Knomer I have been following you for a while and I have to say, you never disappoint. Great job!
IketeruGuy I really like your style and hope to see more of it!
Kuro: I always appreciate your critiques because they're so well thought out and really give me a lot to consider moving forward. Ironically, I had drawn all of the energy effects initially but changed them in the coloring process. I really get what you're saying about the coloring and I appreciate that comment the most as I will readily admit that I'm not very comfortable coloring and you've given me a very clear direction to go as I work on that. Thanks!
Strong entries guys!
knome, backgrounds seemed a little rushed & the scale didn't feel like it held. they're fighting in a subway car but in some panels, it felt like it was 40 feet wide. keeping tighter angles would've helped, or maybe keeping this more linear looking down the length of the train. Keeping tabs on how far apart everything is & then having your characters react to that would've given it a cool claustrophobic & more realistic effect. Anyway, try to be more consistent with that sort of thing. Good use of blacks & greys, & well thought out fight
steve, My biggest issue was the gutter bits. While that's maybe ok for a title card or an effect, I would've preferred bigger panels so there was more drawing real estate. leaving those huge gaps felt a little like i was getting cheated out of comics at times. With the colors, the soft shading looked like something you'd see in like an old malibu comic or something. I kind of thought it was a little too soft in spots, for my tastes anyway & ultimately soft wishy washy blends didn't seem to suit a hard nosed fight comic. Like the energy effect bits. I think I'd rather had seen you draw those, because you do great line work. Otherwise it was looking fairly solid. Great work for a two week span.
Fetus: Thanks for pointing out the color issues. I agree with you about the soft shading and as much as I like the yellow on each page I definitely see your point. I hope we get to battle in this thing.
Jho: It is somewhat nerve wracking when I look at it. Lol.
Knome- Excellent work sir, nice action and good dialogue. Always dig your use of heavy blacks. Your perspective work is coming along nice as well, though at times the ink on the backgrounds was a bit sloppy, crooked lines etc. nothing wrong with that though, it gives a certain focus effect.
Ikteru - Rad work as well, good action and nice anatomy. The coloring reminds me of comics in the mid-late 90's though, everything looks really smooth and soft, though that isnt necessarily a bad thing. Also, to me that yellow was a bit distracting, i tend to look at it more than the art.
Good work you two, i dunno how to vote cause i'm eager to go against both of you...
Ok, thanks! I appreciate the input on that. I'm thinking of things I can do for my next fight to mix it up a bit. That yellow branding on each page was the whole reason I decided to color at all. I really wanted to do the branding but I thought it would look weird if everything else was b/w. Thanks again!
Oh, sorry I didn't go into detail about that, haha. I liked the fact you had colors, but the application seemed off to me. I didn't really like the soft shading on the characters. But the use of it for backgrounds seemed to work. I think maybe it's personal preference. I did, however, really like the constant yellow used on each page.
HONKHONKHONK:
Iketeru, this was pretty good! I wasn't a fan of the colors, but the linework was good!
What didn't you like about the colors? I'm not defensive at all about this, because I hate coloring and I know I'm not that good at it. I'm just looking for areas that I can improve. I know that I need to more clearly define shapes in color and I think things look a little washed out sometimes. Anway, if you could let me know what you didn't like I'd appreciate your input. Thanks.
Knomer, really brutal contrast here, worked super well. I liked this comic, it was pretty simply in execution, but I had to back and make sure that Res was the main character, hah.
Guy, I really liked this, reminds me of a DC or marvel comic, and I'm getting a really heavy street fighter vibe, which is a great thing. Super impressed with how clean and finished it is.
Man, this battle was great. I love your inks Knomer. So much. This damn thing was superb. All I'd say is tight up the line work on a few of the panels, but that's about it
Iketeru, this was pretty good! I wasn't a fan of the colors, but the linework was good!
Good battle from you both!
sheldon:
IGuy, I don't think your art suited the mood you were going for. Maybe needs more black? Not sure. Still solid as hell.
Honestly, I wasn't really going for any mood. I was just trying to get to the fight. Maybe the narration changed that a bit though. I wrote all of the dialogue after the art was finished so that may have tweaked the original feel. Appreciate the critique, thanks.
Stephen:
Full colour, clean lines in just 2 weeks, very awesome. I like how old school the way your story played out, kinda superhero esque, and the old school face-off kinda way. I also like how you kept your consistency of narrating battles. Your layout is very creative, it's really nice seeing people go outside the borders. many people have tried to do that but you've done it quite well. Overall your entry kinda takes me to the past where I play mortal kombat games and stuff. It's a good feelin. nostalgia ahoy!
Thanks for the comments. I guess my stuff has generally had more of a superhero style bent to it for sure. Nostalgia is cool, but I hope it doesn't feel dated. Whether or not I go on in the tournament I will try to put more energy into my next fight. I think Knomer did that extremely well. I think the narration probably slows the pace of the fight down, so I might have to address that. I don't know, we'll see.
HOLY FUCKING SHIT KNOMER...
YOU DREW A BACKGROUND IN NEARLY EVERY PANEL!!! I loved it. Great job.
IGuy, I don't think your art suited the mood you were going for. Maybe needs more black? Not sure. Still solid as hell.
hello
first, Knome
I really like this, maybe I am biased but I really like quiet stories. your inks are great, I like how the roughness adds to the pressure of the situation, kinda like "this is eerily quiet/calm, something is wrong." your sense of space is also pretty great. I dunno, I really like raw quality overall. Your depiction of caesar is pretty cool in my book, he has this realistic mature air about him that makes me believe that yeah he could kick so much ass. I like how you made res a secondary character here, and I enjoy the way he talks too, in bratty kinda way. It's a good contrast. The fighting scenes are enjoyable. I cant wait to see more of this.
Stephen: Full colour, clean lines in just 2 weeks, very awesome. I like how old school the way your story played out, kinda superhero esque, and the old school face-off kinda way. I also like how you kept your consistency of narrating battles. Your layout is very creative, it's really nice seeing people go outside the borders. many people have tried to do that but you've done it quite well. Overall your entry kinda takes me to the past where I play mortal kombat games and stuff. It's a good feelin. nostalgia ahoy!
great entries both of you, im digging the contrast
haha dude...I saw those colored thumbnails and I was like "MAAAAAAAAAN". This round belongs to you. I forget things that I make Res do sometimes, but yeah flaming hands make sense. Super clean work you have, I also enjoy the similar themes of "demon within" and looking for "someone" stuff that we implemented.
Oh, and a note about my fight...I know that Res never threw fire before but I noticed in the Ponbiki fight that his hands lit up briefly so I decided to develop that a bit. Since he's been gone for a while I figured he'd learn some new moves.
Knomer. That was great. I really liked the choreography and the energy of that fight. It was fantastic. I was a little surprised by the ending though. Ha ha.
I like Res's character development and your work always has a very gritty, hardboiled look to it that I enjoy. Nicely done, sir. Best of luck to you!
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