Man, I'm kind of shocked how high a score I got on this one? I felt pretty insecure about the composition and the linework and the shading, and I was especially afraid that the writing was really, as one might say, up its own ass? I'm at least glad that last one wasn't the case for most people.
Reecer: Your writing made this a joy to read. Everyone had such fun chemistry and patter. There are some parts where some roughness in shapes or anatomy shows, but the flow of the comic helps keep the reader from focusing on them.
Barrel: Great presentation and artwork, but, unless I'm missing something, it only marginally involved Tyidid.
Dazzling work for a one weeker you two. Way to rock it and roll it.
REECER- Shocking pagecount and maintaining the quality throughout, besides. No mean feat when the clock is ticking. I feel this is one of your stronger comics- if not for the fact you didn't really have to follow the structure of human anatomy and faces. Your people is definitely something you need to work o ,but you sidelined it rather intelligently by not only your choice in opponent, but stylistically having fun with their look in how you drew them.
BARREL- Definitely left wanting more and a tad unsure what storybook elements adhered to what void life character and scnearios. Nevetheless, there was some rad coloring here. I just want your technical application to match it
Reecer: Hah! I love your writing lol! this was a cute story! I think you write Disden really well! Your anatomy would be improved with some studies- some life drawing and tutorials but we've gone over that before, you are showing marked improvement. not sure what else i can say about it but my guy you just keep on doing this thing an you get better each comic!
Barrel: MONSTER TEETH YES HELLO TO THE ENTIRE LAST PAGE that is the GOOD SHIT. I agree with Pyras that since you started the story with Tyidid it would have been good to end it with him as well as a "bookend". The story itself was a cool idea but its got some confusing holes, like how you never actually introduced the King it was just "once there was a kingdom but he hungry for power". page three I keep reading out of order because of the layout, it looks like it should be read vertical rather than horizontal. Also you should fiddle with the settings on your fill took because theres an empty gap between the colour and the lineart thats a bit ugly. But I love this as a way to touch on Geisser's mysterious past, I think it was a really cool idea!
Reecer: For one week for you this is pretty impressive. Your art is progressing little by little, and your comedy writing is getting better; this was a very entertaining comic. If you haven't already you should definitely start some figure drawing exercises. You can find browser based material online that will give you quick figures to draw one after another, a good way to learn how to prioritize your gestures and get faster at drawing good figures
Barrel: the art is terrif and it's cool to see some new insight on the origins of the demon Disden (and possibly some way to help Geisser break free from him?). I think the layout of pages 2-3 could have had some better composition so we didn't have so many pockets of negative space. Maybe some illuminated book style designs to match the supposed era. I wished we had returned back to Tyidid for some final moment at the end to properly bookend the comic.
I hope to see even more from y'all in the future
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