing creatively and all the action flowed together very nicely :]
@ Dekkard
I like the variety of shots you’ve got going here, including some lower angles that are quintessential for kaiju cinema to give the sense of scale of monsters, and points for getting a full color comic out. The most glaring issue to me that you can easily fix in your next battle is your resolution: start drawing in larger canvases with higher resolution, and when you export those pages they will come out looking sharper
Keep it up!
@ Cybermananon
Welcome back, and what a great comeback comic this is! Action readability is among the best of Round 1, and when I saw how much effort and intricacy you put in Tremora’s design I was excited to see that go into play in combat and I wasn’t disappointed. I have to also applaud you for having so much building background work throughout the comic, that is not easy to accomplish and it’s generally one of the things that hold many artists back from urban environment kaiju battles. While I would have liked to see more life on the ground floors that the monsters battled (cars, signs, trashcans, etc.) I still give you points for trying to go the distance all the same. It really helped liven the fight even more and cemented that these were giant monsters whose every movement affects the world around them. Excited to see more Tremora in the future
As a fan of arachnids and insects this one hit the spot for me! Loved your entry man! The art was great and the action kept me on the edge of my seat! Hope to see more of Tremora!
Would love to see this one finished! You are getting better Dekkard!
Masterfully done fight! The action would be right at home in a manga. You made the most of both opponents' abilities, and the destruction of the environment made this story feel so much more grounded. The fact that you did this in two weeks is remarkable, and I fear for your wrists.
Takame's characterization was super fun and kept me engaged for the entire comic. The action was very fluid as well, and you did great showing off Takame's speed and Tremora's webs. The story does feel incomplete, as it ends on this big cliffhanger which I assume would be a finisher. That aside, this was a fun fight!
Oh this was one of my favorites from this round! A classic Kaiju fight, with a great balance of showing off each fighter's unique strengths and weaknesses! I'm impressed at how long it is, and without skimping on backgrounds! The premise that Takame showed up after the city was already being evacuated because of Tremora is a fun detail that feels like exactly the kind of thing that would happen in this tournament! I'm really looking forward to more!
I agree with others here that you're improving with each comic and it's great to see! I want to give you a couple of things that I think could be useful to work on, depending on where you want to focus your work right now. I think practicing quick gesture drawings and drawing from life, focusing on the broad strokes and general shape and structure of both humans and background elements could really help up your drawing, while focusing more on varying up angles and camera distance could really improve your composition. If I might suggest a bit of a challenge, I'd like to see you play around with different comic formats, perhaps using a standard page instead of infinite scroll? I would personally wait on that until you're out of the tournament, but I think those things would really help you moving forward! I liked the flow of the battle in this comic, the way you showed how outmatched your character was at first, and then showed her powering up so she could keep fighting. You've got some good bones in your comic making and I hope you keep working on those skills that add up to give those bones plenty of meat!
The manga energy of your entry is incredible
Un-fucking-real that this was done in 2 weeks. Holy shit, this was a treat to see. VERY good job on this one, Cyber!
The battle poses and overall designs really communicate movement! The hits look like they hurt!
I'll echo the sentiment that you are improving and also to keep working on studies and practice. The chain of events was easy to follow but the ending lacks any sort of resolution. We get the wind uo to what seems to be a powerful attack, but we.neber get to see the final.blpw pr any sort of victory of one combatant over the other. You're not the only one in this event that had this problem, but it's something I noticed in your progress posts on the discord as well. I assumed when the final was posted it would have a proper ending but that doesn't seem to be the case.
This is a bery impressive entry, given the time limit and the consistent quality of the work. I think others have already covered the good qualities of your work pretty well, so I'll just say I'm looking forward to what you have in store next
Dekard, it's so nice to see you out here strutting your stuff. the stuff is Takame. It's a really unusual monster design and nice to see some classic monster rep. I was enjoying reading your story, but it seems like maybe a page was missing at the end? I hope not. the rest of the art seems so finished. this was a great matchup and it was great to see you having fun!
cyberman anon, WHO ARE YOU? why are you so powerful!?
You made Takame look so cool. the anatomy of her muscles and ass with the shadow marks is so beautiful. and using a talking kaiju to help introduce us to Tremora was such a great writing choice! I love the way Takame is written in contrast to Tremora. The line about not wrecking too many homes was great. The fight choreography was very easy to follow and engaging while subtly showing off Tremora's weaknesses and powers. you went so hard on this! I'd love to fight you and would be pleased to see Tremora take the whole tournament. more spider love!
I really like the style of your art, and the action was phenomenal! I do think the text itself could be a bit smaller, it feels too big for the comic. I'm really interested in how the story would continue, very nice work on this!
I really implore that you look into doing studies of anatomy when designing characters, the feet were very distracting on this. The action shots were fun, some of the ones you picked are very difficult to convey properly. I'm a little confused on why Takame's clothes disappeared so suddenly, but it was also a little funny. Nice job!
An awesome battle and a gruesome end to the opponent
I think you’ve got a great sense of action and pacing, I think this is one of your best so far. I’d really like to see you slow down a bit and put some more care into the details, there were a couple places where the lines were kinda rushed looking and the coloring went a little out of the lines. Just taking some time at the end of the comic to clean it up can make a huge difference. I know you mentioned the backgrounds need work but I think it was a good start on your background mastery journey. Keep it up!
I love your grayscale and all the texture in the comic. Its a treat seeing your art.
I think out of the ones I've read so far, this is probably my favorite one, the ending is so interesting. Loved how both characters had a hand in beating eachother up, the texturing in the background, the story, I think this is visually great!
I think the colors you did were great, and seeing how long the comic is as a single image (the wip shots) I've seen are, honestly impressive, and seeing it colored now is nice. Good job!
fun comic and I like your character.
You should try varying up the compositions and do bigger establishing shots as well as smaller close up ones. For example it would be nice to see a close up of what she was eating because I wasn’t sure at first. Congrats on completing the comic.
is an eat or be eaten