Drednaut vs Johnny Gord vs Portobello! vs The White Dwarf | All-Together Now! 2010 Round 3

Haven: This is a good quality comic, but far far too short. The dialogue can certainly be tightened, especially with the ships computers. beyond that there's just not enough to leave you satisfied. Thresher

Drawdan: You are obviously a fan of superhero comic books, I can tell from the massive guys and all the flying these guys are doing! The recap at the start is also a hint, but it does help as I'm coming into this round fresh. I like how your bullets are piercing the black borders, may nab that for myself. On page 6, one of the panel borders hasn't been completely filled in, which make sit look incomplete. Your dialogue is pretty tight, and so is your pencils. However, you seem to draw women really sticky, I know Arena's quite long but her student was also quite stretched. Most of your characters seem to have a defalut expression of "smirk" too. I also personally feel it's a bit of a cop out to have only one page for your opponents, and feel that you could have spent more of those 8 pages showcasing them. Some good quality work though, especially with the pencils. Thresher

haven: It's awesome to see it all in colors. I don't get why White Dwarf is in bear form, but I'm guessing you felt like bear drawning - I had that in my armageddon take XD This story feels like it has no conclusion as if you god bored with the idea of characters interacting. Drawdan: It's awesome to see you use preview page. It be even more stylish and finished if each paragraph had a picture - you could make a colored one and just use it each time you do battle (like for each section of info on FBI and such) and give it a more complete feel by sorting it into a frame of some sort. You could try to draw people with open mouths when they talk sometimes - try to capture the best moment of the scene as if it was a screenshot from a movie. I can see you started dividing your dialoques into more bubbles and it helps, but you also should leave some more space between boarders of ballons and actual text to make it easier for the eye and less tireing.

Wow really nice artwork in both this time around!

Awesome job you two.Drawdan, i liked the line work and shading in yours, very nice flow and build up as well, can't wait for the fight at the end now. Nice color in yours haven, i wish it was a little longer but besides that everything looked pretty good

I'm excited to see what you guys have in store for us.

no worries..Ive got a script and have already finished a couple of pages!

yeah dan, i dont want to see that planet ANY more lol

Drawdan: RRRRRRRRR!!!! What is it with me getting paired against characters that are in space!!!! Back to the ol' drawing board. Don't you sacrifice your story by stretching yourself all over the place, man. You don't have to include haven's plot into your own. Think about your own narrative!

RRRRRRRRR!!!! What is it with me getting paired against characters that are in space!!!! Back to the ol' drawing board.

oh my

This matchup just sucks cuz it's TOO COOL. o_o

Good luck both of you!

This is so evenly matched up I am going to Semi-Finaling EXPLODE.

Sweet, this matchup should be pretty good.