TDK: Not bad! Seeing a lot of potential here. I felt like you could have done more with Mona and Lisa, though. There's a lot of blank space on the walls. It's a hotel, so go ahead and toss some decor in, or try to give it some texture, at least. The lines felt kinda fuzzy, and for what you're doing, you probably want them more crisp. I enjoyed the action scene, but, again, blank space. Try to give a bit more focus to detail and I'm sure you'll be just fine.
GPS: This is the start of something fantastic, let me tell ya. The story was exactly the right length for what it was, I think. Art-wise, the shadows were stellar and really drew me in, the backgrounds had character, really, it was all just great. I'll caution you to practice on drawing liquids, as the goo seemed odd. Also, looking at Mona at the bottom of page 5; I can see what you're going for, but the perspective and anatomy just seem a bit wonky. Still, fantastic.
TDK: As always, you deliver. It's insane how many comics you put out. I feel like there could have been less action with the spirit, but made more intense, and then maybe use the extra space to converse with it a little? Just minor pacing problems. Keep practicing your linework, it still feels rough. It's come a LONG way, though!
GPS: WOW, I was NOT expecting that level of quality! I love those blacks and the details! My criticism here is your story. It felt very quick and simple, but it also didn't have the right amount of cohesive structure that it needed to grab my attention. I guess just spend some more time writing in the future.
Keep doin' whacho doin', guys. DRAW ON.
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