Shojin, nice comic man, entertaining old west S.D.T.! I like how you've transported the universe, good character interaction.
Wolt, Really diggin this style, I thought page 1-3 really had me interested in the story, then the 4th page just left me confused...hope to see more of this style!!
Wolcik - Man I haven't been paying close enough attention to you dude! I really loved your washes (yeah ink wash bro's!) The color was lovely, and I liked the color shift from "past" to present. However I would've either kept the blue out of Failed Experiment before the shift, or done him completely in blue. Having them mix messes with the monochromatic nature of the rendering.
I also have to third Angie and Le Fred, the last page is completely confusing and messes with what was a pretty well condensed comic before that point.
Shojin - I love "alternate reality void peeps" type characters, I wish they were more popular. The toning you did on the first page was nice, but you petered out almost immediately afterwards, and your light line-work really needed that rendering to stand up.
Your characters need to emote a little bit more too. It's the most jarring during the rampaging cow scene and immediately afterwards. Nobody is really panicked, surprised, or scared. They all just look kind of annoyed or smug. And that's fine for your hard-as-nails wanderer, but if everyone is similarly hard-as-nails, it takes away from Wyatt Graves as a character. Besides that, I really like the shot of the bull getting filled with bullets, it makes me want to go sketch bulls in motion.
Shojin-I liked the toning you did and you did a nice job on the characters. I was left confused by the story though. It was like whoa a cow's fuckin shit up, blam, it's dead, oh wait it was Wyatt. I had to go back and reread Wyatt's bio to remember that he was a shapeshifter. Perhaps something to establish that the cow was Wyatt beforehand would have been helpful.
Wolcik-The toning was very nice on this, the color you chose for it worked great. I have to agree with LeFred, the last page there felt pretty unnecessary so it made the comic come across as unfinished.
Hahaha, does that count has a kil for me?
Shojin, some shots are pretty good, but some are a bit ackward... I'm not sure how to explain it... kind of a mix of less fluid poses and lack of confidence in lines? I like the far-west adaptation of VOID.
Wolcik, that started out pretty well, in fact, I don't know WHY you continued. Now it's just weird and unfinished.
In my opinion, the first part would have been enough; mysterious and cool. The color washes are nice.
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