TOFUBEAST- For a 4 week battle you started off super strong! You can really tell where you placed the most attentions, but it appears you either ran outta time or petered out. Time gets the better of all of us in these battles, so better luck next time. I liked where the story was going, but this comic suffers from the same problem most of the others do: your story fires up under the assumption the reader has read the bio, followed the previous battles and knows why so and so is mad at this guy and fighting along with the other dude. I'll have to do some serious research to figure out whats what XD
MAGISTELLE- Looove that you used one of Hiemie's fighters as Mammon's kingpin to please. Did not expect the ending that was given. Is Mammon really a nice guy at heart? D'aww. I would point some attention to your backgrounds- they seemed either non existent or a bit throwaway on some panels so it looked like the fighters were interacting in space. Other than that great battle!
FIRST OFF, THESE WERE TOTES ADORBS.
Tofu: I see some foreshaddoowwinnng, also I love how you characterise everyone with their dialogue and the fight panels were really strong, on the mindset of panels though, sometimes I think panels that could be brought out more are a little squashed, such as when Ehren offers Maz' juice. The story was pretty rad though! You really bring out Ehren's nice guy character and just how much a good bloke he is, despite having his own problems. Like it or not, Mazza, you're gonna be bros with Ehren.
Magi: MAGGGGG, You got some great lines, dynamic poses and well paced story. I think you could push yourself more by adding more detail into the backgrounds though, they look a little flat at times, I /know/ you could introduce the shop a lot better then you did there. Your facial expressions are fantastic but fuckin' christ Maz's face in the last panel on page three XD it's terrifying in a good way! Also awesome twist to the story!
GREAT GREAT BATTLES BROS.
ALL UPLOADED OH GOSH.
I'm never going to try and do two comics + two illustration projects at the same time. Sorry mags, it got rushed here and there (tangents! word bubble tangents! what the hell is that writing?! What the hell is that inking?!), but I really did enjoy drawing this battle against you--when it wasn't kicking my ass. XD
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