Void Olympics : Round 1

Just want to say that I really enjoy your art style

Good job coloring and shading everything! I felt a little disappointed at the lack of drama in this comic though; it was a very straightforward story where the competition felt completely one sided and I didn't really feel like I was rooting for anyone. I thought the arrow was maybe going to hit someone, which was an interesting moment, but I think the joke ended up being more that the arrow didn't go far? I'm not sure. I think in future comics you could benefit from spending a bit more time thinking about both characters' motivations and tell a story about how those motivations conflict or combine to tell an interesting story. I want to see more focus on characters who are struggling to achieve their goals, and how they overcome their struggles. OP characters who always win can still be fun too, but you usually want to either focus on the struggles of their opponents (make the OP character a roadblock rather than the protagonist of the comic) or go a more comedic route where the interest comes more from jokes and gags rather than who wins in a competition. Anyways, I think your character is fun and I'm looking forward to seeing what you do next!

This comic was really cute and I enjoyed the gags! I'm a little confused about how Sirloin's powers (?) work, which makes the stakes a little hard to determine in any given fight. It's fun to see your improvement as you work on more comics, and I'm looking forward to more!

Hey, congrats on getting this whole thing colored!! I can see a definite improvement in your art already. And one thing I will absolutely commend you on is that you're unafraid to tackle difficult angles and poses; drawing characters drawing a bow is no easy feat, nor is drawing characters looking upwards. Pushing yourself to draw these difficult subjects will only lead to improvement! One small thing that I think would help your art immensely would be to try cleaning up your lineart a bit; there's a lot of instances where lines go past where they should (biggest example of this is on Dekkard's cheeks, where the underlying lines for his cheeks are still visible cutting through where his fluff sticks out). You don't have to clean the lines up perfectly--just focusing on the more noticeable instances will do wonders on making your art seem a bit more polished!

I think this is your best comic to date! The colors combined with the screentones is an interesting choice that pays off in the end because it's very visually pleasing. I'll admit I'm not always a fan of the borderline random humor, but this one got a good laugh out of me, lol. Loved all the video game references, especially the last panel with Dekkard XDD One thing that I do think you could work on in the future would be action/motion lines; often, the big swings you depict get a little muddled/hard to read (for example, on the first couple panels on page 4). Maybe using somewhat thinner lines with some motion lines would work better than trying to depict a blur? Or, if you do want to do a blur, perhaps using a blur/smudge tool would help sell the effect more?

Wow. You went all out with this on. Great job. The ending was really funny 😁

You squeezed out a lot of elbow grease for this one!

I think since guns are a fav subject of yours to draw you should make it a continuous soft goal to keep actively drawing them in your comics and illustrations. Sirloins proportions don't think early adolescent girls, so that's also something to keep in mind in the future.