MARRIONBERRYPI
Although I had to stop and squint during some moments, I really enjoyed the constant escalation of events! The back and forth between the girls was super fun, I loved how their personalities clashed but you still feel that they share a common goal. I was especially hooked between pages 11 and 13 - the way you paced the action and built up the tension was great. And that splash page at the end was a great choice! Seeing the devastation all in one shot really amplified its impact.
SWANPY
You nailed it! The color palette you've chosen for this battle comic is striking, and it's clear you've put a lot of thought into keeping it cohesive. Loved the reveal on page 7! And WOAAAH the Bridesmaids' transformations - they were utterly terrifying, yet SO incredibly cool. Can't wait to see where you take Blake next, I feel so bad for him!!
MARRION- The text is a bit hard to follow and some of the backgrounds confuse me a little. I do love the way you draw faces and expressions, and judging by the dialogue I can make out- I get an idea of how the story is going! I'm curious to see what you put up in the future!
SWANPY- The cover already had me hooked. Your artstyle, the choice of colors and the inking blew me away! Lovely drafstmaship, and the way the characters fot disorted was very eerie- super fitting for a Halloween comic! If anything, I'd say to push the body language a bit more. Amazing work!
Marrion: The text is a bit hard to read. Its small, a difficult font and some of it is too light. I couldn't super follow the story but youve got some great layouts and nice sketches. Awesome last page!
Swampy: I love Blake, battle me. Very crisp lines and colours, and the monster designs on the sisters? So awesome! Beautiful work, I'm greatly intrigued by your character!
Marrion: You do some pretty banger pencils. I get where people are coming from saying this didn't look complete/ polished. It could be a mix of the lighting being a bit dimmer in the pictures making them seem a bit more muted. If you have some time I'd recommend experimenting with lighting when you capture the pictures to go up.
What I struggled with the most was with the font and font color. Mostly with Olivia. It was a bit too light and in some places it felt like the text was smooshed together.
In all I did like the pacing and story.
Swampy: Very nice and polished. Really dig the colors and effects. you went pretty all out for this one!
Marrion: I love your design for demon Blake, and the sisters! The writing is spectacular! I'm sorry you couldn't finish, because I'm certain it would have been fantastic (although it already is)!
I'm sorry it ended up seeming unfinished. If I'd known the boundary for a finished piece lay somewhere south of where I ended up I could have probably cleaned it up or colored it or something. I did have some time left, after all. Maybe even just filling in the places where the paper ended could have helped.
It really is a shame, this is perhaps my favorite writing I've done on Void thus far, it's a disappointment to know I've not done it justice.
Marrion: shame that you didn't finished this, looked promising. But the story was readable regardless.
Swampy: loved how spooky the transfromation of the girls was, and demon Blake is super cool!
Marrion: It's a shame that it seems you were strapped for time. I feel like if time wasn't an issue the quality of the comic wouldn't have suffered as it were, it felt a bit too incoherent sometimes but you have some cool and ambitious ideas so all I can do is lament and wish you more luck.
Swanpy: I like Blake. It's funny how similar the fates for him in both your comics are. It's less funny what fates you gave to the sisters haha! Very morbid and cool!
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