Shen
Love the attitude you convey of Sovereign Greece, very cocky.
I think the action shots needed to be a little more zoomed out so that its easier to make out what is going on.
For example page 8 works, even though it may be a little simple, it makes sense whereas pages 5 and 6 are a bit confused. A nice mix between these two would be great.
TofuBeast
Obviously you say you rushed this so with more time you could spend more time figuring out better compositions for the panels and also refining the art to clarify what is going on.
Looks cool though.
Your work really reminds me of this guys, might wanna just check him out for fun! http://anaseed.net/
Shen: This comic is fun and has a great ending I feel. Concerning the black and gray fills, the comic could have done with a bit more of it, for example SovereignGreece himself has dark skin and black hair, but you don't get that at all in the pages here.
Tofubeast: Hey this is really an upgrade and improvement from previous material I've seen from you on the site, great job it's a pleasant surprise! You probably could have done more if you didn't spend only 7 hours on it though XD but it's great that you didn't default or turn in too little of a story.
I know you both can do better than these actually, so hope to see greater work in your next comics!
@minteh: I...don't know how I managed to summon up the energy to knock this all out in about 4-7 hours, but there y'are. Next time I finish things before I go on vacation!
EDIT: nah I remember now, I just blasted this over and over https://youtu.be/4uJbcFvQ5Iw
Also: on the shading: originally I was going to make this way more R18 than it was supposed to be, but then I ran out of pages and time. >__>
@shen: You actually put wrasslin' moves in, and the action flows really nicely! Dig the gore and pacing as well!
Mintly, lol i had no idea where to find solid tones in mangastudio, i meant for this comic to be in colour but lost track of time so used tones to make the lines look less flat, but i dont know how to use them ^^;
Tofuuuu holy shiiiiit that was so cooool!!!! your comic makes me ashamed of mine!! your art game has totally stepped up! Im so glad i got to fight you!
I seriously would not have known either of you had trouble by looking at these. Tofu, if you did (most of) these in 4 hours I want to eat your brains and gain your powers, I'm nsure the extension really helped you out too, though.
@Shen - I love the comical twist at the end, the story as a whole had fun action and good shots, I read through it without any difficulties and thoroughly enjoyed the story that you put up. If I had to comment on anything, I think there are some places where you used tones that I think could have benefitted more from solid greys, then again I am not the biggest fan of tones as a whole so that could totally just be me.
@Tofu - Hot damn! I will be honest and say i think this is some of the best work you've put up on the site. Your anatomy looks to have improved while maintaining the style that I know and love from you. I do question the shading choices on Iron Leg on page 4, since it looks pretty loose and flowy, but then the shading looks very tight and form-fitting - especially the highlighted nipples were a little odd. I really, really, liked this and I can't say that enough.
Good job to both of you!
I literally got out of the car after a 5 hour drive up from LA and cranked out all these pages in 4 hours. It's not as finished as I wanted it to be, but hopefully they're all in there, because the site is constantly crashing and vomiting up 500 request errors, oops.
And shen, it's ok! WE BOTH STRUGGLED
EDIT: ADDED TWO MORE PAGES
unless something has gone horribly wrong mine should be submitted. i meant for this to be in colour... but i mis-managed my time and ended up just cleaning up my inks so theres a lot of places Im disappointed with because i couldnt figure out how to translate it from my original vision. sorry tofu =(
so, I'll be away from a scanner or computer for four days. I won't be back until Monday. I refuse to turn in something that's 75%-finished, so I'll have a full comic as a bb on monday-tues. I will probably submit what I have tomorrow just in case.
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