CHia very Cool art nice progression but wordlessly it doesn't close.
ROFLqu, That was great. sequential wise it's wonderful. the simplicity of art works in the action and expressions.
very COOL.
Chia: You had nice pacing that lacked any plot, because without dialoque it all felt random and the only thing I got was that Ajay woke up in the morning XD Sexy nurse felt especially random and forced voteriser (like sexy cave dungeon in my entry). I also disliked the fact that Andre looked whiter than supposely well tanned Ajay who you shaded to express that.
RoflQu: Best battle from you I've seen. You cut out some of stuff you told me you do, but it might be for the better as it might felt forced, and this way plot flows nicely. Straightforoward battle ;)
I almost had a spilled ink incident the last night of drawing where for some reason my tablet's usb was bent and wouldn't fit. I had to get a pair of pliers and jimmy that thing back open.
chia, it was very nice line work, but no text with a lot of panels that feel like talking heads make it hard to compare. also, i couldn't really tell andre was supposed to be andre for a couple of panels. thought he was just some scruffy white guy. work on varying up your characters more. it's fine to have a style but you don't want your characters to be too homogeneous, because that's not how people are. Giving that variance will only help to sell the world they're all in.
rofl, christ man. nice. the action was very good. to be quite frank, i didn't know you had it in ya, as it seems you usually veer for the funny. pleasantly surprised because you can tackle both quite well! And that added bit of back story was really quite nice.
To Chia: It's a shame this is unfinished, the scary memory/dream of the lollipop was interesting! And WHAT OF THE GUY WHO GOT HIS THROAT SLIT BY THAT FINE NURSE? :C I would like to know what happened in this, care to give us a summary of what this was supposed to be? Good job, though, it makes me glad that you did try. :)
To Rolf: ILU MAN. I love this. ILU. I love this. Ffffuuuu.
I have just very small crits. I think your texturing can be a liiittle too heavy sometimes. (Harder to play with since you're a traditional inker, so I can imagine.) I think the purple panels could have been a little more desaturated, and maybe a bit more on the reddish tint rather than that True Purple sort of feel. But that's just me.
No one's wrong to say that this is one of your best---and I think you did wonderful in your action, especially since you don't do that too often! The backstory was very dear, too, so nostalgic and sweet. :) You've done an excellent, EXCELLENT job, truely! <3 <3 <3 Can't wait to see your stuff in the next round!
@Chia: aww, your comic looked like it was going to be good too. Sorry you couldn't find the time to finish. Your line work and figures were looking pretty decent though. As for Andre, uhh...uhh..well he, uh....if it weren't for the scars I wouldn't of been able to tell it was him.
Rofl: Amazing stuff man! I do agree that this is some of your best work. Nice job with the colors and the action was great! I'd watch your anatomy though; it was looking a bit wonky in some places. And I think you panel layouts could be a bit cleaner. Other than that though, I have no complaints. Great stuff, rofl, keep this up!
Chia: If you had at least added dialogue it would have made the story comprehensible :( It's a shame because the art is gorgeous but the story isn't one that the image alone can carry, it seems completely reliant on its words. It might actually be good practice to try that (telling a story with pictures and little to no dialogue)
ROFLQU: This stuff is great, man. Andre's become a real interesting character to me as of late. A whole story's here, the colors are terrific, it's just a great submission all around. Props!
Chiiiaaaaa, why didn't you put some dialogue? Would have loved to have a story to go with this. This stuff isn't bad at all, even if Andre looks a bit like Spike from Cowboy Bebop.
Rofl, this was pretty fucking solid. I can definitely sense where you cut the story though, there's a big discontinuity with the black page. Really like the setup and the action was really meaty, you've improved tons.
This is why people get so fucking pissed at you when you don't turn shit in, Rofl. It's because you can dish out some damn fine comics. I felt a few panels felt really empty, and made a few gradients stand out awkwardly, but mostly this was pretty solid.
Chia, sucks you couldn't find time to work on this, it was looking pretty cool. Your Andre reminds me of a cross between Andre and Bang from BalzBlue, haha.
It was nice to see you so into this one FUCK YOU ROFLQU. I think this was your strongest comic to date that I've read, so really I think you deserve to go into the next round without a doubt.
Chia, would have been nice to see a finished comic but yeah, life gets in the way sometimes. It was a nice start though!
For the love of CHRIST, accept my uploads you stinking machine.
EDIT: I might have some problems. I'll mail if I can't get this off in the next 10 minutes.
EDITEDIT: I think we're okay, just have to do it one at a time.
Uploaded what I could. Didn't really get a chance to work on it at all this week due to my fiancee's family suddenly deciding to drop by... who still haven't left. v__v
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