yooo, you already know i think the story here is total ACES, but i also need to point out that i super love how varied all these shots and compositions are, as well as the way you've tackled black and white linework. you use line weight magnificently, and even where it looks like it's a smidgen rushed, the lines still perfectly indicate what they're supposed to! continuing to love your work indefinitely.
Yarn: I told you when you showed me the script that this comic was solid. I am really impressed with the way you conveyed the story and the little hints in the enviroment. We got a glimpse of her past, and we finally have a emotional anchor to her plight, a future plotline to hook us and most importantly. A sense of agency and urgency to her plight. I am looking forward to see where she goes next.
yarn: The art starts a bit more solid than where it ends up but is still good all around; I had to review 88's backlog to understand who this jackrabbit character was and why he was so relevant to her. When you're dealing with lore from a few years ago try to find a way to better ease into those old details. There's a nonlinear panic felt from the story that really works in your favor, good job with the writing
the fortunetelling was such an interesting concept! I like Miwesa's struggle here, her scattered memories and latching onto the wrong things. The lineart is looking good, great pacing and expressions. Solid comic, great job!
William_Duel:
Just a small comment. Vortigern Reality. Are we going all King Arthur up in here? haha
I was worried nobody would catch that! Thank you!! ♥
Thank you Corn! Part of that was an experiment on my part, since I was using a smaller paper than normal to scan at higher DPI to emphasize line texture. I think I like the effect, but I still need to adjust my ratios and not be afraid of "wasting space".
This was definitely a fun comic to do, even with the limitations of real life trying to monkeywrench me!
This was a really cute comic Yarn, some shots I felt without color made Miwesa blend into the flowy background of all the plants a bit much and I think my only other criticism would be I personally like a little more breathing room for my comics borders and gutters, Gutters allow us to take a breath but here there is so much it all feels a bit crowded and confuddled and makes it seem like things happen really fast. Overall it was a super cute comic if a bit sad I like the symbolism idea as her thoughts and attitude affect herself it seems. over all a really solid comic!
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