Elle vs Frequency6: BUZZCUT vs Kars vs Rtv! | All-Together Now! 2010 Round 3

I'm so sorry this took so long, guys. Holidays bent me over and beat me with a tire iron. I promise the final round won't take this long from me. Rtv!: This fight was great. You seriously had me worried with the way you were talking, but you put in so much effort into those few days that I was worried for nothing. You crammed so much plot into just those few pages, it's really impressive. We see Rtv! a total of one page, but it's so impressive how you drop the bomb on all of it. Even if you've never read any fight of his before this tournament, you've seriously made this feel like a real important story and it's a terrific introduction to him. This is an awesome set up and I'm so excited to see what you're gonna crank out story wise for the conclusion of this tournament. Your art for this wasn't bad, either. I like your solid black usage, although I think in the past you've colored on top of it? It looks really good either way. Your colors are pretty nice, but the backgrounds are a bit sparse (isn't bothering me here for whatever reason.) Anatomy still a weak point. One of the things I noticed in particular is how you draw the bottom row of teeth when people are talking. If you watch yourself talk in a mirror, look at how often those actually come up in a straight-on angle when talking normally. However, your story made up for this and helped pushed it along. You've got me excited for this final round. The build up is right and there's a lot of good shit going to it. I just hope that in the end you'll be able to tie it all together effectively. Marvelous job. tdkgunghoul: I really liked this fight, despite being short as well. I thought it was very cool how you took on Will's story here and adopted it for Elle. The three pages really pushed her character and it was a cool move. I really am excited to see how you plan on taking her in future battles, especially if you make this a big move for her. Your handwriting still needs some work. You really should work on improving it like you would any other aspect of your art. You actually do really decent poses, however just be careful your work doesn't become all joints, because it'll make your stuff look off in a heartbeat. Do some life drawing studies if you ever get the chance to, they'd really help you out. I was a little disappointed you couldn't connect Rtv! and Frequency6 in this, but at the same time, I'm okay with it. You at least showcased them and tried, so that's better than ignoring the characters outright. You managed to pull off the story in it at the very least and a cameo is better than nothing at all. You really did a good job in this tournament. I was thrilled to see how far you went and I know you were super busy those two weeks. The fact you didn't default during them is terrific and I'm really impressed at how you took over Will's story and helped further your own thing. You definitely deserved to make it to the semi-finals and you really improved weaker aspects of your art in it. You did great.

Omg... the use of the female anatomy 3x in a sentence had me rolling RTV... good work as always. Tdk... good job. make your gutters a little wide, it'll help to separate your panels.

TDKgunghoul: Firstly, I think your handwriting isn't quite neat enough to do handwritten speech bubbles. I know it can be tricky if you're used to digital, but there are some handy tutorials out there to use GIMP or such to get the job done. The dialogue in the first few pages seems crammed, and blocks out the art. What you want to have is a good balance between them, sometimes the art or writing takes centre stage but one should not engulf the other. In the last few pages, it's really unclear as to what's happening. Maybe some narrative text or a clearer storyline would help. It's also devoid of dialogue, unlike the first few pages. It's not a bad thing, but there are some instances where it looks like it's missing rather then intentionally lacking. It feels very short too, maybe a bit crammed. You do make good use of black and white line work, it's clear what's what and who's who. C: Thresher

RTV!: Damn that's some highly rendered weaponry you have going there. The major thing that leaps out at me is how static your shots are. For example, in page 2, there is almost no movement from the Detective Scarlett when the officer enters. Also, when she get's gunned down, the officer has the mos static stance ever, it's as if there's no recoil. Some of the dialogue could have been drawn out over another page too, and integrated with Page 6, which seems to be out of place both proportions wise and story wise. This would have made it flow much better. Once again, on page 7, we see literally no motion when the Grenade is tossed, it's just a copypaste of the two panels with the Grenade in a different position. The bouncing of the grenade though, is really good. I do love the "Merry Xmas Motherfucker!" on it though, seasonal grenades are so in this year. Overall I feel this was rushed, I bet you had alot more pages planned but had to cut it down due to time restraints. I know how that feels, and you do keep the essence of the comic within. Thresher

Hey tdk I'm really honored and happy that you kept soldat in your storyline. If this is the route elle's gonna take then make soldat proud ;.;

Good job guys!!! Rtv amazing color and and angles.

RTV...Nice colors as usual...exept you didnt include Kars...which sucks cause I wanted to see your version of him. tdk...Your showing some improvements but your backgrounds need ALOT more love and if your going to ink, varied line weights will improve the look of your finished work a great deal.

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Nice job guys!

nice job with the color rtv i agree with afab and i think on page 6 the pose looks a little stiff as well and i think on page7 the last two panels should be switched around. i thought the grenade disappeared then reappeared. all in all nicely done. gunghoul i got a little confused as to what was happening in the end. i was having a little trouble with your figures at some points and i think if there were some thicker lines it would make them pop more

I knew you'd pull through, Rtv! Poses on page 4 look slightly stiff, though.

Last day, good luck fellas!

Uploaded. Not much to see here, so yeah. Rtv, don't give up!

Going through some wicked stuff i thought i cleared up already, it actually got worse. I'm surprised i actually survived that shit without losing my fukking mind. The only reason i'll make effort to actually start drawing is to respect Tdk. as an opponent and refuse to default. Translation: Lower your expectations.

Just checking in to say: RTV, I just finished the studies for them, both these guys are a real pleasure to draw.

I see implosions on the Horizon... prepare to suffer!

BaaaaaAaaH, i cant do anything till the clock says "7 days left". But it'll do. In the meantime: Quick F6 Buzzcut designsheet updated. Rtv bio still a chaotic (and unsorted) mess, anything relevant can be found in any comic before the tourney. Finally i've got a fighter to deal with. To hell with stories, let's rumble! :D

Good luck guys! Give it your all!

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SUPER GREAT SEMI-FINALING.

Make it awesome!!!!

Good luck dudes : D!