Angie said-"The problem between Dreds and Arena seemed to come out of nowhere as in previous comics I don't recall there being anything wrong."
Answer- Dreds probably left the torliet seat up...
To my knowledge...(hope I didnt miss an email) There not broke up. Couples often fight. Im very glad my wife doesnt have super powers...Ide be in deep trouble if she did. I thought the contrast of the lecture and the arguement between Dreds and Arena was very effective. Keep in mind, Dreds is still learning human emotion, and is probably very cold in alot of ways, so it made sence to me that he would just walk out when he doesnt know how to respond. I depict a very tender scene between them in my upcoming BB.**spoiler alert**
Pyras- I felt kinda confused with Arena and Dred arguing out of no where. I thought maybe I had to read Angie and Dred's BB to find out if there's some conflict going on with them. other than that, your line quality was great, and your BG's are starting to improve.
Zest- As always, loved your comic. Story was fun and creative, and artwork was great. I think my only bother here is what angie said, some characters, like Arena, got too small and stubby. Overall I enjoyed your battle :D
Angie: I was trying to get that kind of "out of nowhere" effect, similar to what happens in real-life relationships, friends who are going out and everything seems all fine and good and suddenly you hear they broke up and it feels out of nowhere, none of their friends seem to have seen it coming. I don't know if I succeeded in a good way in giving that effect, but there it is~
Pyras, now that I look at it, you might have made the moment less dramatic by squishing it in at the bottom of page 9. A big shocker like this would likely have more impact if you made the reveal a huge panel. Reading it again, I find that the ransom note's also really hard to read, so enlarging it as well would certainly help.
Thank you, Le Fred! I really enjoyed working on the inks for this comic. I really want to do more mark-making like this, maybe even some cross-hatching in future comics. It's quite fun. C:
Angie: Thank you as well! I'm currently taking an Intermediate Drawing course and doing lots more figure drawing, so I definitely agree with you about anatomy- females are especially difficult for me, so any improvement is a plus for me. I totally see now my mistake with Arena's legs, they're way shorter than they should be.
Pyras-I think you did a great job with the emotions here and I liked Leland's talking over the argument. But on another hand, it did bother me to not know why they were fighting. The problem between Dreds and Arena seemed to come out of nowhere as in previous comics I don't recall there being anything wrong.
Amanita-I loved the story here, it was very unique and I loved Leland's solution to the problem. I think that your anatomy is improving, especially on the female figures. But there were times the characters got slightly too short and stocky like Arena in the first panel of page 3. It kind of looked like you shrunk her down so that she would fit in the panel.
Pyras, I think this was, on all points, the best I've seen from you. It looked good, it felt right and the story was simple and well executed. I only feel like the last page didn't have all the cliffanger effect it could- or rather should- have. I don't know how it could be better, but it just doens't fit with the feel of the rest of the comic.
Amanita, this was totally fun, as all your comics are, with the added quality of being easy to look at. I like the line style you got here.
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