Empiredog: It looks like you're working out a good pace and rendering for high speed painterly comics. My main critique is that It took me until page 5, when I wondered why Jeanna was standing/ so funny, to recognize that she was sitting at the edge of a crater. I don't think you went quite far enough rendering that part of your setting. You gag could have been a lot stronger, and, yeah, you really need to be careful about how you reuse images. If both of those had been on the same page, and/or if you had modified one of them so it wasn't an exact copy, you would have pulled it off better.
The Man Who Planted Swag: you made Einga so cute and expressive! That was such a cute and charming interaction between the two of them! They weren't as front and center as last time, but I still noticed your dynamic effects.
@empiredog: sweet art! story was a wee bit dull though, just a dialogue in a way? I would have liked to see a bit more interaction, like in your previous comic. I do think this is one of the cutest characters out here rn :)
@The man: whoaa colouring is so much better than in the last battle!! total step up! but please fix that font, it's disgusting. And spellcheck, or get someone to do it for you. For good comic fonts, check blambot.com you are welcome :P
I really enjoy both of these characters and am going to be sad to see either of them go!
@empiredog: I really love your style and how your colors are very painterly in the first few pages! It does seem like time was against you for the remainder of your pages though, and I can totally feel for you if that's the case. These week long battles are ROUGH! It was definitely cool to see Einga in his other form too! Can't wait to see more of your work, and learn more about Einga in general!
@The Man Who Planted Swag: Wow! You really kicked major butt this round. Your style is super cute and I loved the interaction between Jeanna and Einga in this! I really liked how you were able to make the glowing effects in your night scene work super well, too! The last panel of page 5 is probably my favorite, it makes me smile!
Great job both of you! It was a cute and fun read to see these two interact!
Both comics are really fun to read! And impressive for being in full color! How do you guys do it in a week!!?? *w*
Though @empire dog, I do have to agree with Pyras here that the gag seems a bit drawn out. I did really enjoy the lore you gave us on Einga, with their form changing.
@the man, I really found your race around Void really entertaining. The cameos of other invitational contestants on page 5 was a clever way to populate your fore&background!
Super fun all around!! Great Job! Best of luck to both of you in the future comics!
empiredog: This starts out really nice, but I think you stretched the disappearing while talking gag out a big too long. And is that the same drawing of Jeanna in pages 7 and 8? For shame! This shouldn't be used for anything outside of a side by side comical gag, if that! It's clear that you stumbled by the end of this but we hope to see more of Einga in future comics!
swag: Man I love superspeed, I enjoyed watching this little comic unfold. It's pretty and well paced. I don't know how much I like the last panel of page 4, I feel like you could have done something more pleasing to the eye to show their clash of wills.
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