Johnny Gord vs Mr Awesome vs Portobello! vs W-Warriors | All-Together Now! 2010 Round 1

Wolcik: I think you're one of the few people who I had in mind when I came up with this idea. So I was glad to see you sign up and do this fight and I think for the most part I liked what you ended up doing. Your black usage is getting much better, I can tell you're thinking a bit more carefully how you use them now as opposed to your haphazard approach with your Mr. Awesome BB after your scar match. You have a nice bit of detail on your people for the most part, but I think your backgrounds and objects don't get the same kind of love. You're relying too much on the grays to carry it and I think you should work on adding detail in the form of a black or even a different value of gray. Something to help make your backgrounds feel more like locations and less like Photoshop Fill. I thought your story started out strong, but at the end you kind of felt rushed and unfinished. It's a real shame you decided to not go with those original sketches you showed in your go for broke thread, because I felt they showed the kind of emotion that would have been an appropriate reaction for Mr. Awesome here. However, I hope you keep going with this no matter what happens. haven: Welcome back, haven! It's nice to see you doing comics again. I really liked your art here, a lot of nice simple backgrounds going on for this comic. Your tone usage was a good choice, it looks real good on page one, but then you suddenly switch to gray which is kind of jarring switch. However, the rest of it's nice still, although I think I like the lighter tones more. For some reason, this new Johnny Gord is revolting to me, like he has some kind of skin condition. Granted, he's a lizard man, so it makes sense. However, it feels like you don't have quite a good grasp on his head now. Even though you may have only one comic ahead, it wouldn't hurt to practice it out some more. You had a good story going on, but it's a real shame you didn't manage to get to the point to use your opponents. However, you have a real nice set up for what could be a cool story-arc and there's some nice foreshadowing going on, so if you move on to round two, we better see a damn good result of it.

I wasnt able to get to the pages with Mr. awesome, and i'm really sorry, Wolcik, because i feel like that's not fair to you. i'm going to give him another panel or two than what i have planned sort of by way of an apology, because i'll be finishing the story through BB if i lose regardless. EDIT: i also now realize that i in no way showed the reader that the story that the story would be continued in round 2. that last panel should have conveyed that a little more, because it was the "second string" cliffhanger, with the better one being on page 7, but unfortunately getting pages 6 and 7 done became impossible, and i opted for the "second string" cliffhanger rather than turning in a rushed entry. once again i'm really sorry wolcik, and i promise to give Mr awesome and W.W a little more spotlight if i do go through, because i do agree that this looks like a BB.

To be honest I wanted to just show a begining of things in the first round without bring too much drama. Bob's relative working on the rest of W-Warriors is a possibility for continuity, and just to show where they are in case other things are more important to the story in the future. Like usual I wanted to show some mistery: diffrent design of poster pictures, how Steven changed his suit and what's going on with clown - I'm not sold on this idea yet, but I'm thinking about using it since it's the second time I'm mixing Bob with circous. The idea with clown in this one is simple: it's a delusion in which I can show less graphically what happened to Gordon for trying to harm Stev'.

Haven, you win my heart for bringing Guy McManning into the picture, that was a blast! I just wish i could have seen where you planned on going with your story, i was sufficiently intrigued.

Wolcik, I had a bit of problem understanding some things, the first time, but I found out I had skipped a page XD It's not very complete, jumps from one thing to the next a lot, but it's nice and relatively complete, just wish it was nicer and completer. I dont know what the fuck is up with that clown, but it was totally awesome. Haven, I have the same complain as Wolcik. It's good, but it's not what it has to be.

I know I didn't put my best into this, but I'm just disapointed Haven - I understand you didn't finish the story, but wtih that level of detail put into those pages and there's no sigh of Mr.Awesome... It feels more like Beyond Battle than actual Battle to me :(

Uploaded - Sorry for such low quality and rushed job. I'll be scoled by my techers anyway, beacuse I concentrated on this Battle instaed of homework XD

Thanks. Good luck Wolcik.

Oh fuck! It's up XD I better start drawning something :P Good Luck Haven

And so the journey begins! Do your best you guys! Let's see how much you've improved Haven!