First of all Otakutaylor;
I really enjoyed the first page; it was very creative and the difference between the background and foreground was well handled; it made me look twice which i do enjoy under circumstances like this one.
I don't know how you feel about it, but I almost feel as if it was asking to be animated; so you'd see the characters in the background sooner and then the viewer would be 'in on the joke' that Slime doesn't know rather than SUDDENLY BEO and slime spat the can out in shock. (I'm enjoying it as is anyway, but just throwing it out there.) Other than that use of colour could have helped you here with the same effect; I don't know how you use colour (or if you use it at all) but maybe it's something to consider looking into next time you try something like that? You never know what you might uncover :')
Your line work, when it's confident and bold, looks grand; keep at that. The more scritchy-scratchy stuff you do looks a little uncertain. Have a little bit of faith I suppose, keep one single line instead of the wobbly ones.
Either way I did enjoy your story and representation of both characters, keep up the good work!
Secondly NothingGoingOn: I love the messaging sequence opening the comic. Very nice! There's also the 'you're next' line from Tsumi (I feel like you could have gone all out and made it terrifying and more like a threat than a heads up, simply because of her stature, but maybe next time.) I still got a giggle from it. Other than that I really enjoyed your storyline. Page nine is hands-down fabulous. Really good work.( I can't help but notice the super-sketchy lines in the bg here too, try to steer away from that. ) Either way, keep up the good stuff!
I really enjoyed reading both your comics, good stuff, guys!
Bobo:
NadaPasa: OMYGOSH is that Flipwolf because I really hope it is and that's awesome! Great cameos, and your style is so fun and entertaining. The ending was a bit anti-climactic, but I feel like you stayed consistent with Tsumi's character in having her help out a new friend, so I'm fine with it. I missed the rabbit reference (gonna have to go back and read your other comics!), but it was still funny anyways. I really don't know what else to say! Your comic was fun, lighthearted, brought out the characters well, and left me wanting more! Keep 'em coming!
That is indeed Flipwolf! The rabbit thing though is supposed to be a little out of no where, because it'll be further explained in a beyond battle I have planned. I'm just trying to be a little mysterious there.
tayroru: Your comic got a good chuckle out of me. Short, but sweet. I did notice that some of your poses, especially for Tsumi, looked a bit awkward. I think it could have something to do with you trying to get all her muscles right and losing track of the pose itself. Or maybe it's just because it's so freaking hard to draw really natural poses hahah. But overall I was just impressed with how clean and well done your comic was. The story was entertaining, the characters were fun to read, and your linework is always so clean and crisp, which I love about you. Can't wait for the next battle!
NadaPasa: OMYGOSH is that Flipwolf because I really hope it is and that's awesome! Great cameos, and your style is so fun and entertaining. The ending was a bit anti-climactic, but I feel like you stayed consistent with Tsumi's character in having her help out a new friend, so I'm fine with it. I missed the rabbit reference (gonna have to go back and read your other comics!), but it was still funny anyways. I really don't know what else to say! Your comic was fun, lighthearted, brought out the characters well, and left me wanting more! Keep 'em coming!
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