Nothinggoingon-the style you chose for the characters is very nice! The backgrounds however felt like an afterthought. Try to make them feel as lively as your characters and you should go far. Another suggestion is to go to http://blambot.com and get some proper comic fonts, because your current font choice isn't the greatest.
Jinbee-not much to say here, would like to see you do a comic in the future!
NothinGoinOn:
I think considering the lack of detail on your pages you should probably scale them down a bit size wise. Theres no need for them to be so large on the screen.
Rub out pencil lines better and also the handwritten type doesn't really work. I think it could though. I get that your trying to make it quite explosive and crazy but I still think a bit of structure to it might help. Draw some lines in pencil (straight ones) and just make it a bit neater but still keep that expressiveness.
Jinbee:
The dialogue is nice and I like the character. Just do a full comic. :)
NGO: Its sort of funny but you take longer than you needed to getting to the point. Your quality also drops off substantially beyond the first few pages so strive for consistency as you've got some nice design elements and lines that just need cultivation. Beo is a likable character that I think you intend to develop in time so keep at it.
Jinbee: You have the makings of something stylish here but clearly didn't get very far on it. I like what I see though, You have some nice setup, just need more follow through.
NGO: Did you draw your phone? You did, didn't you. As I've said to a lot of people, you got ambitious, and likely misinterpreted your time. I liked the plot, but things just looked incomplete. You could have at least doctored up your linework. No matter, it's a nice first comic and I hope to see more.
Jin: Ditto for you. Try another battle, and work with a longer deadline. I know you got it in you. Your design sheet had such polish. Please don't get discouraged.
I'm sad that you didn't get to finish. If you get the chance to submit a finished version for a beyond battle someday, that could be cool. Regardless, looking forward to seeing more from you.
Nothin, yours made me laugh. I won't bother repeating what everyone else said. Can't wait to see what you can do in future rounds!
Nothingoingon, I agree with past comments. Consistency in style would have made a big difference in the overall presentation of the comic.
Jinbee, sorry to see you didn't finish. What you had seemed plenty entertaining, although your downfall may have been planning too many pages for a one-week tourney. Better luck next time!
Nothing, Good work. Wish I could see some more consistent work from you. But definitely creative win here.
Jinbee, Good style but no finish. Hoping for something more in the future.
NothingGoingOn: Yes, that's the way to win a fight, throw your dirty underwear! Your story made me laugh, but consistant artwork all through would have given you better marks!
Jinbee: Shame, your character promised so much..
Ugh, I feel so bad... My stuff is so unfinished it's painful. Easter got in the way too much @A@
*edit* I love how both our ideas turned out clothes oriented though
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