Rabbit Rabbit:
Okay, Wolcik... this isn't just my favorite comic of all comics you've done, it's also one of my favorite comics on VOID. The humor is spot-on all the way through. I keep coming back to read it again. XDThanks a lot. I'll try to eventually top even that I guess XD
Okay, Wolcik... this isn't just my favorite comic of all comics you've done, it's also one of my favorite comics on VOID. The humor is spot-on all the way through. I keep coming back to read it again. XD
WTF?! How DARE you give 4 more votes and make me win when I already have 4 pages for scarring BB!!
TDK - I hope you're not mad, cause I wanted to make a scar you'd be cool with XD
Over 30 votes? It's nice to know that your battle is poppular, right TDK?
Anyway, Thanks for all the comments and critique. It was a nice supprise from TDK that improved in readability on his part and beat me XD
It'll take some time for Bob to be batteling again, since the scar is pretty big, you can expect to see the resaults in Beyond Battle "Powerless".
TDK: your storyline was great, very clear to understand and follow. I like the fact that you stuck with just the black and white (probably gave you more time to work on your backgrounds). I agree with Pyra., if you lose at least your scar looks sweet.
Wolcik: I definitely like how Mr. Awesome's personality changed because of the upset of being banned from the Tournament. How his good conscience faded out and his newer, more darker conscience replaced it. However, if you lose that would still do wonders for your storyline. You would be able to do amazing things with the weakened Mr. Awesome, like for instance (rehab to gain his powers back, the battle actually awakening another power, etc.). So many possibilities.
You both did a great job, keep them coming!
Tdk: this has got to be the best comic I've seen you draw so far. It has the easiest story to understand and the best inking lighting and movement I've seen you do yet. You should be proud of yourself, and that scar is heavy!
Wolcik: I'm not sure how much I like this new style yet, but I do feel that it'd be better in greyscale than color. I know you've been experimenting to see what works so keep it up.
Tdk: if you lose, I wouldn't mind if I were you.. That third eye scar is positively bad-ass.
You both succeeded in different areas for me and both stories were entertaining enough. Although I graded you differently in different areas total scores for me were equal. Good job and good luck!
Wolcik: This was a fun comic to read also. I really liked how hard a time Mr./Sir Awesome was having being a bad guy. You right him very well in a way that makes him pretty endearing in my opinion. His sucker punch at the end made me chuckle.
Your backgrounds on this...I wasn't sure what to think of them. Obviously the perspective is eyeballed, and if you'll pardon me for being blunt (I mean no offense), but it's eyeballed pretty poorly. However, I wasn't sure if you did that as an artistic choice or not as the wonky perspective actually fits the story pretty well since Awesome's state of mind is so jumbled.
If it's not a story driven choice I would advise throwing down a horizon line at a body part on your character that is at the eye level you want the camera to be, then roughly sketch out lines extending from your vanishing points. If the vanishing points fall off page you can even just estimate where it would be and at least try to keep that point in mind as you sketch in the background. That way it keeps things a little more orderly when you're just eyeballing stuff (which I readily admit to doing as well). Obviously, it's always better to actually do the work with perspective, but I know that sometimes you just want to draw and not worry about being perfect. Almost all of the backgrounds in my Octavian fight are eyeballed in that manner. (It still doesn't look right, but it makes it less noticeable, I think.)
I apologize if I seem condescending in this critique, that's certainly not my intent at all. I just noticed that many of your lines are going towards entirely different horizon lines and I think employing something simple like that would help you out when you're approximating perspective.
As I said, this was a good comic and I did enjoy reading it. I like what you're doing with Mr. Awesome and I'll keep reading to find out what happens next.
TDKgunghoul: This was a cool battle that I really enjoyed reading. You had a few funny lines and I rather liked the line about the talking spell book being novel. I thought that was pretty clever. I also noticed you labeled the grass and the stones which was pretty funny since they were already quite clearly grass and stones. Your backgrounds could use some work. Specifically they could use more heavy blacks or tones to give them a greater sense of depth, also more details in general would give them more life. I liked the fight itself and you had some good angles in your story telling which remained clear through out.
I thought that the part where Kars catches Awesome's fist should have been in a separate panel. You may have been able to do this by increasing the size of the drawing and having it in a vertical panel that split panel one from the two panels opposite it. I hope that made sense.
If you do end up adding more detail or tones to your backgrounds you might need to extra careful while doing so since your character is defined by so much negative space. I'm not sure, but it might make it easier for him to get lost in backgrounds like that.
I also thought your scar was pretty creative, but I don't envy Wolcik if you win...
Aaaaww, Kars, you should know better than to listen to evil books...
TDK, your stuff is getting a lot tighter! I liked the strong blacks, but not that they weren't there throughout, it makes what doesn't have them look so much less exciting. And backgrounds, they're so flat and could use some more love. But all in all, good job, mate!
Wolcik, Liking that ink and color style! It looks messy and powerful, very fitting of mister... Sir awesome. The perspective in your backgrounds is quite bothersome, though. Just in the first page, you've got giant furniture and wavy floor... gotta give it to you for keeping it consistently present, though. Loved the flow and humour, you got me every time.
Fuck me!
I don't know how I'll manipulate that scar so it makes sense...
Anyway, I enjoyed the story even though there are some issues that you could improve very easly. Your dialoques should be placed better, and while perfectly readable I couldn't figure out who's talking half of the time - all bubbles are squeres so it doesn't indicate if it's a radio voice, a book or whatever. I wouldn't know that book can talk if it wasn't written. I won't ride on perspective or anatomy right now, cause I'm blown by the fact that you "de-powred" Mr Awesome with magic. Couldn't you just cut his legs off? XD
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