ninemafia: you've got a great style but if you can find a way to smoothen up that lineart it'll make a heap of difference, as will getting some textures and details into the background to offset all the negative space everywhere. You've got your figures' looks down pat, now you need to work on the rest of what's inside the panel to complement it.
Keep it up!
Ninemafia: Wow I really dig your paneling and compositions- very similar to my style with lots of timing tricks and circular motifs that work so well and make your comic stand out from the others. Your background art seems mired in grays and could do with some textures and better expressions, tho I don't know if your facial style allows for that. The angles on Bhindi hanging from the edge don't quite work either, you should tweak the angle or add some depth. The writing was pretty tight and I loved the action, very Samurai Jack. I can't wait to see how you progress down the line.
ninemafia-It was a nice comic all around. You might want to spend more time on your backgrounds because line tool backgrounds usually look very flat. You should also avoid taking photographs and using the cutout filter in Photoshop like on that first page.
Nine: I'm with Hiemie on this- I enjoy more "realistic" characters. Though I feel you could have better emoted Bhindi, showing that she really felt what she was saying. Often times it looked more like your characters were just playing roles instead of living them. But I do really enjoy the fact you tried some complex angles and perspective! Keep working on that, for sure. Also, try adding some shading and detail so your scenes don't look so flat. You have a good thing goin' here, keep it up! :]
Nine: Your writing turned out so well! It's nice when someone plays their character off as not just this godlike person with powers. She got into an unlucky and bad situation, and kind of coped normally. Well done. Your art is nice, but everything looks so tragically flat. You do try though, and you attempt tough angles and large shot backgrounds. So keep trying, getting better is nothing but practice and learning.
Gallo: Tough luck, at least you did the work though. Looking forward to it as a beyond battle.
Inquisitor Galloglasses:
Sorry mine's late guys. I had a wedding to attend, and Nine's work is superior in all respects. My half of the battle will be uploaded within an hour or so for completion purposes and to vindicate the sterling effort Nine put in her work. Sorry it was too late.
No worries, sorry you couldn't upload in time!
But don't worry, you still can battle! Go out and challenge people!
Sorry mine's late guys. I had a wedding to attend, and Nine's work is superior in all respects. My half of the battle will be uploaded within an hour or so for completion purposes and to vindicate the sterling effort Nine put in her work. Sorry it was too late.
Ninemafia, I liked yours, but there were some things that ya gotta work on. Watch the anti-aliasing in whatever program you're using when you're filling in flats. I could see the stray pixels in some panels. And some drawings I couldn't really tell what was happening. (Like the first panel of the first page) And while perspective is an issue ya gotta work on, I'll give ya cool points for attempting dynamic angles in some pages. Overall I was pretty impressed. Keep up the good work and you'll go far!
Solid showing ninemafia, just curious about the ending.. she got beat up and jumping off a building to, if not death, atleast a few broken bones seems a strange way to win.. That said, I really feel the character matches your style so well, I can see you go far
Just happened back here and noticed that I said Bhindi's a "beat" character, but what I meant was "great". Sorry for any confusion that auto-correct may have caused. Can't wait to see the comics!
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