Tgood: Gosh, what a strong opener! I'm downright obessed with your artsyle, especially with the chunkyness of your brush giving it a bit of texture. The way that you played around with the panels on a couple of pages (especially on page 6) was super cool to see!
Passion: Love the built up suspense and clean lines on display here! Blackblood just tanking all of the bullets without a care in the world helped build her up as an intimidating figure.
Tgood- Gorgeous artwork! The pacing and action panels were incredible. It's was so intriguing to see a hint of Blackblood's backstory in your round. Choko is such a cute, interesting character! I'm excited to see more of her, specially interactions with more characters!
Passion Punkin- Love the clean linework, and I'm specially a fan of the way the flashlight mover around on those panels. As someone who struggles with action scenes, I would give a lil advice of using more speed, blurr and action lines. It can give it more oomph!
You've got a solid entry here, good work! I know making a comic on a deadline is a tough and daunting task so keeping things simple is a smart move, but I do hope we can see you push for a more involved story in the future
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You've got a great artstyle and a good knack for dynamic posing. Visually this was a good read! I do have a small gripe, though, which is with the dialogue on page 6. Specifically when it comes to the flashback scene. on page 6 panel 4 we get flashback dialogue but have not yet been given a visual indicator of any kind that this is what's going on, and because the word balloons are the same as everywhere else in the comic, I though that the dialogue on that panel was something being spoken to her by either choko or the cat. I had to reread it a time or two to understand what was happening. And then I had the same issue on the final panel of that page, partially because we are then removed from the flashback panel by Two additional action panels, so my initial reading of that panel assumed, again, that this was dialogue being actively spoken to her in the present. There are lots of ways to make and use dialogue balloons and I definitely think it would be worthwhile for you to experiment a bit with different types of balloons to use to achieve different effects and help with reader clarity. I know this is a pretty long comment for a pretty small issue, but it's a little detail that can go a long way
you matched your script really well! Some of the panels were almost exactly how I imagined they would look! I like how the comic flows with suspense/horror in the first half and fast paced action in the latter. Some great poses as well! Defeated Choko on the pile of bodies was really well done.
For critique, I feel that the first half would benefit a lot from higher value contrast and shading on the characters like you did with the flashlight on the boxes in page 2. More dramatic lighting would really sell the scary dark warehouse mood. Aside from that I can't complain much, you did good! Maybe a bit more indication of the warehouse environment in the backgrounds would have been nice, even if it was just a few boxes.
Great fight! I'd love to see more Blackblood comics. Really fun character to draw as well, especially the wild hair and the demon install mode- its kind of amazing!?
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Punkin: Great job on this! I really love your character, I wish we got to see the alternate form in this because it’s very cool haha. I’d love to see you push more contrast into your greyscale, my only real critique is that some of the values were a bit close. Don’t be afraid to use straight up black for some of those drank backgrounds and really make some spots pop out with white. Since this was a dark setting there were some opportunities for some extreme lighting that would have been cool. But, I understand there’s a time crunch lol Overall, enjoyable comic and wonderful job!!!
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Tgood: wow, I adore your art! You’re great at action scenes and poses. Everything felt very dynamic. Choko is so precious and I love how you depicted your opponent 💜 I hope to see more from you soon!!
Tgood: I adore your style and grayscaling! Really dug your story and I think you'd benefit from your text bubble a touch smoother, but that's a small nitpick truly! You did excellent~
Punkin: Really like your character designs! Lil suggestion for the future, I'd love to see some sound effects to sell your action some more, but wonderful job!
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Tgood: Gosh, what a strong opener! I'm downright obessed with your artsyle, especially with the chunkyness of your brush giving it a bit of texture. The way that you played around with the panels on a couple of pages (especially on page 6) was super cool to see!
Passion: Love the built up suspense and clean lines on display here! Blackblood just tanking all of the bullets without a care in the world helped build her up as an intimidating figure.
Man both of these are so good!
Choko is the softest looking badass I've ever seen and Blackblood just doesn't care lol
I'm very interested where these two's stories will go!
Tgood- Gorgeous artwork! The pacing and action panels were incredible. It's was so intriguing to see a hint of Blackblood's backstory in your round. Choko is such a cute, interesting character! I'm excited to see more of her, specially interactions with more characters!
Passion Punkin- Love the clean linework, and I'm specially a fan of the way the flashlight mover around on those panels. As someone who struggles with action scenes, I would give a lil advice of using more speed, blurr and action lines. It can give it more oomph!
Great job overall, fun reads!
I really liked the look and feel of this. Great stuff, keep it up.
You've got a solid entry here, good work! I know making a comic on a deadline is a tough and daunting task so keeping things simple is a smart move, but I do hope we can see you push for a more involved story in the future
You've got a great artstyle and a good knack for dynamic posing. Visually this was a good read! I do have a small gripe, though, which is with the dialogue on page 6. Specifically when it comes to the flashback scene. on page 6 panel 4 we get flashback dialogue but have not yet been given a visual indicator of any kind that this is what's going on, and because the word balloons are the same as everywhere else in the comic, I though that the dialogue on that panel was something being spoken to her by either choko or the cat. I had to reread it a time or two to understand what was happening. And then I had the same issue on the final panel of that page, partially because we are then removed from the flashback panel by Two additional action panels, so my initial reading of that panel assumed, again, that this was dialogue being actively spoken to her in the present. There are lots of ways to make and use dialogue balloons and I definitely think it would be worthwhile for you to experiment a bit with different types of balloons to use to achieve different effects and help with reader clarity. I know this is a pretty long comment for a pretty small issue, but it's a little detail that can go a long way
Awesome comic Punkin!
you matched your script really well! Some of the panels were almost exactly how I imagined they would look! I like how the comic flows with suspense/horror in the first half and fast paced action in the latter. Some great poses as well! Defeated Choko on the pile of bodies was really well done.
For critique, I feel that the first half would benefit a lot from higher value contrast and shading on the characters like you did with the flashlight on the boxes in page 2. More dramatic lighting would really sell the scary dark warehouse mood. Aside from that I can't complain much, you did good! Maybe a bit more indication of the warehouse environment in the backgrounds would have been nice, even if it was just a few boxes.
Great fight! I'd love to see more Blackblood comics. Really fun character to draw as well, especially the wild hair and the demon install mode- its kind of amazing!?
I really like your style the characters look cool! And I loved that you put some words in japanese.
Awesome action on page 5 top panel! I can feel the power.
Punkin: Great job on this! I really love your character, I wish we got to see the alternate form in this because it’s very cool haha. I’d love to see you push more contrast into your greyscale, my only real critique is that some of the values were a bit close. Don’t be afraid to use straight up black for some of those drank backgrounds and really make some spots pop out with white. Since this was a dark setting there were some opportunities for some extreme lighting that would have been cool. But, I understand there’s a time crunch lol Overall, enjoyable comic and wonderful job!!!
Tgood: wow, I adore your art! You’re great at action scenes and poses. Everything felt very dynamic. Choko is so precious and I love how you depicted your opponent 💜 I hope to see more from you soon!!
Yours was simpler in narrative but it was a complete comic with good action, very solid. Meow....
You two knocked it out of the park!!
Tgood: I adore your style and grayscaling! Really dug your story and I think you'd benefit from your text bubble a touch smoother, but that's a small nitpick truly! You did excellent~
Punkin: Really like your character designs! Lil suggestion for the future, I'd love to see some sound effects to sell your action some more, but wonderful job!
Hyped to see this one.
Best of luck to you both!