Wol, i'm digging this style here! the story...no fucking clue, and the digital lettering is not meshing really well with the art style. But, I could follow the action well and after reading up on Clark C. that was a clever ending, maybe a panel to explain powers? keep em rolling Wol, your a productive beast!
Fox, these pencils have lots of potential, better job establishing environments than in the past. Story was a bit too wordy/long winded. Bubble tails are too fat, but really good job with the FX lettering!
Wol, I was kinda thrown on the first page cus I wasn't sure if you were on a show then it looked like the setting seemed irrelevant right after. I do appreciate the rougher bw look though. Seems to be the trend lately. I also think the battle was cut maybe a page shorter than it could've been.
Fox, Can't really hit you too hard being ur tech difficulties but I will say that inking could've done you wonders with this. There's alot I can barely see and the digital bubbles pushes the illustrations back even further almost to the point to where I can't tell what's going on in alot of panels. So yeah ink, CGC.
Dude its not an excuse trust if I could I would and two it's so I don't get comments like you just left me. I know I'm capable of better so don't leave me a comment saying I'm making excuses sir.
Fox24:
Next time don't use extra page for excuses - it's better left in comments, in case someone would find your work complete and would give you higher score if he know you could done much better in given time XD
I like how we both have our character getting their ass handed :D At first I wanted to add an extra page to make Bob teach Chris a lesson too (about overusing his powers), but I was too busy with school.
I'm a little less happy that you kept Bob's outrage to his son's death asspect. I just love Bob's outburst on page four - laser eyes are going all over the place. You need to work on your eye possitioning on profiles though.
As for the planing and plot I'd say that you didn't need to go back 2 mintues to show that Awesome is pissed. He could just drop to the church and then annouce his exposition by screaming walls off XD I know you were going for a classical final speach that we know and love/despite from movies that changes hearts, but I don't find those words that inspiring - for me it'd be better if Chris just pointed out how ungodly it is to cause so much evil (or how stupid it is to prove God wrong by arguing with him instead of actually proving it).
Anyway I really enjoyed your part as it seems you put much effort to it and have much more backgrounds that you made me believe by reading your pre battle comments XD
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