Good work on Kuras end, super clean and such. Keep an eye on speech bubbles and how they flow "rule the world, huh?" reads before KidDude says he wants to.
Base, the gifiness being used only in one panel makes it seem like you had more planned. Utilise it more, or not at all. Other then that I wish you'd done more.
I think what everyone is getting at in regards to Kura is that it is painfully obvious that the photoshop pen tool is being used to do the clean lines. The problem with that is that they end up looking extremely lifeless as a result of it. It ends up just causing the image to look like a flash cartoon with no real weight or life to anything in it. Personally I'm in the camp that really doesn't dig the whole pen tool look myself. Personally the only suggestion there I could offer is to start doing your inking without it/on paper if you don't have a tablet or something.
Just my two cents, sorry if its really brief I am out of town atm.
Kura: I really enjoyed your story. It was fun to read and had a nice tie in at the end to your previous battle. The art is pretty solid, although something about it...there's so much white. I think I'm talking about the same thing that Fraz is talking about. Your work is clean, but it's almost like it's too clean, too open. Try using some shading in the future to take the edge off of those whites.
Base: Short and simple, wasn't too much going on here. Your art was alright, but severely lacking in depth and perspective. I understand what you were going for. Try finding pictures similar to your first panel and compare them. A nice film of gray, or some hatching to establish foreground from background would have gone a long way. Keep at it and put a little more effort into a three week battle next time.
Kura: There's something about your digital work that doesn't sit right with me. Everything is so straight and rendered in such a way that it doesn't look natural. Your backgrounds and objects all seem very rigid and lifeless, and the variation in the line width between characters and background makes it seem like the characters don't belong to their environments. I'm all for stronger outlines to bring them to attention, but I think maybe some more experimentation to find a balance would help. I guess I'm just trying to say that it all looks too digital, and it takes the character from the pages. Page four had a nice hand drawn background of trees and just that really stood out to me because it had such an honesty about it. Fundamentally you're great with composition and anatomy, but I'd love to see you work in a more hand drawn way again to reclaim some character and a sense of authenticity. I don't mean to sound scathing at all! I just hope you don't just push in this artistic direction without exploring other avenues first.
Base: Not much to comment on here, I do quickly want to say that you are rocking some nice angles and compositions, but I also think you need to focus on really filling out your world, spending time on backgrounds and grounding your characters in a real Void city. And keep trying to push that quality barrier.
Kura: This story was super cute! Your lines are really nice and clean but you could probably push yourself further by adding more details and perhaps trying to do something in full colour. You have a good knack for composition though! Great entry Kura!
Base: Really disappointed here, like Kura pointed out you had 3-4 weeks to churn somethings out and this is a pitiful result. The animated hands was pretty cool but that doesn't make up for the fact their is no real reason behind your story, we don't know why the characters met up, why Trix knows the son is in danger etc etc, it is okay to leave things like this out to be mysterious and then explained in later comics but it just appeared there was no explanation behind all this, it was over as quickly as it started. Don't talk so big about all your plans with your character if you're not going to produce to work!
Base I'm not gonna lie, I'm really disappointed. The challenge started off as 3 weeker then got a one week extension and you submitted a 3 half pages of a story that doesn't have any conflict or resolution. You mentioned in the chat that you have a hard time writing for Trix, so i think you need to flesh out her character a bit more. Give her some kind of conflict, something for her to pursue/overcome. You've got plenty of things to work with. That mysterious demon spirit she channeled, Agent 710, the foundation, maybe even the origin of her powers? Don't have her just be a "creepy prophetic little girl" forever.
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