Kura: lol I did not see that ending coming, I liked that surprise, that was a lot of fun! Short and sweet, good action, good comedy and a good swerve! Not much else to say, i liked it!
Reecer: I know you made it clear from the start you were just going to be tearing out as many shitposts as you could but i do wish you had considered your art at least a little more. The anatomy and facial proportions get sort of wonky and lumpy which ends up distracting from the writing, and theres too much white space. i DID find it funny in a lot of places, I liked the "travelling" cheat and the last panel was hilarious! I think you should do some expression and gesture studies so we can work your art up to being as good as your jokes!
I'm starting with Kura's because Kreta is cool and loves dinosaurs like me.
KURA:
It's a shame you think its impossible to tell a short story in a short time; what you have here is good! It has a funny payoff and it earned a chuckle from me! Your inks aren't as clean as they are in other battles and there is a typo on the last page that sorta ruins the joke but I only caught it on my second read-through.
REECER (PIECER):
The jokes fell a lil flat for me, but when it does work, the dialogue feels really natural. You still have some ways to go concerning your anatomy but you are miles ahead from where you originally started! I like that you tried out new angles and poses, even if the anatomy is a lil all over the place. Like yarn said, more backgrounds pls; i did like the background/newspaper/parody of the actual bg of entervoid.com you had going though, i thought that was clever
I think this would have been a stronger comic if you cut out a few of the jokes and focused instead on the art a bit more (though I do recall you saying you wanted to focus on the shitposts) but it's still good practise.
Good job all around!
oh my goodness.
reecer. that last friggin panel. killed me. i just. yes.
also i really like this coloring thing you did for this one. i know it was a one-weeker, but i wish you had time for a few more backgrounds. (though i still really like it as it is!)
kura! i love that the imagination vs can't actually play games thing. some good puns/references too! I do wish it actually felt like something happened in your comic though. this is fun! but it doesn't have the same weight as your opponent, even though you both focused on humor.
good job to both of you!
god, i'm stumped. i really wanted to come in here like "oh yeah i did thirty pages" but i ran out of ideas between these two way early. my tank only lasted until page 9. that's not even touching my all-time high page count for a 1 weeker! (my battle against gregly was REALLY GODDAMN IMPRESSIVE and i'm going to keep giving myself credit forever despite losing)
so, hey, at least they're 9 finished pages, in better quality than i expected to do, even. how the hell do you people do this with actual coloring and rendering in sdts i don't get it
good luck to kura! (enjoy your win)
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