Energy: You actually sort of impressed me with the backflip bit, its reminiscent of the weird slow motion poses of Mike Allred and its the most successful bit of your comic. I applaud your efforts on backgrounds, even tho you have a bit of work to do on perspective and interaction, most beginners just leave it out entirely. The pencil greyscale just detracts from your lines at this point. Focus on anatomy, and posing and solidifying your line elements- you can come back to shading down the line. That's something I wish people had told me when I was where you are now.
GPS: I dig your ink line weights and well spotted blacks, combined with your liberal use of red and great framing- you've given us a shockingly visceral and brutal fight scene with some gory moves and powerful hits. You truly excel at your fight pacing so its just a matter of improving anatomy, consistency and maybe punching up your page layouts a bit more to truly emphasize those blows.
Fed: I'll be sure to keep that in mind next time around. Thanks.
Con: Sadly, I can't say I did that on purpose. That was just good ol' fashioned inconsistencies, which I promise to try to get under control in my next comics. I actually hadn't even noticed it until you said something, so thanks for pointing that out.
Hiemie: I'll try to put more into my backgrounds, and as well as to keep working on anatomy. Thanks, and who knows, maybe you'll get more werewolf backflips.
Thanks for the crits everyone. I promise to keep trying to improve, and hopefully, it'll show
In the future, I think both of you should work with longer deadlines and use your time properly.
Energy: You should really do some research on what streets and buildings look like. You're gonna have to take some time out to learn perspective, and also learn how objects exist within space so where your characters are placed on panel looks natural instead of them floating. I got a chuckle from the wolf backflip though. Just keep practicing. That's my best advice. If you can, go to a stock photo site and just look at poses of people doing things. Figure out how the body is formed, what shapes compose what parts, and that makes drawing action much easier.
GPS: You have a better grasp of cities and bodies, but most of the advice I gave to your opponent also applies to you. I DO like that your character actually is a bad guy. Not many people are willing to write villains it seems, so it's nice to see. Your comic needs more werewolf backflips though.
I agree with critiques that have already been made. I think both artists can stand to loosen up a little within their own styles. It's nice to see so much completed work, though! Hitting the one week deadline is no small feat, and you both did great.
Energy, I've been seeing your art for a long time and you need to do some more anatomy exercises to loosen up your characters within the frame. The expressions could use a bit of work too,the gasping panel in the second page didn't really work out because her eyelids were so low...when someone is suprised, their eyebrows, eyelids, and generally their face all has a bit of an upward curve. You might try keeping a hand mirror near you while you're making the expressions, so you can mimic what you'd like to see by an IRL reference. You're coming along though, don't give up.
GPS, I love your use of the limited colour pallette here, it really works. The shape of your character through seems to change from panel to panel, for instance in the very last panel he is significantly less muscled/defined than in all the others. I don't know if it was intended to show him in a weakened state, but it did seem a little odd. Overall I really like it, good story and set up going.
Mister Energy: Nice stuff, but your characters look a bit stiff.. loosen up your lines a bit and you should do great :)
GPS-Device: Hah, you get what you deserve for trying to beat up little girls - Nice comic though, good showing all through.. Miniscule critiscm; Don't censor swearwords with black.. use (#%/(#%" instead :)
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