Thresher and Space-aged I promised a critique and you got one!
I'll be echoing everyone else in saying the minimal color scheme you worked with really enhanced your comic. It's a nice alternative than just doing black and white. The story you went with was definitely unexpected for a tag team tournament, but I think stands well enough on its own as a creative slant on the tournaments theme. Your story totally gave me Niel Gaiman vibes- a la Sandman. I dunno if you've read the comic 'World's End', but this eerie hotel lost amidst a blizzard and a wild beast roaming outside theme was spot on.
I will admit the ending felt anti-climactic and even with the addition of the missing page it still lacked the punch the build up of your tale was promising. In all honesty (and not to give myself a self inflicted burn) I feel Mimi could've been edited out and this would've been stronger for it. You had a nice intriguing lead in on page 7, but it just falls flat when she boops Beo on the head on page 11.
I think your win shows that despite the hiccups you guys knocked it outta the park and I can only apologize that our side didn't bring our best. I doff my hat to your win and look forward to seeing what you guys bring during round two!
thresher/space-aged - The blue style of this was really cool, and fit the tone of the story well. I did't quite know exactly what was going on with the plot/backstory, but it kept me interested, and I'd be intrigued to read more about this setting. Very good job here!
kozi/keechee - Your styles worked really well together! There were parts especially towards the end where I noticed little dips in quality, but overall it was so entertaining. I liked your vision of the Void Arena, and how you depicted the tourney and its characters. Well done!
Thresher/Spaceaged: I'm jumping into this comic completely fresh, not knowing anything about the characters, so I'm gonna take a stab at page 7 and guess that Tabris and Mimi are descendants of Joan of Arc, or Mimi is and Tabris looks like her? Either way it's an interesting world that was built. The ending was a little too quick but I can't deny how great the artwork is.
Kozi/Keechee: I can't remember the last time someone ran with the tournament archetype and added an actual honest-to-God arena into it. This excites my middle school/high school sensibilities, once filled with shonen anime and pokemon. I'd love to see more people do it this way. I love Mimi to death and the chemistry with Beo is nice.
Kichi/Kozi
So you took ye olde stadium battle setup and managed to spice things up a bit. Obviously anything that provides some sense of unity and connectedness between all the disparate weirdos of Void is great- and you have cameos in spades! I like the bracelets and the pairing off of all the characters. So many bad ‘tudes up in that room! I thought you represented your characters and your opponents faithfully with an abbreviated but effective and clever fight, which is more than can be said for some. Your power usage and dialogue pads out a breif encounter I’d have liked to see more of. The uncolored page hurts the total package but very good looking comic all around. The expressions and jokes hidden in the details are a particular highlight for me- they made reading the comic again and again worthwhile!
Thresher/Spaceaged
What a beautiful page 7! You’ve got lovely colors and feels throughout comic, utilizing a simple monochromatic palette and setting are very effective. Snow effects washing out pages and muted tones, backgrounds fading into obscurity through hard perspectives all attribute to the surreal setting. The closeness and context of your characters interactions was already established in other comics so it all felt natural, conversational and real. Your comic has some nice layouts but they feel so small, with all the small boxes, the work shines when you break out of them with the blizzard and the wolfs teeth menace splashes. Still, expert level synthesis between you two.
Clever and bizarre usage of opponents and story setup that wraps up a bit hastily but time was short. You’ve got some big ideas in play here- concepts of the female archetypal heroine, mythology, isolation and timelines. I hope you carry forth on this progression and have the chance to tell a complete tale- complicating these ideas. Short ending becuase i could have kept reading this setup The Shining for quite a few more pages since it was all such a pleasure to look at.
Space Thresher: First I really like how you've tied your characters together shortly before the tournament as it makes their adventures together logical. And this way we get to see interaction and possibly character development between them. The comic is very blue but this is a good thing, it's never overpowering, oversaturated or anything like that. The hue helps to create a mood throughout the comic so it's a very sensible choice. The story was bizarre but entertaining and yet ultimately asked too many questions that weren't answered. "The Origin of Mimi" bit was a little creative but did not answer the overall question of Mimi's role in this supernatural hotel. I think it would have been better if you had set up the Hotel as the setting for the rest of the tournament as you seem to have them leave it at the end making it really rather anticlimactic. Quality degrades over time and no where is it more obvious than the last page but understandable under the time limit. You varied up your angles and tried to make the comic really interesting. So colossal effort the both of you, you're pretty strong contenders!
KoziKichi: There are parts of this comic which are genuinely interesting and entertaining in the vein of Mimi's comics. Yet there are noticeable dips in quality in linework and the like and it's only because some parts are much better crafted that the difference becomes obvious. Sometimes the details are amazing and great and others times...not so much. I don't think I have to mention page 8. Ultimately the story feels unfinished. Otherwise the story and dialogue were well crafted and fun and it's always a pleasure to see Mimi in action.
Last page didn't upload? Let's call that the ominous cliffhanger! Actually I didn't even notice the last page was uploaded until i read the comments. I don't really have much to say about either of your comics, this was all I can think of-
Thresher/speace-aged: The blue color, texture, and snow combination really sets a great spooky mood for the story. The brush strokes, shading, just amazing. Since you're using a specific palette of blue, it would get difficult to separate shapes in the picture sometimes. Beo is often overpowered by a darker blue that is blending in more with the black lines than making it pop out. I think if you used a slightly more saturated shade of blue, it would pop out a lot against the royal blue color you have going on. I'd say the story matches up with the mood, but it doesn't establish much about where the story was going. Questions were made in the story and barely answered (like beo's job, what mimi was doing, etc).
Kozispoon/keechee: Wow, amazing energenic art. Super clean, and the flashback being a comic in mimi's cartoony life worked excellently. Beautiful lighting and shading and...yea. Please check page seven, top panel--I am not sure if the water was intentional or you forgot to get rid of it. If it was intentional, i think covering that little chunk of black border would have given it a nice impact to the page. I think many of us were thinking 'wait how does beo+mimi kick ass?' well, reading this comic, it made sense, and also excellent establishment for preparing for ANY future battle in this tournament.
we got a couple comics here with no conclusion! ^^; I wish I knew what happened!
Thresher and Space-aged, I loved the relationship between your characters, it was very cozy =) and the colours were beautiful! I don't know why Beo was running some sort of Hotel in Hell, or why (former angel?) Mimi was there, but it seemed to flow so naturally that I didn't even question it! it seemed like there was some kind of real danger there, but I don't know what. I don't know if that would have been explained or remained a mystery in the last page.. ah well it was still great!
kozi and kichi, yours started out really great! it sort of petered out a bit at the end ^^; but the poses, expressions are colours are great and I liked all the cameos! and it was funny too! I wish you'd had more time to finish but I still liked it!
hey i just realized how many French characters were in this match-up. if Tabris had partnered with Ancelin instead it'd been like "fuck lets just have this fight at the Eiffel Tower."
Thresher and space-aged: I love the color scheme on this comic! Very nice feel to it. I was disappointed by the ending, though. It seemed really anti-climactic and I wasn't expecting it. I notice you were supposed to have 12 pages, so I hope one of them didn't get lost somehow...
Kozi and Keechee: Cute comic! I love all the cameos and the detail in your backgrounds. You really made it feel like your characters were inside a world instead of just floating in space. I was disappointed by page 8... not sure what happened there. But cute story overall, and I like the ending! Good job, you two!
We've got 12 pages. I've uploaded the first 8 pages just fine, but the second batch isn't showing up. I've tried it twice now, not sure what's going on. going to bed now, I'll check on it in the morning
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