tdk: great story and good improvement on filling in the background. You need to work on your female anatomy.
Tatsura: It's nice to see you're paying more attention to detail with the backgrounds, and the panel pacing has gotten better. You're getting braver with the shot angles and that's never a bad thing. There are a several lines in the first page(the dance dojo, the door, etc) that are too geometrical and too obviously-digital-hold-shift-straight-lines. You can still make straight lines by making a transparent straight line where you need it on a separate layer, and then tracing over it. It'll give you the illusion of a fully hand-drawn straight line.
Good job, Entourage
Tatsura, it's kind ofsweet how Elle still can look very femine and cute with that scar on. The story was straight foroward, just a normal day in the office I guess, but that shows little character development - it's nice not only to establish personality, but also show the inner thinking and change due some events, like TDK did in his hostage story.
tkdgunghoul, I thought the story on your end was the strongest. You've still got some issues with anatomy (womens' waists and hips being too low), but those will correct themselves once you do more practice.
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