Majikura: It's good to hear someone's laughing! I need to figure out a better way to show form with my flat lines, it's rough sometimes.
Pocketmouse: I definitely agree, i just started doing one week deadlines only because I wanted things up more quickly... I should do a longer one and clean it up all nice next time.
Pocketmouse:
Nah Bobo I think the horizontal scroll is a nice idea for that, It's just make it less high so it's only one direction of scroll to read the whole lot.
Nah Bobo I think the horizontal scroll is a nice idea for that, It's just make it less high so it's only one direction of scroll to read the whole lot.
Ooooh! That's a good point! I do most of my work on huge screens, so I don't always realize how the width will affect viewing experience. I'll take that into consideration in the future. I like the wide page because it gives me more room for horizontal movement, but it's definitely not going to work if people have to scroll horizontally to see the page. Thanks for all your other feedback; I was trying to push quantity over quality a bit for this round, I guess (plus my tablet broke, so I had to ink traditionally which I'm not used to anymore but no excuses). I'm just not quite ready to abandon my colors I guess. :) And I'm glad you liked the cameo! I had fun writing that part and I hope I did your character at least a decent amount of justice. :)
Gregly; This was really ace. I like the style you have in general, moominsy and cute, but the thing I'd really love to see you go for is a battle that you could take more time over and really push. I have a lot of faith in the fact you are more than capable of an excellent, well-polished comic that you sunk loads and loads and loads of time into the production of and I honestly just want to read one!
Bobo: aaaahahah so many things! So many glorious things (cameo) ugh<3
That aside I do love the actual story; that they grouped together to deal with something, putting aside the petty stuff and doing what was 'right'. That made me smile and it was a nice direction to take it in. I also like what you went for on the first page, though I think that if you're going to do a visual parody next time maybe get a whole load of reference to parody from so it's really sturdy?
I like the page where they're battling in the cave, that was a pretty cool twist, and it was an enjoyable shake-up. And I do like what you're doing with the texture in this comic in general.
Anyway I will say, other than what has already been pointed out try not to rush on the lines. Having time to add colour is great but be careful not to let anything else suffer for the sake of it.
another little thing was the randomly wide page in the middle, I get the feeling of what you were trying to do but I feel like it didn't quite hit it. I'm all for doing cool stuff with the medium but... I think it's cause it makes me have to scroll in two directions? If it was a little shorter so I could get the whole 'story' the page was telling in one scroll it'd feel smoother and more easy to handle. In reality it put me off and I got a little distracted by it, so next time I suppose consider how it fits on-screen for everyone?
Thanks to both of you for a funny and enjoyable time and I look forward to where you both go next!
Kura, don't reveal her secret superpower! :O
Definitely something I'm working on, and thanks for pointing that out. I'll pay more attention to relative proportions in the next comic I do.
No issues storyline issues here, so I'll just nitpick.
gregly: I absolutely love the snobby personality that Ancelin has. Your comics always make me laugh. My nitpick is that Bill's arms on page 6 just look so flat, like they were made out of paper.
Bobo: I half expected one of you guys to do the rider-switching and it looks like you didn't disappoint. I like how you somehow incorporated all the round two racers in this comic. My nitpick is your wonky anatomy in some places: Ancelin's got a case of giraffe neck in page 3 and 8. i guess like the rest of us that struggle with it, it just needs some time and practice.
Greg, I loved your comic! You sure didn't disappoint with this round. I love how you drew Bill, and his dialogue was perfect. Thanks for the awesome rematch! Hahahahahahah. I love how you write Ancelin, too. She's a little more bratty than I usually write her, but it's still pretty spot-on somehow. Anyways, I am really happy about your comic, and yeah. That's all. :)
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