GREGLY & MRPR:
Ohh, liked the more serious tone on this one, very nice rescue mission! Very easy to follow even if the pages were unfinished
FLUFFS & SNOWY:
This was so chaotic and fun! the halftone patterns look very lovely, and I liked the panel arrangement too!
fluffsamaprime/snowymoth these pages are so clean and good, the greyscale is so tidy and dairyu's faces are all majorly adorable. i was a little confused which order to read the pages in the first time but this time i read straight down in columns and it helped, im interested to see if you do more with the parallel timeline idea next round!
mrpr thank you for partnering up, i know it was last minute but i think the story we started here is cool!
greg and PR: we got to see another compelling gregly old lady gwen story, which I'm always a fan of. y'all seem to have bitten off more than you could chew with your time management. It's funny to see the production notes in the margins though (vase chunk with wizard on it). Old Lady Gwen stories always seem to give depth to characters that seemed flat before. I am dying to fight her.
Fluff and Snow: the art looks quite polished, which is great to see. I'm not sure your experiment with double-sided comics paid off, though. it took me a while to figure out that the characters weren't in the same room together, for example, and then I continued to be confused when physical objects did cross from one side (upstairs) to the other (the yard out front). but, the insinuation that old lady Gwen is using her interactions with Mozzie to try to get the two downstairs to shack up is pretty nice. I have a personal preference that people do NOT try to phonically spell out a character's accent for a couple reasons:
1) kind of fucked up to portray people's accents that way imo
2) i can't read so good already so i joined a graphic novel community and the phonically spelled words trips me up
very interesting work, both of the teams! it's interesting to have followed all of your artistic developments and see how those experiments in prior comics are coming together! good luck, y'all!
Greg and PR: That was very ambitious and I'm sorry that you couldn't finish every page to the standards you set out for yourselves but your story and the way you characterised everyone had a lot of heart to it and I liked it.
Fluff and Snowy: This was a nice and short read, I loved the screentones being used. I'll be honest and this is just a fault of my awful caveman brain but I read the first two pages more like 4-koma manga instead of a comic pages with a sequence of panels going from left to right. I am a mess haha. The jokes and interactions were really nice.
Greg/MrPR: Seemed like you guys stretched yourselves a bit too thin.. Why didn't you just cut parts or change the story to something shorter? I did love the violin scene! Very endearing! :D
Fluff/Snow: Tight pages, great linework, short and sweet story, it's not much, but it's tight and it's finished so grats on the great job! I love the way Mozzie is portrayed here, and the panel arrangement, if not somewhat confusing to get the order right, was creative!
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