from the get go I would lean on Bad Idea for it effort and tron-ish colors the club scene was well represneted.... fight scenes was also cool I love it
Rikun I wish it was finish.....
rikun- there isn't much there but imma crit it anyway. perspective's off on the buildings. the inks on itami and the note look really shaky and jagged. it looks like you inked it slower and more carefully, and went over lines which is a no-no. work on making quick, bold strokes.
a bad idea- I wasn't really a fan of the coloring choice at first, but I think it grew on me a little. shame it didn't continue throughout! there's a lot of anatomy issues sprinkled in this comic too. putting itami in sexy poses is a noble cause but she just looks weird in some panels. at the bottom of page 8 she doesn't appear to have an ear? and, your hands need work. there's so many awkward looking ones. all that said, I enjoyed reading the comic and thought it was fun!
A BAD IDEA - I'm not a huge fan of the use of thicker lines and general lack of detail that comes with it, and my general impression of most of the art is that it feels slightly unfinished. There are a few panels that seem to be missing important details, like the 6th panel on page 6 (the armpit seems to be missing?). I'm guessing the general look of your art comes partly from your style, and working digitally (I've never had much luck with controling detail digitally. Granted, this style does let you work quickly, but it might be something you want to look into. Just my personal opinion.
That being said, your control of the pacing, action, and flow of the comic (as well as the dialogue), makes up for everything else. I was totally sucked into the story, but it cooled off enough at the end to not fall into accidental cliffhanger territory. I also loved how Hakase is shown to have more than just a cold, analytical scientific interest in Martial Arts, but does have some real fire in his belly. I'm itching to see what new abilities Kuno gets with her new Golden Chakra. Power Mimicary? I AM EXCITE.
The writing style seems to me to be an ideal mashup of western comicbook writing and themes from Manga. Maybe this is what you are going for? If so, keep it up.
To sum up, I always enjoy your stories. KEEP 'EM COMING. I would spend some more time with working some more detail in to your art, as well as hitting the anatomy practice more (but don't we all need that).
RIKUN - It's a shame you couldn't finish. I would have liked to see what you planned to bring to the game.
A-BAD-IDEA: Are you a martial artist by any chance? You seem to have some knowledge martial art principle and utilization of certain techniques and styles. As far as you comic, I liked the atmosphere you set with the splashes of color. I think your anatomy could use a little work, however. There were extra lumps in Hakase's arm, and the perspective on their attacks was a little funny looking at times. Your effects were cool, and the motion at the beginning of their fight seem fluid. Overall, great work.
Rikun: Sorry to see that you couldn't finish before the deadline. I agree with Kozispoon in that it looked very promising, and I hope to see it completed as well.
A-BAD-IDEA
I love what you're able to do with a minimal color palate. The way you translated shadows and the figures silloqhuettes is great. I especially like the handle of your color in the lab scenes to give off the impression of glowing lab tech. The theme you got going with this fighting duo is quickly becoming something of a nice info page/credit sequence that gives us a feel over what to expect. Drunken Fist-who knew? Itami looks awesome in your style and all the gratuitous panty shots made me chuckle.
RIKUN- shame to see your side didn't get where you wanted it, but your first page looked really promising, setting the stage your your story which I hope to see you submit all the same.
Zato, I really have to comment you for featuring your opponent so well in every one of these comics. It feels like you're actually considerate and well versed on who your opponent is every time.
Excellent Work. You've been slowly and surely interconnecting Void.
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