Spartan: Incredible art and visuals! Seeing him transform on page 3 was genuinely super cool to see. Love your work!
Charlinear: A fun and silly comic! I love your use of geometric lines and shapes as a part of your artstyle. "The whole fight that didn't happen took up a lot of time" genuinely made me chuckle, lol.
This is a really solid presentation, excellent layouts, good writing. Art's punchy and got a lot of momentum and energy. Differentiating the dialogue bubbles with black and white was a good idea, though it might still be good to add tails (for example that panel where they're grappling threw me off for a second). Looks great overall though!
Lol the gag where they just watch shrek together is great.
I would say watch your page sizes/text readability. Differently sized pages can make it a little jarring to flip through (it can be done, just needs to be done with some purpose) and the text on the first page (not the cover) can be a little hard to read on some screens. Keep it up!!
Posted on Chase for the MacGuffincomic by charlinear
Good job for getting in your first comic! It’s a bit rough and simple but still reads good nevertheless.
I think the main thing I want to give my input on here is to try messing around with the composition in future comics so that both characters and dialogue have some air to breathe and the readability of the dialogue is a bit easier to make out. It can be a bit frustrating to deal with (believe me, I know lol) but you can get a lot of fun and wackiness with the right kind of page layout, esp with a character like Sunny.
Overall, cute comic! Sunny is v cute and I’d like to see what over shenanigans you come up with her. The use of the SpongeBob and Shrek images got a chuckle out of me (also the “fight scene”. I found it endearing hehe).
Posted on Chase for the MacGuffincomic by charlinear
”Window shopping with an empty wallet is wild” is such a good line. It got a good chuckle out of me when I first read it haha
This was a good short read! Your action poses are really good and the humor is great. I do feel maybe some SFX additions could be more utilized in certain areas like where 19 is thrown through the window with the glass breaking or the smoke cloud activates when Sunny punches 19 as opposed to after the fact but those are just minor nitpicks 😅
im excited to see more 19 comics in the future! He’s such a fun guy~
SpartanArts19- Lovely colors and shading! The way you made the smoke part away to reveal the log was so tangible and good. I agree with Rockman, your action poses are crazy. Loved the way 19 came up from their eldricht form back into humanoid
Charlinear- The outline in the characters is so charming! The lil 4th wall break with the Shrek movie was super fun. Looking forward to more from you
The thickness of your lines is really satisfying haha I think you did really well for not being too experienced with comics!! That last page was so funny, I’d love to collab with you at some point and make a silly comic tbh 🥺
Posted on Chase for the MacGuffincomic by charlinear
Wow, really enjoyed this one! Your work reminds me of old school VOID comics, in a good way. A good ol’ bump in the street resulting in an all-out brawl lol.
loved the ending and the humor, can’t wait to see more from you!!
Very silly of him to assume even the demigods of this city are able to afford basic necessities lmfao. I'd like to see 19 more in action, you've gifted us a new more villain leaning character to make the place richer by making the characters of Void City poorer.
I like how you did line width variation, it'd be cool to see you develop your variety of line thickness further. I'd love to see you try to do more fights, even if it seems hard, you'll get stronger as a result.
Posted on Chase for the MacGuffincomic by charlinear
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Spartan: Incredible art and visuals! Seeing him transform on page 3 was genuinely super cool to see. Love your work!
Charlinear: A fun and silly comic! I love your use of geometric lines and shapes as a part of your artstyle. "The whole fight that didn't happen took up a lot of time" genuinely made me chuckle, lol.
This is a really solid presentation, excellent layouts, good writing. Art's punchy and got a lot of momentum and energy. Differentiating the dialogue bubbles with black and white was a good idea, though it might still be good to add tails (for example that panel where they're grappling threw me off for a second). Looks great overall though!
Lol the gag where they just watch shrek together is great.
I would say watch your page sizes/text readability. Differently sized pages can make it a little jarring to flip through (it can be done, just needs to be done with some purpose) and the text on the first page (not the cover) can be a little hard to read on some screens. Keep it up!!
Lol Nineteen coming in with his game! Though not exactly winning..
I see you're going strong with the pages! They look polished, and the interaction feels natural!
Good job for getting in your first comic! It’s a bit rough and simple but still reads good nevertheless.
I think the main thing I want to give my input on here is to try messing around with the composition in future comics so that both characters and dialogue have some air to breathe and the readability of the dialogue is a bit easier to make out. It can be a bit frustrating to deal with (believe me, I know lol) but you can get a lot of fun and wackiness with the right kind of page layout, esp with a character like Sunny.
Overall, cute comic! Sunny is v cute and I’d like to see what over shenanigans you come up with her. The use of the SpongeBob and Shrek images got a chuckle out of me (also the “fight scene”. I found it endearing hehe).
”Window shopping with an empty wallet is wild” is such a good line. It got a good chuckle out of me when I first read it haha
This was a good short read! Your action poses are really good and the humor is great. I do feel maybe some SFX additions could be more utilized in certain areas like where 19 is thrown through the window with the glass breaking or the smoke cloud activates when Sunny punches 19 as opposed to after the fact but those are just minor nitpicks 😅
im excited to see more 19 comics in the future! He’s such a fun guy~
SpartanArts19- Lovely colors and shading! The way you made the smoke part away to reveal the log was so tangible and good. I agree with Rockman, your action poses are crazy. Loved the way 19 came up from their eldricht form back into humanoid
Charlinear- The outline in the characters is so charming! The lil 4th wall break with the Shrek movie was super fun. Looking forward to more from you
Great backgrounds and action. Can't wait to see more of your stuff.
this is a really fun and cozy read! love the vibe
great artwork! Really impressed by how much you fit into each page.
19 is a fun character
I really like your action poses, they are super dynamic.
I loved that they are watching the Shrek dvd hahahah
The thickness of your lines is really satisfying haha I think you did really well for not being too experienced with comics!! That last page was so funny, I’d love to collab with you at some point and make a silly comic tbh 🥺
Wow, really enjoyed this one! Your work reminds me of old school VOID comics, in a good way. A good ol’ bump in the street resulting in an all-out brawl lol.
loved the ending and the humor, can’t wait to see more from you!!
Very silly of him to assume even the demigods of this city are able to afford basic necessities lmfao. I'd like to see 19 more in action, you've gifted us a new more villain leaning character to make the place richer by making the characters of Void City poorer.
I like how you did line width variation, it'd be cool to see you develop your variety of line thickness further. I'd love to see you try to do more fights, even if it seems hard, you'll get stronger as a result.
you got her really in character, and the art is amazing!
Nicely done, you two!!
Spartan: loved your colors and action here, impressive effort!
Charlinear: good job on one of your first comics here!
An interesting match up.
Let's see some awesome comics!