lanternlovers: Woooah some crazy stuff going on here. I'm confused but entertained! It got nice and creepy and mysterious. I think there may have needed to be another page to really get more punch out of what I think is a "Ah, she's a cute girl but she's betrothed to demons. JUST MY LUCK!" punchline.
Aaaah Shen you're getting so wild with colors! (And Demons! Man, I can't wait to see more of her suitors in the future)Now that Lily's new outfit is getting some action, I can see it's stronger this time now that it has a more clearly defined bustier. I also enjoyed the back and forth between the characters. So... is Alex effectively giving her his number, or is he playing a trick on her, or are demons really like "OH NO NOT ALEX?"
@Shen: I absolutely adore your writing, flow and colors on this. You really write your comics so organically it's very easy to follow. I don't really have much to say in terms of critique as I really admire your work and find it an honour to have versed you! Seriously, AHHH.
@PyrasTerran: Hello thank you! Is there anyway I could have made storytelling more clear? Is there any way you would personally change it? I think the issue with 4-5 is that I am attempting to write hints at his backstory without specifically mentioning it, and I am realizing that without layers of content, that is what is causing the confusion(?) Mort had made a passing comment before you should write that even your Grandma should understand it, and I think that this is the case. I struggle with this, and would like to know how to bring more clarity on what is going on!
Again, thank you so much for your critique, I would really like to improve!
lanternlovers: Your talent with illustration is undeniable, i'm gonna go into your comic skills: The story is a little confusing at times, I felt like I was blindsided about the possession, that it wasn't clear as soon as it could have been, and there's a few things that happen in pages 4-5 that I don't quite understand, I guess I have to re-read his bio? Then it doesn't really end either, that's a shame. Hope to see more from you in the future, the more you practice these comics the better you'll get!
Shen: The only real issue I have with the colors is that I don't like the yellow for the word bubbles, it reminds me of post-it-notes! But this is a solid comic all in all regardless! For the last two pages, I would have lightened up on the shadows/contrast/lighting now that the danger has passed, it would help set the mood a bit better in those pages (if you know what I mean *wiggle wiggle* )
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