If the first colorful page is a set up, you could put some text there - just a quick "near future" or "RTV vs Nameless" would make it feel less empty.
Watercolory greys gives more depth, but you should also clean whites better - I don't know whenever it's a scanner problem or you just didn't had the time, but second page has a panel with only head and 3 sheets of paper flying around and cleaning his one wouldn't be so hard :P
I know that fourth wall breaking dialoque suppose to be funny, and it might work with all other characters being silent, but I can't shake off the feeling like it was due lack of better explanation to short story. I know you can make a great and complex story, which hurts when RTV breaks the character by saying fourth wall breaking comment - at least that's my opinion.
Rtv, you do have some very nice inks, but I think you could mess with the contrast a bit more to make them look cleaner. There's not a whole lot to crit story-wise so I won't touch on that.
Any who, good luck in the next round!
RTV, your comic just SCREAMS Wu Tang Clan. Even when dudes are getting copped up they're all standin round lookin cool. Vary up your angles, bro. Great first page though. Super moody.
Hahah, good one rtv! I agree with jho about the b+w of yours, i haven't seen straight lines in a long time from you and you've gotten really good at them.
Can't wait for us to get matched up again ;)
Nicely done!
Njhinetc. sorry charlie~
RTV! That was some great mood building and then RTV opens his mouth and it was hilarious. Would've liked to seen finished fight, but it was cool none the less!
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