Roger: Getting better, yes, but you're lacking in comic formatting and panel layout, and backgrounds. Work on your like widths, and also, consistent text. Keep up the improvement!
Zest: Pretty good. Watch your line widths, and keep up with the quality of line throughout. The text in the middle felt a little out of place. I know it was supposed to be a text/story book font, but it seemed more out of place than fitting.
and of course, DON'T FORGET TO RESIZE! haha
Both comics were simple and solid story-wise. Very cute and fun. :>
Roger: I can see quite a bit of improvement. Your figures and lines look more solid. Definitely work on your backgrounds, though. You have lots of little details in your simple characters- try to toss in some more detail in your backgrounds as well. Also pleeease try to make your dialogue text a bit more uniform in size. There were a few parts where it got so tiny I wasn't able to read all of the words. :C
Zesty: Thems some big pages, bro. LOL. Complete opposite issue I had with Roger's comic. The text was enormous. That accident aside- your story was cute. "Die in a fire, please." I lol'd. Your lines got a bit messy at the end, gotta watch that. Also, backgrounds. When I got to the last page, I thought the carpet fibers were grass blades and I was like "...when did they get outside?" :T Try to make your backdrops a bit more clear if you're not gonna be using color to make 'em pop.
In comparison to the last one I did here on void I did better. Overall I've grown a lot not only as an comic artist but an artist in general. I'm having so much fun I don't care if I lose : D
I'm proud of myself and excited to see AmanitaZest's take on Massimo and Max
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