RIKUN, I appreciate how savvy Itami is about her drinks, it's so cool to me! That jump over the counter also was pretty sweet. This was such a nice moment to illustrate between Harvey and her :).
Rikun: I love how you drew Harvey, he looks good in your style :D I also like the splashes of color from the drinks, it's a fun little bit of visual interest which breaks up the large amounts of white. Itami deciding to step behind the bar and be the one serving the drinks was a fun little touch--I think I would've liked to have seen the comic ending by the actual bartender coming back and chasing Itami off, but honestly it's still a solid sweet little interaction between the two so no real complaints :P I think the biggest thing is I would've liked to have seen some of the grays in the backgrounds continue throughout the comic, and I think perhaps there was a bit of a missed opportunity to have some dialogue happening while Itami was mixing the drink, but overall, good job my dude!
@Sean: idk what's up, but I hope things are goin okay!
@Rikun: Itami is cute, and I like her spunk. I feel like I should know what Harvey is upset about or have some sort of look into his inner world, but this comic stayed pretty surface level. Idk, I think I just wanted a little bit more MEAT to this story. Some sort of inner character development or something. It's still cute, you just left me wanting more of something. Hopefully you can finish it up with a strong round 3!
Cute interaction between the two, and I agree with Gregly's notes on giving your panels space. I wish you'd been able to complete inking this, what you had looked nice!
Lovely act of kindness from Itami! What was he drinking before?
No notes on the story but the drink-mixing action on p3 should have been given some room to breathe, like you gave to the jumping-over-the-bar action on p2.
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