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Joey vs Koosh and Lapin

1 Week
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Joey vs Koosh and Lapin
By Lucky Nothin
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Koosh and Lapin
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Final Score: 6.46
Joey vs Koosh and Lapin
By Dechado
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Joey
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Final Score: 0.00

Comments (11)

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William_Duel
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9 years ago
This story was fun. Short and sweet, good length. I'll chime in with what others are saying: the lines are a bit problematic. It looks like your over leveled in photoshop or whatever art program you're using. There's all sorts of methods when it comes to cleaning your lines and making them solid. Play around with different methods. Scan in your work as a BW image. Or a quick fix I've seen others use, is to copy the layer, set to multiply, and add a very slight Gaussian blur. Adds a bit of fuzziness to the lines so your mileage varies. But in a high resolution image it's hardly noticeable. That's another thing, always make sure to start with high resolution and then shrink to smaller levels. I'd like to see you vary your panels up a little more. That's just my opinion. But it's easy to see a similar pattern or format to your pages. And personally I think three panels is too little for storytelling on a page unless it's a simple gag with a punchline. Otherwise this is very solid work.

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Wei Ingnan
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9 years ago
good basics and sense of design....and yes obviously rushed....but quite good given the amount of time you spent...I like the chunky lines and would like to see you do more with more time.

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Lucky Nothin
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9 years ago
Thanks guys. The comic literally just scanned this way this only thing I did was put the text there and erase a misplaced line. I'm not really sure if there's a way to fix that. I'm working on bgs but I kinda had to rush this time.

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neens
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9 years ago
I agree with the brush thing- it's too pixelly. but I do like what you're doing here! I'd like to see more tones, whether that means more hatching or solid black or whatever. your bgs need a little more to them, while there's not much to show what you do have is kinda weak (ie the street view perspectives) but I think this is pretty solid honestly.

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Rose
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9 years ago
Nothin, I loved this comic! I think you nailed the style and I love the way you did the borders. The characters were hilarious, and I hope I get to see more of these two! As for the "rough brush," I'm guessing it's just the result of increasing the contrast/adjusting the levels to make it black and white instead of showing the color of the paper you worked on, etc. I think it would have actually looked really cool if you left more of the original appearance—maybe make a few adjustments to make it sharper and clearer, but the grain of the paper would have been a fun addition to your comic, and the edges of your linework would probably have turned out much smoother. Anyway, this was fun! I hope we get more from you, because you really rocked this one IMO

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Puzzlething
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9 years ago
Nothin - Ah dude, that was great! But I like starting off by being a jerk, so I'll gush at the end. I really like the rough brush you're using, but it's a little too harsh? It's hard to explain, but sometimes the roughness feels less organic and more pixelated. You might be able to fix that just by working at a higher dpi or adding some anti-aliasing, but if that's just the unavoidable nature of the brush, I'd say look for something with a little more of an organic feel. You didn't have alot of background stuff, but I think you did a good job filling the empty space in nice ways (like with butt!). The different effects really fit the mood of whatever was going on, and I think you did a nice job of naturally placing your word bubbles (something I'm completely terrible at). On page 3 the perspective is kinda screwy, next time make sure you put a horizon line down, because here you look at little unsure about where you're receding too. The bricks don't seem to recede at all, and they're actually at a more extreme angle than the sidewalk, which is the opposite of how it should be. The bricks should be slowly working more and more towards a horizontal as they get closer to the horizon line. It's a great comic dude! I think the rough line is a good idea, and I think your characters always have great expressions, and an amazing sense of action and movement. While it didn't have a punch-line or anything, it was pleasant and funny throughout. I missed seeing your comics, especially Koosh. He's such a simple character, but he really comes to life when you draw him.

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Sean Patrick Kelly
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9 years ago
an amusing little comic Nothin, and in one week the pages look great, and something else i noticed was how your pages bottom halves are the biggest on each, but the small panels on the rest of the pages are always varied i don't know why enjoyed that little touch. good strip overall except one detail is bugging me, on page 3 bottom panel is that a door or window? Elge hope your bumpy road smooths out

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Fearn
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9 years ago
Nothin - this made me giggle fo sho. What sort of relationship do they have like?! :D Anyway I am not sure this drawing tiny really works to your benefit, I think that always drawing larger and then scaling down and not the opposite is bound to work better. But then it's nice to experiment, so good on you for doing that! :)

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Dechado
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9 years ago
Hey guys. I don't know if you've been around my tumblr, or not, or whatever. But I had a really bad episode recently and just, messed up everything. I'll continue working on my side and upload it as a Beyond Battle. I doubt I can be able to finish it in less than 8 hours. I'm sorry Nothin, you deserved a better opponent than me.

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Kozispoon
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9 years ago
Joey at it again?? Be still my beating heart! :D

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Animeshen
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9 years ago
YES!! my adorable squishy bad boys!