AlienDude9001:
The only things I would critique are the poses and proportions.
Hey Alien, I'm glad you like the comic so much! Anything specific you thought was wrong about the poses and proportions?
Julienya: This is wonderful and hilarious. I was chuckling all the way through reading it. The art style is excellent, using creative ways of coloring and reinforcing the mood of the scene. You have a great comical persona about all the character that enter the scene. The cats were fucking great, especially the boss cat. Of course the main two characters were great. I liked the poses and the facial expressions, it definitely brings them to life.
Hey Ben!!: http://youtu.be/e3F84FOi-20
Seriously, Benjamin: Your style is nice and gritty. I can see you definitely making some brutal graphic novels down the line with the intense lines and shadowing that you do. I like how you portray other VOID characters and stay true to their personality traits. Seeing Jimmy Boom featured was so freaking cool! I totally look up to that guy, his work is well thought out and very well drawn out. The only things I would critique are the poses and proportions. There is this fantastic site where it shows you 3D models of men and women doing different poses in different angles.
Here is the link - http://youtu.be/e3F84FOi-20
Keep at it dude, and I reeeeeeeeeeally love your character design and his wing design. Super freakin aweomeness!
Bobo:
Bent: Great comic. You did a fabulous job of tying together the heroes' back stories and involving other current events of VOID. Also, I loved the little artist references on page 4. I also really love how you do Zedan's wings and claws. I would agree with underwood on some of the hatching and shading being a bit much for me, but it didn't bother me too much. What did bother me was how squished the text looked on page 3. I'm not sure why that's different, but if you want to use that font, try bumping up the kerning and give those letters a little room to breathe. I thought you did a great job with backgrounds and other details that made it feel like they were actually in VOID City and not just in the middle of an empty space. Awesome job, and I look forward to your next comic!
Yeah, I saw that problem with the font too, but it was too late to fix it. I was using a lowercase version of the same typeface. But that's what VOID is for, fucking around to see what works and what doesn't.
As for the hatching... I am ashamed of the art in this comic. I managed my time poorly and had to basically rough in everything the last two days. This is a far departure from my actual penciling/inking style.
Thanks for the thoughts!
I'm also glad someone picked up on the reference to the king of Death Matches.
Bent: Great comic. You did a fabulous job of tying together the heroes' back stories and involving other current events of VOID. Also, I loved the little artist references on page 4. I also really love how you do Zedan's wings and claws. I would agree with underwood on some of the hatching and shading being a bit much for me, but it didn't bother me too much. What did bother me was how squished the text looked on page 3. I'm not sure why that's different, but if you want to use that font, try bumping up the kerning and give those letters a little room to breathe. I thought you did a great job with backgrounds and other details that made it feel like they were actually in VOID City and not just in the middle of an empty space. Awesome job, and I look forward to your next comic!
Jules: First thing I noticed was how much I liked your use of color. I'm a bit of a color fanatic, so your use of just a few colors to create the mood and everything made my endorphins dance. And then I got to page 9, and I think you're a genius! Gosh I love your colors! One thing to watch out for is word balloon placement. I read the conversation between Nyasuu and Jimmy backwards on page 3 because of how close the bubbles were and how Jimmy's were all on the left, making me want to read them first. I think you probably just got low on space in that particular panel, but watch out for that. The story itself was cute and silly, and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Quite a contrast with Bent's story, which caught me off guard and probably made it even funnier, although Zedan seemed a lot less intense than Bent's comic hahah. You rule, ladyfriend!
Bent: Good work on the comic, here's my two bits: Try to control your shading and hatching. Try to give more time to detail your hatch and shades proper right and your panels will stand out and be more easier to the reader's eyes. Other than that I have no complains. I rather enjoy your end.
My dear Julie, I adore the way you are continuing with your previous comic. It took me a while but it dawned on me when the cats came. Some parts of the anatomy were wonky at times but it does work for some panels. Also I would try suggesting that you should try to fix your backgrounds a bit, because I know with your propensity for improving, you can. On the whole, a rather rousing and enjoyable you gave us. Pukka work.
Animeshen:
Julie I DIED. I'm typing this as a zombie BECAUSE YOU HAVE KILLED ME. I can't even form a complete critique because I'm laughing so hard so I'll leave critiquing to people. But I loved it!
THAT KITTY HAD A BOWTIE.
I'll attend your funeral :'D Glad I could put something out that you could really enjoy.
Ben I love your inks! you fill a scene really well and you have very dynamic poses!
Julie I DIED. I'm typing this as a zombie BECAUSE YOU HAVE KILLED ME. I can't even form a complete critique because I'm laughing so hard so I'll leave critiquing to people. But I loved it!
THAT KITTY HAD A BOWTIE.
Ben - I really like the heavy blacks, probably my favourite inking work you've done so far, and the action was very good. Though I think some of your panels could use more gutters, some of the hatching from the panels crashing into each other makes everything a bit chaotic to read.
Juli - I love the changing color schemes, and the dialogue was possibly the best thing ever. :P I'd say for you, your backgrounds are better, but watch out that you aren't just adding lines for detail's sake - It's not necessarily a bad technique, but it can detract from where you want attention to be pointed - for example, in some panels the first thing I noticed was the floor, because it doesn't cut through the characters quite right.
Overall though, the quality here is pretty great. :D
Video320:
BenT: I can't believe I haven't been exposed to Zeadan until now. All of your hatching creates this interesting art style. Although, the color cover makes me want to see more of your work in color. I know because of time restraints that kind of thing isn't likely, but I guy can hope right?
My motto is HATCH THE FUCK OUT OF IT. As for color, I plan on doing all my future comics in color. I actually had a huge a mount of time to work on this comic, but I had a family emergency that is still taking place, so all my time was sucked up by that.
And if you like Zedan, just wait until you meet his nemesis...
BenT: I can't believe I haven't been exposed to Zeadan until now. All of your hatching creates this interesting art style. Although, the color cover makes me want to see more of your work in color. I know because of time restraints that kind of thing isn't likely, but a guy can hope right?
Julie - Very entertaining, you're monochrome Color schemes are brilliant. Nyasuu's facial expressions are priceless. Is that the last we'll see of that cat crew?
Bent: This was awesome, man. I loved the way you used Jimmy. Everyone is nailing him spot on about being a bumbling hero. Though there were some perspective issues (Well, really just the second to last panel on page 7. Jimmy is huge compared to Nyasuu there.) I still thoroughly enjoyed yours. And I am totally interested to see The Marked Guard.
Julz: You brought your A-game, girl. I totally dug yours. Hilarious, as always. I also really dug the color scheme. You're definitely improving. Only thing I would suggest is working a bit more on your transitions. The transition on page 8 was kinda sudden, as was the one on the final page. You'd have been better off showing Zedan untying them than him telling us. This was still awesome, regardless. (And I love that San and Meowgan were in it. I was dying.)
Good work, you two! (Slinks back off to play Dragon's Dogma)
Holy shit Julz, this was great! I've been schooled. My problem is I have no style yet that I'm comfortable yet to draw comics.
I'm not sure I've ever seen transformation in physique like that since DBZ...
SUBMITTED. Forgive the substandard art quality, this has been the bizarro summer from hell. I had two more pages planned but I barely had time to ink the ones i had.
I have a few pages submitted, I'll shoot the rest to Angie if I can't get everything done right on the dot of midnight. be rest assured I'll have a sweet comic for you all to read tomorrow.
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