GoldieI can't get over how much I love the way you drew Itami 🥺 All of your characters are super cute and attractive and nice to look at :3 I also don't know if the NPCs in this comic are guest appearances or if you just put enough care into their designs to make them all feel like unique characters in their own right. Both of those are fun!
This was such a fun way to wrap up the tournament! I love how you connected this round to the last one in a way that gives the whole tournament a complete feeling to it. Also poor Itami, just wanted to hook up with the hottest babe in town 😔RikunYou ran some ideas past me trying to make sure the story felt solid, which makes it all the more disappointing that you ended up rushing the story because time "got away from" you. I can't really give any meaningful critique on this, because the problem is just that it was too short for the story it was telling to feel natural. It's just one thing after another with no setup or development. I assume that's just because you had to rush at the last minute instead of being able to work on it over a larger period of time. Ah well. Maybe next time!
Goldie: once more knocking it out of the park!! Gorgeous art, and excellent story. I really like the ending too, and I hope it does lead somewhere :eyes emoji:
Rikun: sorry to hear time got away from you! For what it's worth, it looks like you had a good story going. If you feel so inclined, it'd be nice to see this finished!
Goldie I really love the little touches of color in yours. Amazing quality! Really enjoyed it!
Rikun this was short and sweet. not much build up but very cute
Goldie- dang quite good! i like the references to other itami comics, a misunderstanding setup and it actually was just a movie set. crikey's transformation panels and colors are pretty cool! itami looks great in your style, and the dialogue coupled with the return back to swan in the last panel really hit me as i was reading, it's done very well, nice work!
Rikun- Coulda been more but I like the ladies helping ladies route and them bonding over karaoke at the end. fun fun!
Goldie, very well-rounded story, and exceptionally clean art! you gave such a pleasant little chunk of the happenings to Itami, if that makes sense. you panel layouts are all so interesting, and your action/movement is all so well planned and even your word balloons are nicely organized. I can't wait until things like this are all second nature to myself, and something i can do even while burnt out. you're clearly highly established as a comics artist. great stuff.
Rikun! a simple story and a simple setting with one simple character interaction. you looked at how much time you had and expended the energy you had well. good job.
Goldie, you did amazing with Itami. Everything from them chatting about stardom to how she diffused the tense situation and even the background characters were awesome. Thank you so much for having this battle with me even though it's super one sided!
Goldie: just damn.. no punches pulled. Sweet message, damn good story, consistent art throughout, and the ending just ugh 🥰. The dynamicism!! The flow and movement!! Crikeys jump, the splashes of pink, I cant i just can't. I have no crits 😆
Rikun: I really love itami and I was dying to see more, that said, thanks for dropping a new itami!
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Goldie
I can't get over how much I love the way you drew Itami 🥺 All of your characters are super cute and attractive and nice to look at :3 I also don't know if the NPCs in this comic are guest appearances or if you just put enough care into their designs to make them all feel like unique characters in their own right. Both of those are fun! This was such a fun way to wrap up the tournament! I love how you connected this round to the last one in a way that gives the whole tournament a complete feeling to it. Also poor Itami, just wanted to hook up with the hottest babe in town 😔Rikun
You ran some ideas past me trying to make sure the story felt solid, which makes it all the more disappointing that you ended up rushing the story because time "got away from" you. I can't really give any meaningful critique on this, because the problem is just that it was too short for the story it was telling to feel natural. It's just one thing after another with no setup or development. I assume that's just because you had to rush at the last minute instead of being able to work on it over a larger period of time. Ah well. Maybe next time!