@Banana cute idea for a short story. I have a few quick critiques on the art that revolve mostly around readability. The line thickness for everything is almost always the same, which can make it hard to distinguish from characters and backgrounds. Varying up the thickness can really help make your characters stand out more. I have a few issues with some of the dialog. The news forecast didn't need to be cut off at the beginning. It is a bit distracting. Other than that when the characters interacted it felt natural, and very well written. So all in all take a little more time to fine tune the art, and you will be good. @Elge The story is well paced. I really liked the montage of photo taking. On the art front, clean up thous stray rough lines! Your art looks nice, but its hard to see when there is a huge circle next to their heads. Also the last panel is a bit hard to tell who is talking. So try and figure out a way in the future to illustrate who is talking. good job you two! cant wait to see what you do next