HATS: Yet again super cute and I love that this style is one that you can easily keep up with such consistency. I really love a lot of the body language from Gorgon, the second panel of page two is just really cute and bratty haha. My crit is stiiiiill gonna be nitpicking your handwriting - see the fourth panel of your fourth page how the t runs into the h of 'this' 'the' 'that' 'than' - it makes it look like a H at first glance. There's a few things like this where you need to watch the letter spacing just to make it slightly easier... Such a nitpick though on what is a really great and sweet (headbashing aside - a really appropriate and creative way to kill this character!) comic!
KETSUO: Oh no! Hoping for a speedy recovery to your wrist.
I like how this is about the affairs of monsters: Nana is in a class of senior monsters, and Gorgon is the young whippersnapper monster. It's a good context for this kind of silliness.
Hats I really like how you adapted to the small format of the tournament with what almost feels like a good newspaper character. It's silly and complete and I certainly appreciate how you take the time to ease into things and have little asides even with this kind of length. Strong stuff.
I didn't comment on your last one to say so but I really love this style! Everything's so cute and friendly looking, and I loved the little flashback. And all that together made the payoff death extra shocking. That was brutal! You made good use of your pages too to build up to it. I'd just say Gorgon seemed a little throwaway here? You didn't really use her powers or anything, so it seems like this story could have passed even if you swapped her out for any uppity, child-like character.
OMG Hats that comic perfectly evoked every possible emotion, often simultaneously! What a great way to kill of your opponent, too!
Ketsuo, I hope your wrist does better, and I'm sorry it got hurt and you had to default :(
Ketsuo Tategami:
So, sadly i hurt my wrist and my hand feels a bit numb, i will try my best to finish the three pages for tomorrow. Have a nice day you all
Take it easy then, man. Don't force carpal tunnel on yourself or nothing.
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