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Carlo Baskins vs Dolly Dandellion vs Hakeem 'Essence' Washington vs Nutty the Squirrel | All-Together Now! 2010 Round 2

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Carlo Baskins vs Dolly Dandellion vs Hakeem 'Essence' Washington vs Nutty the Squirrel | All-Together Now! 2010 Round 2

By Chao-One

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Hakeem 'Essence' Washington

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Chao One: Man, real bummer. I hope to see you doing some quality stuff again in the future, because this is killing me to see nothing. Jackster: This was a really good comic, once again. I'm really like this 'story writing' narrative. It's a really interesting platform that's giving you a lot of freedom to work with without feeling like you're jumping around with plots, since it's all grounded by being a work of fiction (within a work of fiction). I was really entertained with Nutty being both the butler and the boyfriend, that is something very stream-of-consciousness and probably would be said by a child. The last panel on page 4 is absolutely gorgeous and I would love to see something more like that in the future. You had a lot of really good action in this fight, too. The flow of the action made my job all that easier by having my words written out for me, because it was in fact 'Great' and 'Marvelous'. I really enjoyed seeing an old-fashioned brawl and I felt it was really well done and considering the opponents were from a time where Void was built on ass-kicking action, very appropriate way to handle this match. Some of your faces on Hakeem and Carlo were a little funny, but on the other hand, Hakeem's face as he's being kicked by Dolly is very well done too. Your heads feel better, but I still think you need to develop your front to back head size, because it's feeling shallow there, still. I was not a fan of the arrow pointing panel-system, you need to work on your panels leading each other naturally. I can tell you're enjoying using Dolly again, and I'm glad about that. It's also great to see you using Nutty again too. Gibson V was certainly a change of pace, but you do well with your humor as well. I'm really excited to see the plot you come up with in the semi-finals and I'm really interested to see how you handle your next opponents. Good, Great, and Marvelous Job.

Jackster-this comic was great, it's one of the few comics lately to legitimately make me laugh and smile. You're definitely at your best when you're focusing on cute stuff. It of course wasn't perfect though which is why I'm typing in the comment box haha. Be careful with tossing photos into straight clean lineart, the photos on the wall of page 2 were distracting because of them being the only area on the panel that had any gray so my eyes wanted to go to them. I think that your human anatomy has gotten a lot better but was a bit weaker on furry Dolly. While most of the time she was right, there were panels where you made the neck extremely thick but gave her very narrow shoulders. The thick neck made her come across as more masculine but seeing the thick neck combined with the narrow shoulders threw me off.

Jackster: I don't have any possible advice to panel placement since it flows very naturally and if not you used arrows :P Awesome jokes XD

first default of the tourney...BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Now that was just motherfukkin bad ass!! Excuse my censorship. The references and dynamic movement are superior. Sweet combo execution followed by that double enemy k.o. I went back to see that a couple of times. Sick! Sakura has always been my favourite. I'm voting extra fanboy points for that.