Footini - Even though these were sketchy photos, they were actually surprisingly easy to read and imo laid out quite nicely. I enjoyed it, it was a really wholesome story! I like the idea of Quint just blowing up involuntarily, and the way you showed that was simple but effective. I’m a little confused as to why Gutsmasher showed up? But I’m guessing that would be clearer if this comic had been completed.
Symon - Kudos for the page count! That’s like, more than one fully complete page a day, dang. This comic had lots of little creative decisions I really liked, such as the subterranean apartment (I can’t believe I haven’t seen one in Void before!) and the use of cyan in the flashbacks. Page 10 was especially nice, I liked how clear it was that this mysterious figure was looking through glass at Cynthia and Quint. That reflection was a really nice touch.
I noticed quite a few wacky proportions though, with the heads often too big or too small. You can see an example on the very first page with Cynthia, though it could be that her legs are too short as well. You might want to watch your colours too - individually you make some nice choices, like the aforementioned flashback colours and that sunset on page 7 - but overall they’re a bit dull and blend in with the characters sometimes. The first panel on page 15 for instance; there’s a lot of detail and very similar colours to Quint, such as yellow.
FlutterbyesMy palette is in need of some fine tuning. That is the first comment I've ever had about my intro comic, I appreciate that. I do enjoy putting in the cameos and the background details even though they may not be important enough to the story or telling a story, I might need to avoid too much of that. Thank you Flutterbyes!
[spoiler=Please vote on Short & Sweet! -Reecer6]Well. Technically it was two with one week extension. So. Not as impressive. I feel like I've left too much unsaid though. Thus a "to be continued". Sometimes I can't help but put in the set embellishments so I am glad they aren't going to waste. Thank you Reecer6.[/spoiler]
footini: ey, this is a cute little arc you've got going on for quint! feels very complete. the fight scene did leave me a little lost though with a lack of definitive place. the inclusion of guts in specific with such prominence (nearly equal to the actual characters!) is especially confusing, because i don't know why she's here - she has no connection to either of the characters, and has no character reason to oppose them! the bits around that though are def solid!
symon: daaang, 18 pages colored in 2 weeks is impressive!! you've got a ton of fun compositions and set pieces going on here, i'm very into it. the exposition's also very well integrated into the chase sequence, keeps it just full enough with substance without bogging it down. fun read!
Footini: Well, that's an Akira-worthy opener, isn't it? Once again, even though it's all photographed pencil, your ambition carries it. It's still a fully realized, cinematic story with chemistry, jokes and set pieces. I'd have to agree that while you do impress with these long stories, it might be good to work on a shorter story so you can get it more tied down. I'm sure I've said this before, but: Please get yourself some good lighting for your photos
Symon_says: Mmm, when your palettes are dark and high contrast, they're really nice, like in the intro. Some of the indoor shots seem to have values that are a little close together and information gets lost. I like the way you play with the ever changing aesthetics. Sometimes it can be a little messy, but you work in a lot of fun visual flourishes and extra information that really gives it character.
ArtofjoeHair battle! Cynthia and Quint should just put together a electronic hair metal band. Haha Thanks Joe of the Arts!
CandycornRhinoThanks! I'm trying to stay consistent with the colors and style, but, can progress truly be stopped? Was the story hard to follow between transition to the docs and back to void? Or was it the hair? Lol
PetrichorHah Much hair. So big. Thanks for your comment! To be continued is always tough. Have to wait till next time if this comic makes the cut.
ArtsandGoodiesMuch appreciated! Quint's room is little more than a four by eight cubicle so I understand the confusion. Any suggestions on portraying a minimal space like that? I will brush up on those figures and faces, Jack Hamm perhaps? Thanks!
Footini: I love the expressiveness in your sketches, you have a solid style of exaggeration that allows for clarity of expression on your characters. I do think you should try to do some shorter comics, especially when you have a shorter deadline. It would be nice to see more of your inks and colors. One thing that could help is figuring out when to omit action.
Alot of the action felt didn't help the plot. For example at the end of page 7 the bad guys are preparing to strike the house, page 8 is the bad guys preparing to strike the house. With a small deadline this is too small of a beat to justify spending a whole page on. You want each page to carry a significant story-beat and change something about the plot, this includes the action pages. Each action page you want the advantages to change, like one side getting a distinct advantage over the other that wouldn't be possible without showing this page. This also allows all the action to have purpose and feel meaningful giving it more impact. Thinking about these should help you trim down pages to make sure you have more time for each individual page and focus on increasing their quality.
You should also keep your font size consistent, the changing of sizes made it much harder to read, this is an easy fix and just something to keep in mind, but stick to one font size and only change it for extreme situations like someone yelling.
Despite all that your story and humor is still really great and always nice to see more of your comics.
Symon: I really like this coloring and mostly lineless style you have. I also like your backgrounds, though the space in Quint's room was a little confusing the rest of your backgrounds were enjoyable and detailed enough for the scenes. Practice your anatomy, In particular focus on your heads and one thing to look out for is in profile and 3 quarter view there is an indent on the shape of the skull where around where the eye is and the nose starts. The lack of that indent is the main anatomy error I noticed. Just keep making more and keep practicing good job.
What a batch of great and fun comics! I love the fact that both characters have huge upward hair lmao
Footini: I always like your storytelling and writing and omg thanks for including gutsey (and lil' stinky) in your comic! that fight scene was so cool! And uh, is guts wearing a Nopalito underwear?? cus i totally consider it canon now hahahjdha
Symon_Says: Dude good job on coloring this many pages in a short time span! I enjoyed the story a lot althought it ended so abruptly but i guess you have some continuity in mind, and i'll be eager to read it! :)
No critics this time, just wanted to say both comics were amazing <3
Footini: God one thing I like about your comics is your dialogue humor. Some nice writing, and WHY IS GUTSMASHER THE BADDIE???? It would've been nice to know why Gutsy would try to get Quint, or unless I didn't see it. One crit, some kind of text bubble tails would help, there were some panels I was confused which text belong to whomst. Good comic though, inspiring story.
Symon: Dude good job getting a fully colored comic done. I like the different styles going from the normal to Doc's techno stuff. And your action panels are really comicy, very flashy. Story was a bit hard to follow, but aaaaaaa to be continues kill ME. Looking forward to see more!
GOOD BATTLE THIS ONE YOU TWO ARE GOOD BEANS.
I really enjoyed this, Footini! Straightforward. If Quint had single handedly leveled part of the city he would probably run for the hills and get a pet dog.
I had a blast working on this. Maybe Cynthia Maria and Quint, just Quint, will run into one another again. Thank you for this battle!
Woh! Where does the time go? Or in this case, where did it come from?
A fated crossing of a techno-sorceress and the broom-headed bimbo! What could possibly go wrong?
Good luck Footini!
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