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2016 Heavyweight Tournament: Round 1

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Heavyweight 2016

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2016 Heavyweight Tournament: Round 1
By mortooncian
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Jiko Shi
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Final Score: 7.83
2016 Heavyweight Tournament: Round 1
By Darius Corry
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"Knight Owl" Corry
Final Score: 5.88

Comments (20)

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Kozispoon
All-Rounder
8 years ago
MORT- Its all fun and games until shizz gets too real. This comic actually gave me the shivers. There's such an established tongue in cheek odd couple slapstick established between Greg and Jiko in your forum comics that seeing it fully realized here got rid of all the laughs- but in a good way! Art is all about eliciting feelings, at least I think, and this comic definitely grabs you with its themes. MRNO- Beautiful pencil work. Its so rare to see graphite on the site that isn't rushed or just simple lines. The content page to page feels like it has body and substance-kudos! I know that this being a multiple round tourney ya gotta get some build up going, but I gotta admit your side didn't really grab me, story wise

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Charlie
All-Rounder
8 years ago
Mort - your style is as cool as ever! I really like your colours and your expressions, its very good. If I had to nitpick a couple of things is that the characters basically exist in "flat colour land" as the backgrounds don't really get any love to let us really get a sense of where they are. The other small nitpick I have is that when greg shuts the door and is turning around to look at Jiko he looks kinda...psychotic happy? He doesn't look angry like we are then finding out on the pages after. I guess I'd just watch what emotion you are trying to convey. STILL these are all dumb little nitpicks I love your art and your comics so I will keep looking forward to more :> Mrnoitaull- I can't really comment much about this because I feel like its so unfinished it'd be unfair for me to really point anything out. I don't really understand what is happening in this comic, it feels like a slice of something bigger that we are only seeing a tiny mid piece from.

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PONBIKI
All-Rounder
8 years ago
Mortooncian I like the writing, pacing and the colors it sets up a nice mood. I don't know much about your character and her relationship to that guy in her apartment so that confused me a bit. I like that it made me feel uncomfortable and I wish I could help her. My other issues are every shot is basically a shot of her head and that get boring and repetitive. The backgrounds are very bland she works at a coffee shop spend sometime designing one even if its just for one panel to establish it, plus its fun to draw props the counter looks so plain. I was not sold that she worked in a coffee shop. Mrnoitaull Even though you did 3 pages you got your point across quick.( back when void started we all had a 3 pg limit to get the point across and it's hard) I like the whole kidnapping. I like your establishing shot of the cafe. Nice pencils and shots. I like the pg 1 pnl2 how it transitions into page 2 pnl 1. I admire how you try to give a lot of depth in your panels. nice over the shoulder shots and silhouettes and adding a detail behind a character to break them apart from the background. I think maybe working on your line weight will help you out more in the future as well.

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Energy
All-Rounder
8 years ago
Mort: Well, that got dark quick. Mrnoitaull: I don't know why, but I feel there's no real conclusion to the story.

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otakutaylor
All-Rounder
8 years ago
Mort: Whoa... When murderoomies gets serious, it gets dark. Props for dealing with something truly scary. And I love the color sense you used to tell the tale. Mrnoitaull: The work you have done here is rather nice. Love the choices you gave for panels and framing.

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mortooncian
All-Rounder
8 years ago
Jaykat: What's keeping me motivated is the desire to solve Jiko's problems

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Jetty Jay
All-Rounder
8 years ago
Mort: Really solid and so far well handled dark topic. I do have some concerns/discomfort about potential tone whiplash given the more jokesy tone you've had with Jiko so far and wonder if this hinders your ability to go back to that without it being super uncomfortable - but maybe that's something you want to play with as well so I'm interested to see what you do. Lack of background detail has been noted a bit so I wooon't dwell on that but I do like how you vary up the shots to keep a talky-comic bits interesting. Use of colour throughout along with textures on page 3 (I like that you didn't overuse them but it might have kept a nice juxtaposition from the first part of the comic to use them throughout the second part a bit more?). The story was great but definitely end heavy and the parts with Corry felt a bit like padding, like you really could have done this story without him. I'm not sure how you might have integrated him more into that, but I almost think it would have been good keeping this storyline for something else where you could have given that end bit a bit more centre stage and not have to waste time including Corry (while giving Corry a bit more of an active role in this comic). I also didn't understand the reference to the 'bargain', maybe that will be explained later? On a bit more of a tech note I think you could afford to give your panels a bit more breathing space as well, making the gutters a bit bigger. I really like the food in that first panel too I always appreciate good food drawing. MRNOITAULL: You've got some really beautiful pencil work here and it's a huge pity you didn't have time to clean it up enough. Due to line widths your bubbles often get lost with the way they taper off on the sides. I also am a bit lost with the dialogue throughout, for example on page two I'm really unable to follow what they're talking about. It may have something to do with previous comics in which case an author's note might have been appreciated! There's one other problem with flow where the last panel of page two and the top of page three don't gel very well - I expected to zoom back and see the man at the counter who the hand belongs to after that closeup of the hand, instead we pull back way too far to see other people, and I got a bit lost with what was going on. Still, really well drawn for the time you had and it seems like it was going in an interesting direction.

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JCee
Inker
8 years ago
Mort: All I have to say is...Poor Jiko!! Why must she suffer so much...dammit Greg XD Yeah, more backgrounds would be nice and help better establish the scenes more, but good work overall! Mrnoitall: I like how you drew Jiko in your style, but yeah I understand that you didn't have a lot of time to completely finish your end and that it was rushed. Better luck next time! I wish I had more to say, but good effort!


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MyHatsEatPeople
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8 years ago
[quote] Radj, I apologize for not giving you more so congrats on the advancement! I'll do better. Your opponent was Mortooncian.

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mortooncian
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8 years ago
Thank you everyone!! I'm glad you liked my round : ) I apologize for the backgrounds thing-- I got a job I didn't expect at all so applying and doing that sucked up some of my time I thought I had >_< also Mrnoitaull i think its funny ours kinda have the same story in a sense LMAO [and you drew jiko so cute ;-;]

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Darius Corry
All-Rounder
8 years ago
Pyras, yeah I literally came in here three days ago and saw my character in the tourney. That coupled with I couldnt find a reliable scanner to save my life. Mort, I apologize for not giving you more so congrats on the advancement! I'll do better.

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Radji
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8 years ago
mortooncan, i just want to ask: WHOOOOOOOT Dark as shit, but like always the atmospher is just super ! BUT JIKO AND GREG SHOW!!! WHYYYYY

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Animeshen
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8 years ago
Thren: ok well you've RUINED the Jiko and Greg show thread now so THANKS lol. This shit is fucking DARK, you definitely have my attention now! I need to know where this story is going, whats this bargain? i LOVE the colours in this, i love how you can take all those bright yellows and oranges at the end and make them awful and terrifying. I agree with pyras that the backgrounds are a bit sparse in some places but i know you were dealing with graduation so im impressed you got as much done as you did. cant wait to see the next part! #savejiko2016 MrNoItAll- im glad you remembered you were in this haha but i wish you'd remembered a bit earlier so we could see where this kidnapping story was going! your word bubbles get confusing on page two, i think they are saying each others lines at some point. theres some pretty nice shade work on the pencils though and you draw Jiko so cute!

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PyrasTerran
Writer
8 years ago
Mortooncian: Maaan this was a very unexpected comic (but at the same time expected for inside reasons) and that's great, your color psychology is great in pages 3-5 and these are just overall great pages, but your backgrounds in the first page could u se more work, since it's clear not as much love was given to any of the backgrounds they show more jarringly against your polished characters. It would be great to see you try something background-based in a future comic. Mrnoitall: it's a cute if brief little narrative but it feels unfinished, not because it's pencil but the pencil itself doesn't seem as polished as I've seen from previous works of yours. I think this needed more time to cook

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Darius Corry
All-Rounder
8 years ago
It's fine. I honestly forgot I opted back into this tournament when its started, but I didnt default so there's that.

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mortooncian
All-Rounder
8 years ago
Submitted!! I wouldve polished it up more, but, I'm not gonna dawdle on that



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Julz
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8 years ago
HELLO KNOCK KNOCK WHO IS THERE?? STAB STAB STAB