First kill!
My hands are now red, and try as I might, the color will not dissipate. I wander the earths, marked by my crime, scowled upon by all those who lay eyes on my shame. Is there no respose for a darkened soul such as mine, safe for in the very soils that caused me to be ostrasized so? Come, doom, and mayhaps together we can tint more than my hands...
Thanks, Rolfqu! I think this battle geve me back some faith in the character myself, who knows where it goes from here?
Fox24:
Was this a scar match, death match, or life match? Just wondering because I'm seeing people dying at the end. Sorry I didn't read the story because it's 1am.
It is a Death Match.
Wolcik: Hey, least you turned something in, right? I liked your set up here, I was really curious how you planned on handling the story here. I think your pacing was a little quick with not enough explanation for the story at the end though. I assumed that Worltex left the demon inside of Casino Reasoning and left him inside of that suspended animation state, but it wasn't totally clear.
Your pencil roughs for what it's worth looked decent. You should work on your posing, it felt a bit stiff here. (Then again, it's pencil roughs so I dunno if that's a fair critique to make here.)
It's really too bad you couldn't finish this all the way. At the same time, you should have been working on this when you were making those pin ups for your other battle that hadn't even started yet. Even IF you had other stuff going on in your life (which is totally fine, don't think for a second that Void's more important than that.) it still doesn't excuse the fact you were working on some other pinups and covers for another fight later.
So, just as a word of advice, always focus on your present work before jumping to the next one. I know Worltex was pretty much over for you anyways as you have a lot more fun with Mr. Awesome, but I hope you don't end up causing this position for yourself again. I'm sure your next battle will be much better, though.
Le Fred: This might be my favorite comic from you so far. This fight really made Casino Reasoning that much cooler of a character to me, I didn't think he was the 'swashbuckling' type. (I wouldn't say hero, but he's certainly adventurous.)
Your story was really creative and took a part of Worltex I didn't think anyone actually knew about/remembered. The devil releasing was a very brilliant direction and one I didn't actually expect. I wonder what Worltex was coming to actually talk to Casino Reasoning about though? It'd be a cool idea to have that bite him in the ass in the future.
Your art was fantastic. The solid black and hatched lines with your colors looked marvelous. Your line widths could be a bit more consistent but besides that, you did very well. The panel set up worked well here I thought. I'm not crazy for horizontal comics, but you did alright with it.
Your hands still need a little work, they're a bit on the smallish side in some panels. Specifically when at rest or to the sides. Those nasolabial lines on the faces however are really bugging me though. When you draw them solidly constantly, they make your people look that much older. While that may work for an old person, it looks kind of awkward on the players here.
You really made this fight yours and it's very well done. You've definitely jumped in ability since your last death match all the way when you started the site. I hope your next fight is just as good, if not better.
Fun reads from both of you!
Worltex - Shame you couldn't finish the comic proper. Thanks for submitting a comic none the less.
Casino - Great stuff! Towards the end of the story, I really got into your style. Bravo!
Was this a scar match, death match, or life match? Just wondering because I'm seeing people dying at the end. Sorry I didn't read the story because it's 1am.
yeah, the T.V. is used as a dice/coin/betting inplement. technically, it's not quite equal enough to have the same probability as a dice, but certainly not less than a 1/2 chance.
I think I stopped about every page to wonder "is this properly understandable?" to answer myself "it's three in the morning, who cares?"
so yeah, I'm sorry about the confusion of the tv, bad panneling and exclusion of back story. (I was originally going to include Mel-Worltex's girlfriend- to help with some of the backstory, but that would have requiered time/energy I didnt have)
Wolcik, I really like what you had going with my little dude there-Luck is indeed a bitch!
anyway, thanks for comments and stuff, dudes and ladies.
[quote] MyHatsEatPeople - the henchman thing was covered in my character's past,
Well in that case, i guess i just need to read up more before jumping to conclusions, i apologise.
Everyone I'm sorry, it's not only Worltex that sucks, it's me too XD
MyHatsEatPeople - the henchman thing was covered in my character's past, and it one of the reasons why I like le Fred's version so much - it takes so much from my already build world (which might be a little forgotten at that point) and delivers a solid story with believable reason on what would happen with the devil that I once though might be an armageddon's theat ;P
Wolcik - It's a shame that theses pages aren't really finished because you have a really nice style. I found some of the panelling messy and confusing, so I struggled to follow the plot of the comic. But I think if you worked with finishing the comics, the story would be much clearer to follow and give your style the impression it deserves.
Lefred - I really like your character, I found the opening pages quite funny when I was on about the lack of privacy (Good running gag for my humour), I thought the pacing of the battle was quite good once it got going, but some things just remained unexplained, like what with the TV? Though someone did say it was a possible dice - but it was pretty confusing and perhaps if there was a hint it was a supposed to be a dice it would of been clearer - and also, where did the devil henchmen things come from? I mean, were they just waiting outside of the building? and where did they go after he beat the devil? Perhaps I just missed that part.
wolcik- I feel like there's some potential improvement in your work. wish you finished it.
lefred- wasn't totally sure what happen, feel like you should have made clearer gutters and there was one shot where the character was jumping in one direction but landed in another, which confused me.
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