Great job guys, both comics were very entertaining. Delya your story was hilarious. I liked how you mentioned the porn collection being seen from space on your last page in the newspaper from Himie's battle lol.
angieness:
I was really unsure of what happened from page 6 onwards, it would have helped to show what happened between that page and the last. Your comics sometime feel as though you got some ideas but you want to try to incorporate them all into one comic, which can lead to some confusing results.
to be honest the idea was quite simple: Awesome asked Blurgas to change reality so he would be known as a hero, and not a nutcase - Blurgas said he couldn't do it and Awesome went back to the toruney.
I lost so I'll stick to the fact that Awesome got banned from the tourney ;)
Del-I really enjoyed the silly story and the little girl was adorable. The coloring and the expressions were very well done. And yes, like Qyz said, backgrounds! While it's true no comic needs a background on every panel or hell, every page, just a few more in there would have given me a better sense of place.
Wolcik-It's good to see that you're experimenting with different things in the inking, but you definitely need to try to be consistent. Sometimes the linework is all very thin and technical, but then all of a sudden it gets super thick and graphic like the second page 4th panel. I was really unsure of what happened from page 6 onwards, it would have helped to show what happened between that page and the last. Your comics sometime feel as though you got some ideas but you want to try to incorporate them all into one comic, which can lead to some confusing results.
Del: It's funny and good, but lacking in backgrounds.
Wolcik: Looks like you already learned your lesson in trying to do too much with too little time. My other advice would be to focus on perspective some. The first and most obvious example is Page 3, Panel 1 where those two characters aren't on the same plane at all together. They even look disjointed from the building in the background as well.
Cherubas: Thanks, bro! Haha, yeah I know the newspaper thing has been done before. I have done it before in a past battle. However, I felt it relevant due to the fact that both this comic and Hiemie's were for the same tourney. It amused me, anyway. Sorry you didn't feel the same!
Pyras: Yeah, I was sick and REALLY pressed for time with this one. :C I know it's pretty thrown together. Thanks for the crits! Much appreciated. And I can be Delta if I want to. >:T
Delta: same deal as before: great characters, great humor, short and sweet, but almost no backgrounds XD let's see you pull out the stops if you make it to next round! I also liked the colors more in the last cOmicron because it was more cohesive/consistent.
Wolcik: man I really wanted to like your comic more but the plot was just all over the place :( I only understood about half of the situation, I think part of the problem is that there are plot points you have yet to show us in BBs or otherwise, such as his mourning (read: rampage) period and his Awesome Revenge story, both of which take place before this.
But keep it up, you both worked well despite these minute flaws!
Delya I love your art, a lot. Super punching a little girl scores big points with me too, i got a pretty solid laugh from that. My only real gripe comes at the end. Hiemie isn't the first or last artist to do a newspaper ending, so breaking the fourth wall for that nod seems forced and unnecessary. Especially since I think you could have come up with a more comical second headline. Otherwise, I enjoyed the comic pretty thoroughly.
I learnt my lesson with plot writting here - I should stick to simpler jokes. I also should have finished 3 last pages with this boxing battle instead of trying to place colors on all pages which I failed anyway.
Qyzex:
My problem is that I have basic ideas of what should happen, but I execute them without the real feeling all the way - unlike last3 pages that could have been so much fun.
I wanted to add cast to previews, but I run out of time.
The first page where Nex shows up was merged from two pages in which he complained about being rejected by chicks and finding out P2's club ruined, and Blurgas would rebuild it so Awesome would get a wibe from that. That would also make his bedroom scene more compeling, but it needed better writting anyway and I should have done dialoques days before actually putting it.
I just a concept of cute colors for his PJs and batchrobe. I wanted to add more text, but I could think straigh at that point and conclusion is meh.
TODK:
Like MrKent in previous round I went for page count, but I really believed that I would be able to color it like I did my last Worltex's BB.
Delya:
Im glad you enjoyed it at least. I was very concious about Nex and he seemed like a character harder to draw tham hiemie.
I really like your - I enjoyed seeing Awesome at book signin since it made it feel legit. His costume on the other hand I prefer to be closer to skin and not hanging like you drew on 3rd page. on 4th page you drew him hitting Nex like he was holding back much more than hitting that little girl - Bob's pose wise. 4rd page took me some time to digest untill it became funny as "so you made awesome hit a girl while looking quite sane, I guess" - but then the punchline as it was all a set up for a villanous win due banning XD Awesome stuff
Wol: Dude! That was awesome! It was a bit hard to follow, but I still got the gist of it and your humor was great. :) Really enjoyed all the terrible jokes, haha. Totally had me laughing when I got to the "interrupting cow" joke. That's always been a fave, great to see it put to good use. I think your take on Nex was fun and I really enjoyed seeing him in your style. Thanks so much for a fun fight. <3
Qyz and DK: I KNOWWW AAA I'm sorry, I pulled this in just a couple days and I reallllyyyy crapped out on the backgrounds and writing. :C I just kinda stuck with what I knew best since that's all I had time for.
Wolcik, major props for finishing a pretty solid comic, but it was quite hard to follow as Qyz says, the plot was a little disjointed and could have been a lot clearer or more straightforward.
Delya - it was essentially a one gag comic even though it was a pretty great gag. Was expecting more out of you ):
Wolcik, you weren't lying when you said it'd be hard to read, haha. It was a bit confusing, and I'm writing this an hour after I read it... and I don't really remember what happened. Yeah, I think you should have went for quality over page count this time around. I did enjoy the little bonus fight at the end. Almost think you woulda had more fun of a comic if you went that route, maybe it's just me. Good job pushing through to the end, though!
Delya. Oh my dear lord, I haven't laughed that hard at a single gag in a comic in quite a while. I even kinda saw it coming, too, and it still had me chuckling my nuts off! Again, impressive showing on a comic done in two fuckin' days. Same crit as last time, though. BACKGROUNDS, DEL. And you know what the scary thing is? You probably had the most sane Mr. Awesome I've ever seen... totally unexpected!
No real excuses here, but I could do better - I was coloring till the very last second... to think that I wanted to shade this one :/
Got crushed by page count.
So, I've been really sick off and on these past couple of weeks. While I did originally have a better plot of sorts, I had to cut it waaaaaay down to compensate for lack of time. I didn't start drawing until yesterday ahaha...ha...
Regardless, I tested my limits and discovered they're wider than I thought. Made plenty of mistakes. Had fun. Etc. :)
Looking forward to your comic, Wol. I bet you did ace!
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