Well, since no one else is really going at it;
Dude, your "badass action" writing is pretty good. Be careful of reppetition, though. Buster says "can't a man enjoy a fucking omelette(...)" and then he says "can't a man make a little maoney(...)", either could have been funny, but not both, because it's basically the same joke. Try other ways of saying things.
Loved the first page, with all them reds and whatnot and I'd have loved to see the whole thing colored. I think your highest skill has to be composition, you do a good job at presenting things nicely. It's a bit shadowed by the messiness of your linework, though. Color could have fixed that. I'm not saying to lay off the messiness, I love the sketchy dynamic feel of it and I think you can really develop well in that direction. Having a stronger anatomy to support it can never hurt.
Great and entertaining stories from both of you! I enjoyed reading these.
LeFred shades it though, down to artwork: I love the colorpalette and your linework. Yours looks a bit unfinished there Tresher, I assume you meant to color all (which ofcourse would have made a world of difference). Solid story still, I enjoyed the "logic" behind it (frontal attack on the worlds luckiest guy.. hmmm...).
I was disappointed that the gumball scene didn't have the same dialogue. OHWELL.
Great job, both of you!
I'll leave a crit for both of you later after a get some beers in me.
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